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gthomas123

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Grammar check help!
« on: September 07, 2017, 06:17:47 pm »
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Hi,

I want to use the following sentences in the writing SAC about my detailed study (topic is shoushika = low birth rate). Context is an informative report on the causes of shoushika. Can someone please let me know if the following sentences are grammatically correct? (Teacher has not got back to me yet).

1985年に「1.57ショック」ということから、日本では少子化はしんこくな社会もんだいになりました。
(Since the “1.57 Shock” of 1989, low birth rate has become a severe social problem in Japan.)

東京新聞のき事によると、2015年に23,167人の子どもがほいくえんにうけ入れられなかったそうです。   
(According to an article in the Tokyo Shimbun, in 2015 23,167 children were unable to get into childcare/daycare [because of too few places].)

日本のげんだい社会で色々な少子化になったげんいんがあります。   
(In Japan’s present society, there are many causes contributing to the low birth rate.)

Thank you so much!

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Re: Grammar check help!
« Reply #1 on: September 09, 2017, 06:23:02 pm »
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1985年に「1.57ショック」ということから、日本では少子化社会のしんこくなもんだいになりました。
(Since the “1.57 Shock” of 1989, low birth rate has become a severe social problem in Japan.)

I'm not sure about the other two, but the third one looks a bit unnatural. I'm sure your teacher will be able to correct it :) Good luck!