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2017 AA Club Week 8
« on: September 11, 2017, 05:08:30 pm »
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Background: A piece of graffiti or art however you want to call it was recently named Britain's favourite artwork. People got mad. Stuff was written on the issue. Here is an opinion piece discussing this. It was accompanied by this visual of the iconic artwork being discussed. Have fun.

You'd have to be living under a rock to not be familiar with good old Banksy and his work. From the streets of the world to the internet to our art galleries - the elusive artist's fame seems to be on the up and up. So why is everyone so up in arms at the fact that Britain named his iconic Girl with Balloon as its favourite artwork?

In a climate of much unrest and uncertainty, Banksy, like many other graffiti artists, uses the streets as a canvas to expose and undermine the most sordid aspects of our society. It might not be as high class and sophisticated as some critics would like but surely moving our eyes from our screens and onto the world and issues around us is more important and what better way is there to achieve that then to slap it right in front of us to see on the way to work?

Giving an artistic voice to those who may not have had the opportunity or desire to attend a prestigious art school, it's a vehicle of expression for all; everyone and anyone from the poshest to the most oppressed can enjoy these masterpieces and appreciate that at least someone is out there trying to do what our politicians seem to have forgotten to do amidst their squabbling -- create change.

This is why Banksy's artworks are so heavily appreciated and why this iconic artwork was named Britain's favourite artwork. Who wouldn't love it?

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Re: 2017 AA Club Week 8
« Reply #1 on: September 11, 2017, 09:11:55 pm »
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The opinion piece emphatically argues that Banksy's artwork allows for the expression and manifestation of one's beliefs, which may incite change throughout society. The article highlights that only those "living under a rock" are unfamilar with Banksy and his work, thereby presenting Banksy as an illustrious and renowned artist. Through this, the writer postions the reader to view the fact Banksy's artwork was named as Britain's favourite as an expected event rather than as an anomaly. By referring the artist as "good old Banksy", the writer employs colloquial language to portray Bansky as a compassionate and caring figure. This prompts the reader to perceive Banksy as a person who is worthy of the honour given to him. Furthermore, the writer's assertion that Banksy undermines the most "sordid aspects of our society", manoeuvres the reader to view Banksy's artwork as a means of enacting justice. The writer continues by stressing the notion that "the poshest to the most oppressed" can appreciate Banksy's artworks. In doing this, the writer suggests that Bansky's artwork appeals to all different types of people in spite of economic status or prosperity. Therein, Bansky's artworks are depicted to the reader as unversally beloved. Additionally, the writer presents Bansky's artwork as "iconic", which has connotations of greatness and excellence, thus further enhancing their portrayal of Bansky's artwork as well as positioning the reader to view it as an artwork worthy of its title. The article concludes with the rhetorical question "who wouldn't love it?", which further alludes to the idea that Banksy's artworks are universally loved. In doing this, the writer endeavours to dichotomise those who critique Banksy's artworks and those who appreciate it. In illustrating Banksy's popularity throughout the article, the writer suggests that the most sensible group of people are those who appreciate Banksy's artwork, hence inclining readers to appreciate and admire Banksy's artwork.
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« Reply #2 on: September 13, 2017, 08:31:00 pm »
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The author delves into Banksy’s brilliance and talent as an artist. The slang term "good old" before Banksy's name insinuates that the artist continuously fulfils the public's expectations. The sense of casualness, exemplified through the British vernacular, inspires readers to perceive both Banksy and the author as fellow British citizens who have their country's best interests at heart. Moreover, the repetition of up in “up and up" accentuates the incessant rise of Banksy’s prominence. Thus, readers are positioned to recognise his extraordinary talent and may be baffled as to why his masterpieces do not merit the title of Britain’s favourite artwork.

Further, the author accentuates the myriad of benefits stemming from Banksy’s artworks. The revelation that his pieces “expose [the] most sordid of aspects of society” may educe readers’ shock and challenge their preconceived notions that Banksy and by extension, graffiti artists, simply demolish buildings. Instead, the qualifier “most” highlights the power their art yields in tackling seemingly irresolvable problems. Simultaneously, through the verb “expose”, the author portrays Banksy in a righteous hue- with a deliberate intent of revealing morally ignoble acts. Hence, readers are challenged to view the public’s backlash towards as unwarranted and perceive those who are irate as ignorant of Banksy’s veritable intentions. Indeed, readers are compelled to realise that his artworks, which “slap [the problems] right in front of us” is an effective way which undoubtedly forces the public to acknowledge prevalent issues. Additionally, the author appeals to the middle class through the concession that the artwork is ”not as high class and sophisticated as some critics would like" (If I’m not analysing the quote, is there any point in quoting?) and by deliberately mentioning those who “may not have had the opportunity to attend a prestigious art school”. In so doing, readers may recognise the merits of art giving impetus to change to people who, like them, grew up without an artistic experience. Indeed, the repetition of “iconic” and “appreciate” spurs readers to question why they fail to treasure Banksy’s artworks, given its concomitant benefits.

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« Reply #4 on: September 20, 2017, 08:05:47 am »
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hey there, here's my analysis

Beginning the article with a warm description of ‘good- old Banksy’and pairing it with a cliché: that people ‘living under a rock’ wouldn’t know who Banksy is, foregrounds the expectation for the audience, who do not know him, to solidly accept he is a prominent figure in society. His character is further credited by highlighting his success on various platforms ‘from the internet to art galleries’which goes ‘up and up’ allowing for the readers who are not privy with Banksy to establish a limitless renowned and successful image as an artist in their mind. Utilising irony by following a sarcastically confused question, which questions the validity of Britain’s favourite artwork to be an artwork of the highly credited Banksy, the writer attempts to manipulate the readers to view the people, who oppose this decision, as unreasonable and petty in their reasoning.
The following paragraph is designed to reveal the humane and moral sphere of Banksy, which intends to garner attention from the ethical and moral- based readers. Although Banksy is depicted as a ‘graffiti artist’ which may negate the ‘high class and sophisticated’’ persona of Banksy earlier described, the emphasis of Banksy ‘expos[ing]’ and ‘undermin[ing] the most sordid aspects of society’ conveys to the readers of the true honour of art, the righteous and truthful aspect. Ensuring the audience shares this viewpoint, the use of inclusive language to describe the movement of our eyes from growth- preventing ‘screen all day’onto the ‘world and issues around us’ prompts readers to ponder the good and morality of their everyday ‘work.’ This vulnerable questioning moment is utilised by the author to laud Banksy for ‘slap[ping]’ a wake- up call in the audiences’ way to work. Banksy’s decision is implied to enrich the human understanding of the ‘sordid’ world, hence the ethos- characterised audience likely to accept and endorse Banksy’s artwok to be a reciepent of the award. Underlying in the paragraph is Banksy’s moral conflict with the ‘sordid’ world. As the author’s ‘sordid’ description of the world brings attention to the dishonourable and immoral sphere of the globe, Banksy’s depiction as a modern Robin Hood imparts his role as a moral warrior who raises awareness of the socially- destructive elements of the world. In this way, a sense to support Banksy is established within the reader as they do not integrate into the ‘sordid’ world.

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« Reply #5 on: September 21, 2017, 12:40:04 pm »
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To highlight the significance of Banksy’s work, the writer juxtaposes Banksy against the idle and negligent politicians who they claim are doing little to address pressing issues in current British society. One way in which they convey this is in the way they aim to prompt readers’ guilt, by insisting that they need to “mov[e] [their] eyes from [their] screens” and onto societal problems around them that are “more important”. Indeed, readers are likely to feel guilty and ashamed for being totally absorbed in their personal life and interests to the extent of disregarding more demanding public issues, which the writer claims Banksy has managed to do. Hence, the writer aims to evoke readers’ sense of appreciation towards Banksy for directly targeting “the most sordid aspects” of society “in a climate of much unrest and uncertainty.” Readers are indeed likely to feel appreciative of Banksy from such a description and may see the value in his work as they realise that he is tackling societal issues head front and is striving to restore a sense of security in the British public in a period of angst and disillusionment. Indeed, the image of 'Girl with Balloon' is designed to touch the sensitivities of the reader, and to invite them to reflect on the decline in British society's morale. The writer further aims to illustrate how important it is to appreciate Banksy’s artwork, by aiming to generate a sense of awe and inspiration in readers when he likens the artwork to “giving an artistic voice… a vehicle of expression for all” amidst the inaudible, mindless “squabbling” of politicians. Readers are likely to view Banksy’s artwork with a sense of awe and inspiration because they would come to see it as an opportunity for common people with a sound mind – as opposed to the small-minded, misguided politicians – to make meaningful political statements about issues in the country and lead British society out of its current state of political turmoil. As such, the writer positions readers to appreciate the goodwill conveyed through Banksy’s work, affirmed by their unequivocal rhetorical question: “who wouldn’t love it?” which suggests to readers that the positive intent of the artwork is undeniable. 
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With the intent of vindicating the esteem of Banksy’s artwork, Girl with Balloon, the writer opens by praising the artist. Employing the awe-inspiring tone, ‘from the streets of the world’ to ‘art galleries,’ the writer stridently foregrounds the way Banksy’s work extends from the implicitly mundane of landscapes to the highbrow, intellectual-type exhibitions. Not only does this comparison of visual mediums underscore the overarching, and thus well-respected, artistic influence of Banksy, but it too compels readers to understand that his work resonates with ‘everyone and anyone’; regardless of status. By hence constructing a parallel between Banksy and the quality of ant-discrimination, as further fortified by the warm, inclusive phrase ‘for all,’ the writer positions readers to appreciate the permeating, societal impact of the artist’s works. The cleansing power of this influence is indeed articulated by the writer, who intimates that ‘much unrest and uncertainty’ can be placated by Banksy’s ‘expos[ure] and undermin[ing]’ of society’s ‘most sordid aspects.’ Through the inherently disconcerting adjectives, ‘unrest’ and ‘uncertainty,’ the writer seeks to inspire a feeling of tension in readers, who are thus coaxed to reflect on the unrelenting, disturbing energy that so often consumes society. Yet, by reminding readers that Banksy ‘uses the streets’ as ‘a vehicle for expression,’ the writer vibrantly posits that it is through Banksy’s artwork, that civilians can temporarily distance themselves from this seemingly constant state of anxiety; for Banksy’s artwork allows for ‘expression’ and a consequent opportunity for self-reflection. The suggested, cathartic energy of Banksy’s work is further bolstered by the accompanying visual image of a girl releasing a red, heart-shaped balloon. Serving as a symbolic manifestation of intense, human emotion, the balloon and its release, endeavours to animate and thus clarify for readers what healing abilities Banksy’s artwork harbours. And so, seeking for readers to appreciate the spiritual resonance of Banksy’s piece, Girl with Balloon, the writer ultimately yearns for them to understand its appraisal as ‘Britain’s favourite artwork.’

NB: There is no specific argument- I'm just covering the bases of the piece in a condensed paragraph.
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« Reply #7 on: September 22, 2017, 01:17:15 pm »
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« Reply #8 on: September 23, 2017, 04:37:09 pm »
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hey there, here's my analysis

Beginning the article with a warm description of ‘good- old Banksy’and pairing it with a cliché:some odd use of grammar here. Stick to commas. that people ‘living under a rock’ wouldn’t know who Banksy is, foregrounds the expectation for the audience<----- awkward expression here, who do not know him, to solidly accept he is a prominent figure in societyI get where you're going with this, but poor expression and coherency have disrupted meaning . His character is further credited by highlighting his success on various platforms ‘from the internet to art galleries’which goes ‘up and up’ allowing for the readers who are not privy with Banksy to establish a limitless renowned and successful image as an artist in their mind. Utilising irony by following a sarcastically confused question<---- awkward expression. Utilising is a very clunky verb. Just stick to the simple 'using', which where is the evidence of this? How is irony established? questions the validity of Britain’s favourite artwork to be an artwork of the highly credited Banksy, the writer attempts to manipulate the readers to view the people, who oppose this decision, as unreasonable and petty in their reasoning. A bit of an unclear conclusion, given the lack of evidence.
The following paragraph is designed to sounds a bit too systematicreveals the humane and moral sphere of Banksy, which intends to garner attention from the ethical and moral- based readers. Although Banksy is depicted as a ‘graffiti artist’ which may negate the ‘high class and sophisticated’’ persona of Banksy earlier describedgood, the emphasis of Banksy ‘expos[ing]’ and ‘undermin[ing] the most sordid aspects of society’ conveys to the readers of the true honour of art, the righteous and truthful aspectgreat, but you could take it even further and do some word-based analysis. What are the connotations of sordid?. Ensuring the audience shares this viewpoint, the use of inclusive language to describe the movement of our eyes from growth-<--- bit of an odd expression. Not entirely sure what you're saying preventing ‘screen all day’onto the ‘world and issues around us’ prompts readers to ponder the good and morality of their everyday ‘work.’? This vulnerable questioning momentI think I'm a bit lost is utilised by the author to laud Banksy for ‘slap[ping]’ a wake- up call in the audiences’ way to work. Banksy’s decision is implied to enrich the human understanding of the ‘sordid’ world, hence the ethos- characterised audience likely to accept and endorse Banksy’s artwok to be a reciepent of the awardcould have been some further analysis to get to this point. Try not to have too much evidence without analysis.. Underlying in the paragraph is Banksy’s moral conflict with the ‘sordid’ world. As the author’s ‘sordid’ description of the world brings attention to the dishonourable and immoral sphere of the globe, Banksy’s depiction as a modern Robin Hood imparts his role as a moral warrior who raises awareness of the socially- destructive elements of the world. In this way, a sense to support Banksy is established within the reader as they do not integrate into the ‘sordid’ world.This last part confuses me. I'm not sure how you got to this conclusion.

(its incomplete- yr 12 and all ;))

Well done on the analysis! You have a really good understanding of argument techniques and their consequent impact on readers. To improve, I'd recommend that you work on your clarity and expression. Try to incorporate some shorter, more sharper sentences into your analysis. This will prevent clunky, incoherent expression. Keep up the great writing  :)
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« Reply #9 on: September 23, 2017, 08:05:16 pm »
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To highlight the significance of Banksy’s work, the writer juxtaposes Banksy against the idle and negligent politicians, who they claim are doing little to address pressing issues in current British society. One waysounds a bit systematic. Launch straight into your evidence in which they convey this is in the way they aim to prompt readers’ guilt, by insisting that they need to “mov[e] [their] eyes from [their] screens” and onto societal problems around them that are “more important”. Indeed, readers are likely to feel guilty and ashamed for being totally absorbed in their personal life and interests to the extent of disregarding more demanding public issuesthis is a great inference, but I think it would be received stronger if it were made before the reader effect. Examiners are likely to be left hanging on where the guilt is coming from otherwise., which the writer claimswhere? Banksy has managed to do. Hence, the writer aims to evoke readers’ sense of appreciation towards Banksy for directly targeting “the most sordid aspects” of society “in a climate of much unrest and uncertainty.” Readers are indeedtry not to overuse. I think this will become less of an issue when you rearrange your argument. likely to feel appreciative of Banksy from such a description and may see the value in his work as they realise that he is tackling societal issues head frontinformal and is striving to restore a sense of security in the British public in a period of angst and disillusionmentnice. But this analysis carries the same issue with the previous one. It is more logical to have readers' sense of appreciation follow this.. Indeed, the image of 'Girl with Balloon' is designed try not to be too subjective. You can never really know what it is designed for. So try seeks/endeavours/aimsto touch the sensitivities bit of an awkward expression.of the reader, and to invite them to reflect on the decline in British society's moralewait....where is the analysis of the image? How did you get to this conclusion?. The writer further aims to illustrate how important it is to appreciate Banksy’s artwork, by aiming to generate a sense of awe and inspiration in readers when he likens the artwork to “giving an artistic voice… a vehicle of expression for all” amidst the inaudible, mindless “squabbling” perhaps connect the adjectives inaudible and mindless to a word-level analysis of 'squabbling.' It sounds less subjective. of politicians. Readers are likely to view Banksy’s artwork with a sense of awe and inspiration because they would come to see it as an opportunity for common people with a sound mind – as opposed to the small-minded, misguided politicians this is too subjective. When ever you make judgements like this, ensure that firm evidence is close by. – to make meaningful political statements about issues in the country and lead British society out of its current state of political turmoil. As such, the writer positions readers to appreciate the goodwill conveyed through Banksy’s work, affirmed by their unequivocal rhetorical question: “who wouldn’t love it?” which suggests to readers that the positive intent of the artwork is undeniable.  good

Great piece of analysis. To improve, I'd recommend that you fully tease out evidence before coming to the reader effect. It just strengthens your argument. Also try and avoid subjective statements. But apart from these minor things, your analysis and break down of argument is strong. Keep it up :)
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« Reply #10 on: September 24, 2017, 12:14:18 pm »
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Great piece of analysis. To improve, I'd recommend that you fully tease out evidence before coming to the reader effect. It just strengthens your argument. Also try and avoid subjective statements. But apart from these minor things, your analysis and break down of argument is strong. Keep it up :)
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« Reply #12 on: September 25, 2017, 10:20:05 pm »
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Back due to popular demand: Week 8 of the AA Club.

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You'd have to be living under a rock to not be familiar with good old Banksy and his work. From the streets of the world to the internet to our art galleries - the elusive artist's fame seems to be on the up and up. So why is everyone so up in arms at the fact that Britain named his iconic Girl with Balloon as its favourite artwork?

In a climate of much unrest and uncertainty, Banksy, like many other graffiti artists, uses the streets as a canvas to expose and undermine the most sordid aspects of our society. It might not be as high class and sophisticated as some critics would like but surely moving our eyes from our screens and onto the world and issues around us is more important and what better way is there to achieve that then to slap it right in front of us to see on the way to work?

Giving an artistic voice to those who may not have had the opportunity or desire to attend a prestigious art school, it's a vehicle of expression for all; everyone and anyone from the poshest to the most oppressed can enjoy these masterpieces and appreciate that at least someone is out there trying to do what our politicians seem to have forgotten to do amidst their squabbling -- create change.

This is why Banksy's artworks are so heavily appreciated and why this iconic artwork was named Britain's favourite artwork. Who wouldn't love it?

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The author lauds Bansky's balloon girl painting and attempts to defend the art from critics. The author attempts to alienate dissenters by characterising them as "living under a rock" thus implying that they are ignorant and oblivious to Banksy's art works. This shames audience members who are unaware of his art, thus elevating "good old Banksy" to become perceived as something akin to a legend. To contextualise street art for readers who are unaware, the author describes it as using "the streets as a canvas to expose and undermine the most sordid aspects of our society" "in a climate of much unrest and uncertainty". The portrayal of society as "sordid" with "much unrest and uncertainty" is used to establish a grim mood, whereby the audience is positioned to perceive street artists as heroes who highlight the "issues around us". This bolsters appraisal of Banksy, as the audience is now left in a state of admiration for the heroic artist capitalising pressing issues that draw the attention of the audience "from our screens". The author advances the notion that the actions of street artists is "a vehicle of expression for all". The audience is positioned to appreciate the effort that artists are putting into "these masterpieces" from the heroic deeds of artists to "create change". The image depicts a sombre child reaching out to a red, heart shaped balloon symbolic of the powerful gift of love. This reinforces the influential paintings street artists make, because they resonate influential messages such as "there is always hope". By juxtaposing the heroism of artists with "what our politicians [have] forgotten to do amidst their squabbling", the author insinuates that these artists to be more influential and contributing to society, hence evoking awe and reverence for these artists from readers. The author once again attempts to alienate individuals who disprove of Banksy, through the rhetorical question of "who wouldn't love it?"

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« Reply #13 on: September 25, 2017, 10:46:21 pm »
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The author lauds Bansky's balloon girl painting and attempts to defend the art from critics. The author attempts to alienate dissenters by characterising them as "living under a rock" thus implying that they are ignorant and oblivious to Banksy's art worksnice. Try to switch up your sentence structure (ie. from active to passive) . This shames audience members who are unaware of his art, thus elevating "good old Banksy" to become perceived as something akin to a legend jump to legend may be a bit of a stretch.. To contextualise street art for readers who are unaware, the author describes it as using "the streets as a canvas to expose and undermine the most sordid aspects of our society" "in a climate of much unrest and uncertainty"cut down on quote length. Better to integrate short sharp quotes with analysis close by where possible.. The portrayal of society as "sordid" with "much unrest and uncertainty" is used tocan never be sure about this. Try endeavours/strives/seeks/aims to.... establish a grim moodhow? Tease out the connotations of these adjectives. Word-level analysis is a great every now and then!, whereby the audience is positioned to perceive street artists as heroes who highlight the "issues around us"I'm not quite seeing the link from a grim mood to then seeing street artists as heroes. What is it about the street art that relieves civilians of such grim feelings? A bit of fleshing out would serve this point well.. This bolsters the appraisal of Banksy as a.... (doesn't make sense to just have appraisal hanging alone), as the audience is now left in a state of admiration for the heroic artist capitalising pressing issues that draw the attention of the audience "from our screens". The author advances the notion that the actions of street artists is "a vehicle of expression for all"?? Not too much analysis is going on. Work on the intermediate, 'fleshing out' stage a bit more. The audience is positioned to appreciate the effort that artists are putting into "these masterpieces" from the heroic deeds of artists to "create change"always try and analyse quotes! There's lots of goodness in them.. The image depicts a sombre child reaching out to a red, heart shaped balloon symbolic of the powerful gift of love. This reinforces the influential paintings street artists make, because they resonate influential messages such as "there is always hope". By juxtaposing the heroism of artists with "what our politicians [have] forgotten to do amidst their squabbling", the author insinuates perhaps implies/intimates/indicates would be better. Also, tease the evidence out further. What is it about the verb 'squabbling,' which indicates the politicians' ignorance?that these artists to be more influential and contributing to society, hence evoking awe and reverence for these artists from readers. The author once again attempts to alienate individuals who disprove of Banksy, through the rhetorical question of "who wouldn't love it?"But how does it alienate? The how component is very important.

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Great job on the analysis. You have a really good awareness of authorial intent and reader effect. To ensure coherency, make sure that you fully pull the evidence apart! Tease it out to provide the intermediate stage of your analysis. This will improve your analysis even further. Keep it up  :D
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« Reply #14 on: September 27, 2017, 05:52:35 pm »
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From the outset of the piece, the author praises Banksy as an artist, and the creator of the painting in debate. The slang "good old" brings some sense of familiarity and approacheableness, which from the beginning allows the reader to be drawn into hearing the argument, along with giving a clear indication of the attraction the author experiences towards Banksy. He attempts to convey the injustice and ridiculousness of Banksy's work being made to look worthless of massive attention, stating that Banksy graffities on he streets, "like many other artists." Doing so, the reader is made to realize that graffiti is widely considered as a form of art, and therefore suitable for being considered as Britain's favorite artwork.

Having established the significance of the works created by Bansky, the author then moves on to explore how the "masterpieces" can be a form of communicating the problems around us. Labellung the graffitied as being "masterpieces" adds weight to his prvious attempt to signify he importance of the artworks. Slightly exaggeratedly, the author claims art to be "a vehicle for expression", which although with some degree of force, lets the reader to accept art as a convent tool in thief lives, and to consider them with more importance. Including the whole population, "for all" and "everyone and anyone", this tool for communication does not exclude anyone form the society, and thus lets the whole population be on the same page about a particular issue. Appealing to a sense of justice and equality, this gains further acceptance and appreciation of art from the readers who may feel that at times the society has become divided and the leaders misguided, and that a tool for bringing people together giving them a chance to agree on a topic is what is desired.

Thanks in advance for any corrections/comments!