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Official ATAR Notes ‘Post Your Poetry’ Thread

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Coffee:

--- Quote from: Marvin K. Mooney on December 11, 2017, 04:32:29 pm ---Hi guys,
I'll start this off. For Unit 2 English we had to write a WW1 poem as a creative SAC, so here's mine:
In Sludge and in Shade‘Way back at home in his quiet home town,
The soldier’s dream world had begun to burn down.
His hopes had been buried in the wet, blood-red sludge
Of the trench-ridden fields he daily would trudge.
‘Til his life would be shortened by bullet or blade,
To lie among others, in sludge and in shade.

He once had a friend in the quiet home town,
Whose face, by the sun, had been slowly burned brown.
Together they once had shared a grand life,
But then they’d gone southward to join in the strife.
Their friendship was broken, shattered, repealed
The fragments were scattered upon the blood field.

The world was a chaos of noise and of pain.
But he was oblivious to all but the rain.
The shells beat down, like glowing red suns,
While bullets whined deathly, from the muzzles of guns.
But even with this, he only could know,
The cold of the wind and the cold of the snow.

Hades stalked stealthy in every dark hole,
And extinguished Life’s last lingering coal.
The black, cold fingers of death’s hard hand,
Crept amid the warriors of that dark land.
Many a man would curse the sad war,
The sorrow of death, these many, they bore.

The wind whipped his hair, the rain his face.
Up and down the wet, cramped ditch his feet began to pace.
The silence was heavy, death in the air,
While ‘way back at home, not many would care
If his life was cut short, by bullet or blade,
To lie among others, in sludge and in shade.

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Thanks for starting us off, Marvin! This is really good, I'm impressed. :)


--- Quote from: Joseph41 on December 11, 2017, 04:46:05 pm ---Me too, which is why I'm really looking forward to this thread. Writing doesn't need to be perfect.

Case in point:

SpoilerAlas!, a crashing on the rocks -
A tide of timing makes its play;
Through pain and heartache, numbing knocks,
It thunders in, through night and day.

A tide of timing makes its play -
Goliath’s spit is David’s rain -
It thunders in, through night and day,
And all you do is fake and feign.

Goliath’s spit is David’s rain -
When storms set in, they’re never brief.
And all you do is fake and feign,
Take refuge in misplaced belief.

When storms set in, they’re never brief;
You take the bruises undeserved,
Take refuge in misplaced belief,
And maintain hope, still unreserved.

You take the bruises underserved,
Through pain and heartache, numbing knocks,
And maintain hope, still unreserved -
Alas!, a crashing on the rocks.
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I really liked this too. Love the atmosphere. :)

Out of curiosity, how do you guys go about writing poetry? I've only ever written prose, so all my attempts at writing poetry have failed and I don't really know where to start. :-\

Mada438:
Just made my own thread for poetry, check out my first post!  :)

Joseph41:

--- Quote from: Coffee on December 11, 2017, 04:50:22 pm ---Out of curiosity, how do you guys go about writing poetry? I've only ever written prose, so all my attempts at writing poetry have failed and I don't really know where to start. :-\

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I sit down at a café, and honestly just start writing shit. I'm nearing 1,000 poems according to Tumblr over the last few years. Basically all of those are just, like, word vomit or something at the time.

If you're struggling to start, though, I really recommend stealing somebody else's structure, and going from there. So like: "Okay, cool, they've started with six syllables here, with emphasis on the last syllable. I'll start with that."

Yertle the Turtle:

--- Quote from: Coffee on December 11, 2017, 04:50:22 pm ---Out of curiosity, how do you guys go about writing poetry? I've only ever written prose, so all my attempts at writing poetry have failed and I don't really know where to start. :-\

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You start with a general feeling and what you want to write about. You then find a metre that flows nicely and simply write. I know that it isn't that simple, but that is kinda how it seems to happen ;P

Mada438:
Do you reckon i could make another sticky thread regarding quotes??

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