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melee2001

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Adv Eng - Mod B (Yeats) Essay
« on: January 16, 2018, 10:01:17 pm »
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hi friends :)

it'd be super super helpful if i could get any feedback on my yeats essay (mod b) - hope all your holidays are treating you well :)

SORRY - there's a typo in the first body paragraph's topic sentence (there shouldn't be a "...MORE SPECIFIC" - that was just me reminding myself to change it later when I was re-editing it)
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rasha25

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Re: Adv Eng - Mod B (Yeats) Essay
« Reply #1 on: January 17, 2018, 04:46:53 pm »
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hi friends :)

it'd be super super helpful if i could get any feedback on my yeats essay (mod b) - hope all your holidays are treating you well :)

SORRY - there's a typo in the first body paragraph's topic sentence (there shouldn't be a "...MORE SPECIFIC" - that was just me reminding myself to change it later when I was re-editing it)

Hi there, I read your essay and provided some notes on it attached bellow. Overall, I liked the idea that the essay was going with and the structure was pretty good only criticism in terms of structure is probably to synthesis texts into a paragraph as opposed to talking about one text per paragraph. Please do note: I am in no way a professional marker, this is simply advice from a year 12 student based on my experiences and feedbacks I got from my teachers. Good Luck  :)
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