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Okay, so I am just posting a piece of my argumentative writing here and I was wondering if someone could give me feedback for it? I am not too sure about the arguments so it would be great if someone could confirm that my arguments are valid and make sense!
Also, when should we use will, might, may, would and should in this situation as I don't know whether we should stick to one modal verb in the whole essay or whether we can use it at different times, depending on where it makes sense. The modal verbs I am not sure about are in bold
Also, for my third paragraph, are there too many ideas and if there are should I limit it to one whole idea and expand so the main theme is more clear?
Sorry for all the questions!
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The minimum driving age should not be raised.
The minimum driving age exists to ensure that young, curious drivers have an experience that is worth remembering. However, raising the minimum driving age
will limit the drivers' freedom. The minimum driving age should not be raised. If the driving age is raised, there
would most likely be rebellious minors who
may still drive without a licence anyway, causing havoc. Also, teenagers need to be able to learn from their mistakes so the driving rule should stay unaltered.
To begin with, the minimum driving age should not be raised as a teenage rebellion
may arise, ultimately causing havoc. Teenagers specifically want to adhere to their own desires so if the minimum driving age is raised , they would not comply to the rules. They may create havoc in the society by persuading people to join their campaign for young drivers' rights. For example, there may be long arguments between these youngsters and their parents and other adults. This
will ultimately cause unnecessary conflicts that the government
will eventually have to solve so we should keep the teenagers comfortable with the current driving rule. Therefore, the minimum driving age should not be raised as unnecessary conflicts
may arise within communities.
Furthermore, keeping the minimum driving age unchanged will mean that teenagers can keep making mistakes, which they can learn and benefit from. Raising the driving age
will only delay the process of teenagers learning from their own mistakes when driving a car so it would advantageous if they learnt it at a younger stage when they are still accepting new things. This
would eventually limit the mistakes these minors might make in the coming years. For instance, drink-driving an text-driving are global issues that affect people and individuals around them. If someone was drink-driving and nearly struck a person walking across the zebra crossing, they
will learn that you shouldn't drink and drive. Since they experienced nearly killing someone, they
would associate drink-driving with a bad consequence, allowing them to be more aware of their actions. Since young drivers such as 17 year olds are immature, they
will have more situations to learn from their mistakes. Hence, the minimum driving age should not be raised as teenagers would be able to learn from their mistakes earlier, limiting mistakes later.
In conclusion, the minimum driving age should not be raised as teenagers
might cause a rebellion, meaning conflicts
may arise within the society. Also, teenagers
would be able to learn from their mistakes by experiencing many situations at a younger stage.