ATAR Notes: Forum
HSC Stuff => HSC Subjects + Help => HSC Marking and Feedback => Topic started by: emnicholson3 on October 14, 2017, 02:18:48 pm
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Ignore the end sentence!
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Welcome to the forums!! ;D A few quick comments from me:
- Use shorter paragraphs and play with sentence length to achieve a sense of pace and accentuate powerful/important lines!
- Be sure you can tailor this to a variety of Discovery concepts and stimuli: The concept isn't quite as strong/flexible as it might need to be to deal with a curveball. Be sure to practice!
- Really like your tone, use of emotive language and imagery. A few times it feels a tad forced though - Try not to use a technique or do something 'different' with language unless it just flows! Best judge of this is reading your story aloud to a family member who doesn't write much - They'll be able to hear the inconsistency ;D
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can you please check my creative to see if it alright ?
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can you please check my creative to see if it alright ?
Hey vanessa I had a look at your creative and the biggest piece of advice I can give you is go back to basics. I'm not sure how much of it is simply typos, but I'd review sentence structure, dialogue conventions and basic grammar. And keep your tense! Sorry if I seem harsh haha but considering exams start tomorrow I thought I'd be hard and fast. My full feedback is in the document. Good luck for tomorrow though!