Hey!
So I'm currently refining my questions for my PIP questionnaire and my teacher suggested me to ask other people to check my questions to see whether other people can understand it. Is it possible for you guys to see if my questions make sense?
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Note on some terminology:
Racial identity: Belonging in a specific racial group, usually based on physical or genetic traits.
Interracial marriage: A marriage between two people of different socially-defined races.
What is your sex? Male/ Female
Which generation do you fall under? Baby Boomers/ Gen X/ Gen Y/ Gen Z
Do you find it difficult to establish a set racial identity? Yes/ No
Australia is becoming increasingly multicultural. In your opinion, do you find your racial identity increasingly complex? Justify your opinion.
Do you find that there is a change in attitudes towards interracial marriages? Yes/ No
How common is it for you to see an interracial couple in current society? 1- rare/ 5- very common
In your opinion, why are interracial marriages becoming more prominent?
In regards to the increasing popularity of interracial marriage, how helpful are interracial marriages in helping alleviate racial issues? 1- not helpful/ 5- very helpful
Pertaining to the current trend of the increasing popularity of interracial marriages, do you think this popularity will continue in the future?
Do you see yourself being involved in an interracial relationship? Why or why not?
Thanks in advance!
Hey, Bea!
Here's the link to the proposal I wrote for my assessment task. Could you please provide some pointers as to how I could develop this into the introduction as my teacher suggested?
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1191SDqp7fHlbhhCRJVlcn8_aFFvmFSXFkoP-A_wEs4w/edit?usp=sharing
Essentially the structure of the introduction should come down to:
the ideal structure for the introduction
Paragraph 1: Introducing your PIP
- What your topic is
- Why chose do the topic
- Hypothesis/main argument
- Outlines of each chapters
Paragraph 2: Research Methods
- Primary research methods you chose to use
- A statement that you will be backing up your primary research methods with secondary research (also state what secondary resources you will be using)
Paragraph 3: Ethical Research
- Statement that you will adhere by the principle of ethical (ie; participants allowed for answers to be included in the PIP as long as their identity remained hidden
Paragraph 4: Cross cultural component
- What your cross cultural component is
- How this cross cultural comparison will help you gain an extensive understanding of your topic
Paragraph 5: Relationship with the SAC course
- What concepts you plan on referencing
Paragraph 6: Continuity and Change
- Statement of the 'continuity' part of your topic
- Statement of the 'change' part of your topic
- (Optional) Hypothesis what will happen in the nearby future (back up with a social theory!)
Paragraph 7: Your journey
- Statement on how you've gained social and cultural literacy through this PIP
- How you will grow as a researcher
HOWEVER, word limit for the introduction is only 500 words. So if you end up going over the word limit, you can always split your introduction into this:
shorter structure for the introduction
Paragraph 1: The 'intro' to the 'intro'
- Statement of topic
- Why you chose the topic
- Outline what each chapter will involve
- Your aim and hypothesis
- Statement of cross cultural comparison
- Statement of concepts
Paragraph 2: Research methods
- Statement of primary research methods
- What you did in your primary research (do this part AFTER you've actually done the primary research)
- Statement of secondary research methods
- Statement that you will adhere by the principles of ethical research
Paragraph 3: Your journey
- Statement on how you've gained social and cultural literacy through this PIP
- How you will grow as a researcher
- How you've grown as a person
Down below I have bolded parts of your proposal which I think should go into your introduction in your PIP :)
proposal/introduction
This investigation explores interracial dating and my scope focuses on to what extent diverse communities, societies that consist of and are exposed to different cultures, accept interracial relationships. I intended to avoid having a preconceived idea of my outcomes that investigating into a single-race community could potentially pose and view interracial relationships in contemporary settings (can be apart of the ethical research paragraph BUT reword into third person ie; this research will prevent from having preconceived notions to avoid creating an agenda etc.). The approach I have generated will sustain and refine my investigation around individuals within a multicultural demographic.
My investigation will contribute to my engagement with HSC Society and Culture. This topic will study interactions across the Fundamental concepts; how persons in society perceive interracial relationships from cultural, historical and environmental contexts. (specify which fundamental concepts you will use)From this investigation, I will hold astute consideration to the impact of multiculturalism on Australian society and consider the additional concept of identity, studied from personal, social and cultural paradigms . Therefore, I will enhance my understanding of the course content through the application of social and cultural research methods to explore racial acceptance in an individual’s sense of self.
I will utilise a variety of research methodologies for effective findings. My primary research includes a publicly distributed questionnaire, interviews and a focus group facilitated with selected individuals. The questionnaire results will convert to qualitative data, displaying a general outline of the participants involved in my PIP research and their responses. In order to balance this with qualitative research, my interviews and focus group will allow me to obtain flexible, in-depth insight from participants in regards to enculturation and ethnocentrism. The focus group will contribute towards my case study into Yellow Fever between Australia and the United States of America. My case study will integrate the perspectives of Australian-Asian participants with public American media representations to show how this social phenomenon crafts perceptions of interracial dating by comparing two multicultural countries. My secondary research will incorporate the works of other researchers such as feature articles, documentaries and social research papers. These will validate my deductions from the primary research conducted, maximising reliability and credibility as supporting evidence. (Absolutely perfect! When you actually do your primary research, just add in what you did specifically and who you specifically interviewed, had in your focus group etc. rather than having the generic ‘participant’)
The cross cultural aspect is evident from my extended investigation across racial and cultural backgrounds to see how they influence relationships. In the PIP, I will closely examine how intercultural interaction and communication shape interpersonal growth. I wish to achieve a greater understanding of whether or not interracial couples still face cultural barriers and challenges and if so, how they are overcome. Hence, I will learn of the intensities of racial prejudices and stereotypes, which may be adopted from participants who have experiences with interracial dating, to see how personal factors are affected by societal expectations.
Finally, my investigation will address continuity and change in society by assessing previous and existing attitudes towards interracial relationships. By doing this, I will be able to identify and account for key patterns that have persisted against the dynamics over time from micro, meso and macro parameters. Consequently, my synthesis of findings will help me speculate how interracial relationships may change over time in Australian society and suggest strategies to promote multiculturalism.
*** I love every part of your proposal! I believe that all parts should be in your introduction however the parts bolded should be the main priority. The more you work on your PIP, the more you will have to talk about in your introduction.
Hope this helps :)
Hey everyone, can someone please check my introduction for the PIP, its attached bellow. All help is much appreciated, thank you. :)
Hey there rasha25! I've included my comments in the spoiler down below~
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“Patriotism isn’t the last refuge of the racist scandal, national pride doesn’t have to involve hostility towards cultural difference.” In today’s society, we are often blindsided by our own nationalist views that consume our behaviour and conversations towards different cultures and faiths. Growing up in an Islamic household, my low context culture juxtaposed my high context environment of Australia, as I read about previous events in history between Australia and of my own culture and religion, this acted as a catalyst for me to discovering my social and cultural identity (reason why you chose the topic). Living in the West as a Lebanese immigrant, I desired to discover the influence of Westernisation, primarily Western living, exploring its significant impact on an immigrant’s religious expression and how the concept of acculturation contributes to their social and cultural identity (topic). Presenting two-sided perspectives, some Australians may agree to argue that due to “intense increase of immigration, it is not Australia sucking the cultural out of immigrants but rather much the opposite with immigrants imposing their cultural and religious beliefs”. However, this case is presented differently in the lense of immigrants that have been forced or by choice came into Australia, “with some losing their religious beliefs, having to adapt to the Catholic Australian nation, resulting in the loss of cultural belonging”. (This sentence can just be presented in one of your chapters. The introduction shouldn’t involve too much of elaboration because elaboration needs to be explored within the central material)
Despite the juxtaposing disagreements between both cultures, I decided to investigate both responses to broaden my understanding about my faith and culture. Subsequently, my hypothesis suggests that Lebanese immigrants and born Australians may be exposed to misinterpretations that have influenced the aforementioned controversial opinions, however, as both cultures are seemingly expressing lack, could it be possible for both cultures to have been influenced by one’s acculturation, mistaking it for cultural loss, domination or superiority? Notably, I am aware that the more I journey into my investigation, I am yet to discover, influencing change to my proposed hypothesis. (This entire paragraph should be a part of your log/central material not your introduction. It is a good paragraph don’t get me wrong but this part is a waste if it’s just put in the introduction. It deserves a spot in the log/central material section(s) of your PIP.)
In investigating my hypothesis, I aim to accumulate a combination of qualitative and quantitative primary methodologies, those of which are questionnaires, focus groups and interviews. (primary research methods) In addition, secondary research methodologies that will accompany this include academic documentaries, Journal Articles and factual books (secondary research methods) Furthermore, in conducting a questionnaire my investigation benefits as my response gains multiple interpretations from different generations, genders and age-groups, the data collection useful to forming the graphs to my response and the ability of comparative, developmental and theoretical questions in shaping understanding (You choose to keep this part in your introduction but you can also add it in your log because it states the reason why you chose to do a questionnaire not what you actually did in the questionnaire. Essentially when introducing your primary research methods in your introduction, it just has to be a quick statement. Ie; From my questionnaire, I have received 85 responses, where respondents freely expressed their opinion on the matter. It just has to be plain and simple. In your log, that’s when you can elaborate about your primary research methods.) In addition to providing open interactions between a range of faiths and cultures, focus groups are reliable sources as participants are given the opportunity to be exposed in their natural realm whereby their behaviour in intense discussions will come to reveal their identity (Check out my previous comment) I aim to ask questions and topics relevant to mine and spark debates such as: whether immigrants perceive Australia Day as a catalyst for Australians to celebrate colonialism, further reinforcing how Australia has created cultural restricts on Lebanese immigrants or if Australians assimilate Australia Day as a celebration for Australian born’s only. Notably, micro level interactions as can be seen through interviews, are central to obtaining first-hand perspectives, allowing instant and open-ended responses from the wide variety. I aim to interview Australian authorities such as the Immigration minister and contrast with Islamic organisations, purposed to demonstrate how Lebanese immigrants are perceived to have either imposed or have had their culture and faith restricted hereby influencing their social and cultural identity.
My main concerns are for your introduction is that you haven't acknowledged other parts of your PIP like your statement to abide by the principles of ethical research, your cross cultural component, what each chapter will involve, what fundamental and/or additional concepts you plan on using, the continuity and change aspect of your PIP and your journey (though this bit should be done once you've actually completed your central material).
A lot of parts of your introduction is just further elaborating on your hypothesis and your topic. It's greatly written but you should only just stick to 1-2 sentences when talking about your topic and hypothesis. Introduction is meant to be 500 words max and it's required to have all of these aspects in:
Essentially the structure of the introduction should come down to:
the ideal structure for the introduction
Paragraph 1: Introducing your PIP
- What your topic is
- Why chose do the topic
- Hypothesis/main argument
- Outlines of each chapters
Paragraph 2: Research Methods
- Primary research methods you chose to use
- A statement that you will be backing up your primary research methods with secondary research (also state what secondary resources you will be using)
Paragraph 3: Ethical Research
- Statement that you will adhere by the principle of ethical (ie; participants allowed for answers to be included in the PIP as long as their identity remained hidden
Paragraph 4: Cross cultural component
- What your cross cultural component is
- How this cross cultural comparison will help you gain an extensive understanding of your topic
Paragraph 5: Relationship with the SAC course
- What concepts you plan on referencing
Paragraph 6: Continuity and Change
- Statement of the 'continuity' part of your topic
- Statement of the 'change' part of your topic
- (Optional) Hypothesis what will happen in the nearby future (back up with a social theory!)
Paragraph 7: Your journey
- Statement on how you've gained social and cultural literacy through this PIP
- How you will grow as a researcher
HOWEVER, word limit for the introduction is only 500 words. So if you end up going over the word limit, you can always split your introduction into this:
shorter structure for the introduction
Paragraph 1: The 'intro' to the 'intro'
- Statement of topic
- Why you chose the topic
- Outline what each chapter will involve
- Your aim and hypothesis
- Statement of cross cultural comparison
- Statement of concepts
Paragraph 2: Research methods
- Statement of primary research methods
- What you did in your primary research (do this part AFTER you've actually done the primary research)
- Statement of secondary research methods
- Statement that you will adhere by the principles of ethical research
Paragraph 3: Your journey
- Statement on how you've gained social and cultural literacy through this PIP
- How you will grow as a researcher
- How you've grown as a person
At this point, you just need to acknowledge other parts of your PIP in your introduction. Every 1-2 sentences you need to be talking about different things. It has to be quick and snappy. 1 sentence can be what your topic is about. Then have 2 sentences telling the marker why you chose do the topic in the first place. Then the next sentence is your hypothesis (no elaboration!). Then the next three sentences will specify what each chapter will talk about. Etc. There needs to be a good flow in your introduction to keep the marker interested. I believe other parts of your introduction definitely needs to be included in your central material. That's where you start elaborating your hypothesis and backing it up with your resources.
Hope this helps! :)
Hey fam
So regarding my own pip journey, something I haven't focussed on much is my introduction.
So I thought i'd piece something rough together to make myself feel better, that I've completed a draft on it and got some summarising points down; as a lot of my work up until now has been updating my log (was way behind) constructing a rough survey (that's still not ready yet :-\ ) and doing secondary research.
I thought i'd post my rough and ready draft for a bit of feedback.
Keep in mind, this is very rough. It's got a long way to go before it looks good. It is 484 words.
But any advice is valued! :)
Intro is in the spoiler. Thanks peeps! ;D
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“You’re an only child? You must be SO spoilt”, “Don’t you get lonely?”, “You’re an only child? Wow that explains a lot…”, “I bet you wish you had a brother or a sister, don’t you?”. These are all questions that are experienced by only children. These are the stereotypes that are placed upon us. The ideas for my pip were formed from questions just like these. What is it like to grow up as an only child? What it is like to grow up with siblings? My specific topic focuses on only children, and how they develop and interact in the macro world compared to those who grew up with siblings. I chose this area of inquiry as I myself am an only child, and I want to see how my development is affected by my lack of siblings.
All those stereotypes about us, are they really all true? Does having siblings have that much of an effect on our identity formation? Do we really prove all those stereotypes true? My specific hypothesis is addressing “An individual’s identity formation is not dependent on weather or not they have siblings” I am aiming to disprove that growing up without siblings has any SIGNIFICANT impact on the way a child grows up, versus how they grow up with siblings. As an extension of this, I will focus on in detail the common stereotypes associated with only children, and I will seek to disprove them.
This project will focus on a few different primary research methods to compare and contrast to secondary research and either backup or disprove my hypothesis. The methods that will be used are questionnaires, interviews and focus groups. The questionnaires will aim to gain some quantitative data in order to make some base generalizations. The interviews and focus groups will aim to divulge deeper into this topic to gain qualitative data that will build upon the findings made by the questionnaires.
These stereotypes have not always been the same though. Over time, they have changed. From the beginning of the 20th century until now there has been changes in the perceptions of only children and how they interact within their micro world and the greater macro world. Therefore, this project will draw comparisons between previous and modern day perceptions of only children and how they have changed over time. This component will allow me to explore the changing percpptions of the macro world towards the individual interactions and traits of only children. It aims to gain an understanding of how the perdeptions have changed, and what forces have led to these changes, presenting me with view that is beyond my normal realm of experience.
As an only child, this project personally resonates with me, I aim to gain a deeper understanding of myself, as an only child and as an extension, become a more socially and culturally literate individual.
Hey fam
So regarding my own pip journey, something I haven't focussed on much is my introduction.
So I thought i'd piece something rough together to make myself feel better, that I've completed a draft on it and got some summarising points down; as a lot of my work up until now has been updating my log (was way behind) constructing a rough survey (that's still not ready yet :-\ ) and doing secondary research.
I thought i'd post my rough and ready draft for a bit of feedback.
Keep in mind, this is very rough. It's got a long way to go before it looks good. It is 484 words.
But any advice is valued! :)
Intro is in the spoiler. Thanks peeps! ;D
Hey there!
I'm no expert in introductions (I still need to write mine xD) but I have read a few so this is just my opinion on your introduction.
Warning: I'm very finicky so I've written a fair bit here.
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“You’re an only child? You must be SO spoilt”; “Don’t you get lonely?”; “You’re an only child? Wow that explains a lot…”; “I bet you wish you had a brother or a sister, don’t you?”Changed the commas to semi-colons- to me, too many commas can be confusing, especially if you're listing. These are all questions that are experienced by only children. These are the stereotypes that are placed upon us. The ideas for my pip PIP (me being picky xD) were formed from questions just like these: What is it like to grow up as an only child? What it is like to grow up with siblings? Are these the focus questions you will be addressing in your PIP? Personally, I think grouping all the focus questions into one paragraph can kinda make it flow better. My specific topic focuses on only children, and how they develop and interact in the macro world compared to those who grew up with siblings. I chose this area of inquiry as I myself am an only child, and I want to see how my development is affected by my lack of siblings. I think you should put your hypothesis here. For example, "Hence, the hypothesis addressed the idea of *insert hypothesis here*."
All those stereotypes about us, are they really all true? Does having siblings have that much of an effect on our identity formation? Do we really prove all those stereotypes true? Again, are these ideas you will be exploring? Maybe move it up to where your questions are in the first paragraph. To me, these questions kinda feel like a filler. If adding these questions to the first paragraph makes it a bit too long, either collapse some of them into one question or make them succinct. My specific hypothesis is addressing “An individual’s identity formation is not dependent on weather whether or not they have siblings” I am aiming to disprove that growing up without siblings has any SIGNIFICANT impact on the way a child grows up, versus how they grow up with siblings. As an extension of this, I will focus on in detail the common stereotypes associated with only children, and I will seek to disprove them. Like I said before, move your hypothesis to the first paragraph. Considering how long it is, try and condense it into one or two sentences.
This project will focus on a few different primary research methods to compare and contrast to secondary research and either backup or disprove my hypothesis. The methods that will be used are questionnaires, interviews and focus groups. The questionnaires will aim to gain some quantitative data in order to make some base generalisations. The interviews and focus groups will aim to divulge deeper into this topic to gain qualitative data that will build upon the findings made by the questionnaires.
Based on the reporting notes I've read, you need to justify your methods but you're not really justifying why you chose these research methods. Instead of combining primary and secondary research into one paragraph and talk about your cross-cultural comparison from the next paragraph and blend these two ideas together. For example, in one paragraph you could say: "Through the use of varying primary research methods, a comparison can be made between (say) Generation Z and Generation X. This is because *insert reasons why questionnaires (open-ended? closed-ended?), interviews (again, what type?) and focus groups can help you with this comparison.* In the next paragraph, talk about your secondary research and how that can support your primary research- mention a few sources you've annotated, maybe some books or journal articles?
These stereotypes have not always been the same though. Over time, they have changed. You've already mentioned in the previous sentence that these stereotypes aren't the same. You repeated it again in a different way, making it redundant. From the beginning of the 20th century until now there has been changes in the perceptions of only children and how they interact within their micro world and the greater macro world Or you could just say "micro and macro world"? Therefore, this project will draw comparisons between previous and modern day perceptions of only children and how they have changed over time. This component will allow me to explore the changing percpptions perceptions of the macro world towards the individual interactions and traits of only children. You've already mentioned in the previous sentence about change so repeating this is a bit unnecessary. You can condense this into one sentence. For example, "... and how they have changed over time through the analysis of individual interactions and traits of only children. It aims to gain an understanding of how the perdeptions perceptions have changed. You've mentioned change already.[/b], and what forces have led to these changes Maybe instead of repeating changing perceptions, take that out and expand on these changing forces. What has impacted the change? Include some SAC concepts here to expand your point., presenting me with view that is beyond my normal realm of experience. Include the sentence below this paragraph here.
As an only child, this project personally resonates with me, I aim to gain a deeper understanding of myself, as an only child and as an extension, become a more socially and culturally literate individual. Considering how the whole purpose of the PIP is to make us more socially and culturally literate, I feel like this feels like a regurgitation of a generic line. Considering how this is already 484 words, maybe shorten your first paragraph- maybe reduce the questions at the beginning (the ones in the first sentence) so you can expand this a bit more. Why can this PIP make someone socially and culturally literate? Is it allowing people to be more aware of the stereotypes attached to 'only children'?
Overall comments:
- You've included what you need in an introduction (e.g. what's the topic, why you chose it, primary and secondary research, what makes you a socially and culturally literate person)
- Based on my readings on exemplar introductions, I find that they are more formal than the log- I noticed you used a lot of personal pronouns so I'd say reduce that
- Condense some of your questions (especially the ones in the first sentence)- it's a great hook but I think three is the magic number
- You've only mentioned a few SAC concepts in your introduction. I'd suggest adding a few more (and try not to force them onto your topic) because HSC markers love SAC concepts.
So yeah, these are my thoughts. I'm no expert in this (and sorry for being so pedantic xD)- pretty sure beatroot is more of an expert here. However, if you need an exemplar to help you, I'd suggest this one.
Hope this helps!
Hey fam
So regarding my own pip journey, something I haven't focussed on much is my introduction.
So I thought i'd piece something rough together to make myself feel better, that I've completed a draft on it and got some summarising points down; as a lot of my work up until now has been updating my log (was way behind) constructing a rough survey (that's still not ready yet :-\ ) and doing secondary research.
I thought i'd post my rough and ready draft for a bit of feedback.
Keep in mind, this is very rough. It's got a long way to go before it looks good. It is 484 words.
But any advice is valued! :)
Intro is in the spoiler. Thanks peeps! ;D
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“You’re an only child? You must be SO spoilt”, “Don’t you get lonely?”, “You’re an only child? Wow that explains a lot…”, “I bet you wish you had a brother or a sister, don’t you?”. These are all questions that are experienced by only children. These are the stereotypes that are placed upon us. The ideas for my pip were formed from questions just like these. What is it like to grow up as an only child? What it is like to grow up with siblings? My specific topic focuses on only children, and how they develop and interact in the macro world compared to those who grew up with siblings. I chose this area of inquiry as I myself am an only child, and I want to see how my development is affected by my lack of siblings.
All those stereotypes about us, are they really all true? Does having siblings have that much of an effect on our identity formation? Do we really prove all those stereotypes true? My specific hypothesis is addressing “An individual’s identity formation is not dependent on weather or not they have siblings” I am aiming to disprove that growing up without siblings has any SIGNIFICANT impact on the way a child grows up, versus how they grow up with siblings. As an extension of this, I will focus on in detail the common stereotypes associated with only children, and I will seek to disprove them.
This project will focus on a few different primary research methods to compare and contrast to secondary research and either backup or disprove my hypothesis. The methods that will be used are questionnaires, interviews and focus groups. The questionnaires will aim to gain some quantitative data in order to make some base generalizations. The interviews and focus groups will aim to divulge deeper into this topic to gain qualitative data that will build upon the findings made by the questionnaires.
These stereotypes have not always been the same though. Over time, they have changed. From the beginning of the 20th century until now there has been changes in the perceptions of only children and how they interact within their micro world and the greater macro world. Therefore, this project will draw comparisons between previous and modern day perceptions of only children and how they have changed over time. This component will allow me to explore the changing percpptions of the macro world towards the individual interactions and traits of only children. It aims to gain an understanding of how the perdeptions have changed, and what forces have led to these changes, presenting me with view that is beyond my normal realm of experience.
As an only child, this project personally resonates with me, I aim to gain a deeper understanding of myself, as an only child and as an extension, become a more socially and culturally literate individual.
Hey Adam! I've got my comments in bold in the spoiler down below:
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“You’re an only child? You must be SO spoilt”, “Don’t you get lonely?”, “You’re an only child? Wow that explains a lot…”, “I bet you wish you had a brother or a sister, don’t you?” (I really do believe in the rule of thirds when it comes to quotes. Pick your top three and move on from there. It just looks a bit clunky and looks like you’re just trying to up the word count by adding a lot of quotes) These are all questions that are experienced by only children. These are the stereotypes that are placed upon us. The ideas for my pip (pip has to be capitalise as PIP) were formed from questions just like these. What is it like to grow up as an only child? What it is like to grow up with siblings? My specific topic focuses on only children, and how they develop and interact in the macro world compared to those who grew up with siblings. I chose this area of inquiry as I myself am an only child, and I want to see how my development is affected by my lack of siblings.
All those stereotypes about us, are they really all true? Does having siblings have that much of an effect on our identity formation? Do we really prove all those stereotypes true? (I’ll probably move these questions into the log bit or keep at least one question. I think you should keep the ‘Does having siblings have that much of an effect on our identity formation?’, then jump straight into the next sentence) My specific hypothesis is addressing “An individual’s identity formation is not dependent on whether or not they have siblings” (I feel like your hypothesis could be rewritten because it took me about three reads to finally understand your hypothesis. Maybe it could be like ‘The formation of an individual’s identity is not affected by whether they have siblings or not’ Again this is just my suggestion) I am aiming to disprove that growing up without siblings has any SIGNIFICANT impact on the way a child grows up, versus how they grow up with siblings. As an extension of this, I will focus on in detail the common stereotypes associated with only children, and I will seek to disprove them.
This project will focus on a few different primary research methods to compare and contrast to secondary research and either backup or disprove my hypothesis. The methods that will be used are questionnaires, interviews and focus groups (When you have finished your primary research, I would recommend coming back to this section and discuss who you interviewed/how many people answer your questionnaire/who was in your focus group. Doesn’t have to be long. It could be a very brief summary [one sentence per primary research method) The questionnaires will aim to gain some quantitative data in order to make some base generalisations. The interviews and focus groups will aim to divulge deeper into this topic to gain qualitative data that will build upon the findings made by the questionnaires.
These stereotypes have not always been the same though. Over time, they have changed. (If possible, try to synthesise the last two sentences together. Or possibly try to combine the last two sentences with the next sentence. Just makes it less clunky in my opinion) From the beginning of the 20th century until now there has been changes in the perceptions of only children and how they interact within their micro world and the greater macro world. Therefore, this project will draw comparisons between previous and modern day perceptions of only children and how they have changed over time (Think you can definitely add more fundamental/additional concepts in this area). This component will allow me to explore the changing perceptions of the macro world towards the individual interactions and traits of only children. It aims to gain an understanding of how the perceptions have changed, and what forces have led to these changes, presenting me with view that is beyond my normal realm of experience (Will this be your cross cultural comparison? If it is, then it needs to be more obvious)
As an only child, this project personally resonates with me, I aim to gain a deeper understanding of myself, as an only child and as an extension, become a more socially and culturally literate individual.
Good work on getting this introduction done! Just have a few more comments:
- Outline of chapters; I understand it's still early in your PIP journey to talk about your chapters but please don't forget this section of your introduction!
- Needs a statement of what secondary research methods you're using
- Needs a statement that you promise to practice ethical research
- Needs more course concepts; it's good you've mentioned the micro and macro worlds but it needs more. Can I suggest the following concepts to be included; persons, society, culture, time, power, identity, environment.
- I've mentioned this in my comment in the spoiler above but where's your cross cultural comparison. If the area that I commented on was the CCC, then it needs be more obvious.
Good luck with the rest of your PIP journey Adam ;D
hey, my PIP is about the stresses caused by HSC stress fir the generation of y and z and this is my introduction and just wanting some advice on what i would need to fix and add if necessary...
Heya! So sorry for the late reply! You can find my comments in bold in the spoiler below :)
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As Year 12 students around New South Wales prepare to sit their HSC exams, stress factors of social, emotional and psychological changes may affect the well being of young adults (Just HSC exams or the lead up to the HSC as well? Also the use of the word ‘may’- seems you feel a bit unsure evident by the use of a low modality word. What is your argument here? Does it affect the wellbeing of young adults or not at all? But besides from that good intro for your chosen topic). The Personal Interest Project I have chosen to research (I think you’re missing the word ‘topic’ after Personal Interest Project. You cannot research a personal interest project) about is the topic of students and the way in which they interrelate their feelings in an emotional, social and psychological manner . Young adults are constantly experiencing change within their personal and social life, which contributes to the many factors that may affect a student who is undergoing the requirements of achieving a higher school certificate (I feel that the last two sentences can be put into one) The topic chosen examines the experiences of past students who have undergone the HSC. This topic was chosen, as I will be undergoing the emotional, social and psychological changes (I’m confused, will this PIP examine experiences of past students or your experiences now? Unless you’re planning on contrasting them) that will affect my capability to achieve a Higher School Certificate mark to the best of my ability. (So I understand the reason for your topic but I feel that there could be something ~deeper~. What is it with the HSC that affects a young adult’s personal and social life and change? Why do we even have this system in the first place? Is the government to blame? Is the HSC necessary? What does this say about our society? Also- I would suggest having another [personal] reason why you chose this topic. I’ve seen topic chosen so many times before with the same exact reason. Having a personal voice from you will make your reason and aim for your PIP unique. What sets you apart from the many students undertaking their HSC this year?)
The main hypothesis that I am setting out to prove is if the HSC stress affects a student in many factors including psychological, emotionally and socially. Throughout the course, I will gain an understanding of the stresses they faced and similarly if it the stress was worth it by receiving their highest outcome in ATAR marks (If you were to examine past students- that’s fine. Though if you were examining current students, you really can’t mention ATARs seeing that they are released in December and the PIP is due in the next two months. Do you plan on studying past students or current students?)
Methods taken to examine the previous experiences throughout the past HSC students include: conducting a survey, questionnaire and interview in order to understand the affects that the HSC had on them. The advantages that the research methodologies I have conducted within my course, help correlate and gain a wider variety of understanding of the stress caused by the HSC. This is shown by the advantages I have gained from the variety of answers and statistics I have extended from people I don’t know as well as the ones I know personally. Surveys, questionaries and interviews are best suited towards my research topic, as it will help outspread the understanding of stress throughout the HSC, and how it affected students as well as teachers and family members through this period of time in a person’s life. (Statement of primary research methodologies can be shorten if possible- though where is the mention of your secondary research? This is as equally important as your primary research)
By attaining information of past year 12 students and their experience with the Higher School Certificate, I am more accurately able to understand the stress caused (Good). The PIP will address the cross-cultural component of gaining an understanding between the differences each cultural (do you mean culture?) might experience going through the HSC. Some cultures can be more understanding then others in a time of someone’s life. I am more accurately able to understand this issue and its integration into the cross-cultural framework (be more specific on which cultures you want to research for your cross cultural component). I believe the topic of “HSC stress” for my personal interest project contributes to a better understanding of Society and Culture (Society & Culture- like the subject itself OR society and culture in general?), as it is a widespread issue, which affects all year 12 students on different levels in their academic excellence.
Throughout my Personal Interest Project journey I would like to have accomplished knowledge about what the stress caused by the exams would be, side effects and if it is really worth all the worrying and stressing in the end (sentence could be a bit more formal). During this project I also hope to achieve investigating skills that assist me in the near future to be able to put together the statistics and information I gain from my surveys and interviews and correlate into my social and cultural literacy effectiveness.
General comments:
- Sentences could be a bit more concise. There are some parts where you are repeating yourself.
- You've mentioned that you wanted to do generation Y and Z in your post here on the forum but you did not mention that at all in your introduction. You only mentioned past students but never specified which past students.
- I feel that you could go much much deeper and more personal with your PIP because it does seem a bit generic. You just need to add your own personal twist to it- after it is called a personal interest project. What makes your HSC journey stand out from the rest? And did that influence you to do this topic in particular for your PIP.
- Would it be possible to add an aim somewhere in your introduction?
There were some parts missing from your introduction as well;
- outline of your chapters: what do you plan on doing for each of them?
- statement of secondary research methods: this is as crucial as your primary research methods
- statement of abiding by ethical research practice
- course concepts: what fundamental and additional concepts do you plan on referencing? This could be literally a sentence.
- reference to continuity and change: I could see how to can relate back to Gen Y and Z but this wasn't specifically mentioned in your introduction! Time is such a crucial concept to the PIP
Here's a small guide on how to write your PIP introduction if you want to go and give it a read.
Good luck with the rest of your PIP :)
Hey guys,
How do you come up with catchy titles for the PIP and the chapters?
Heya!
There are many ways to think of super ~snazzy~ titles for your PIP. Here's what I did for mine last year-
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Mine was about casual racism towards Asians so I did titles that were meant to be ironic. My PIP was essentially about how ridiculous casual racism was though my titles were casually racist in itself to show the irony and the 'normalisation' of casual racist comments in society. Perhaps, you can do something similar? Here are some other pathways I used to think of titles and whatnot.
1. Draw inspiration from the internet itself: tweets, headlines, social media, reports, news, etc. I remember there was a tweet that said 'Ling ling where you at?' and I thought that was the perfect way to summarise my PIP. The tweet wasn't super racist but does have hints of it- which is essentially casual racism. The internet is filled with quotes that you can use- whether that would be some random tweet from America or news headline from Japan- the world is /literally/ your oyster.
2. Go big or go home: have a HUGE statement. Doesn't matter how ridiculous it may sound. Just go for it! One of my chapter titles' was 'The History of Ling Ling'. There was no such thing about the history of ling ling. But I embraced it. Made it sound so legit it could've been in the new syllabus for Modern History ;). Don't be afraid of going BIG!
3. Puns: a good ol' pun shouldn't hurt nobody ;) Ie; My chapter two was called 'The Wong Idea' (somewhat casually racist but like mentioned earlier I was going for an ironic take on my titles).
4. Text-like/stereotypical millennial-like talk: Pretend that you're writing a transcript. You don't just ignore the mmhh and ums and ahs. You simply add that into the transcript. Now to translate that into your PIP titles- just simply write out your title as if you were listening to a conversation. Make the title casual. That's what is so great about the PIP. You don't have to be overly formal to get top marks. My chapter three was called 'OMG! That's so Asian!'
5. A quote from a book, interview, public figure etc that is relevant to your PIP's topic.
That's pretty much the only tips I've got but hope this helps :)
Hey guys, I got a rough draft of my intro here and its exactly 500 words, would be great if i could get some feedback as my teachers gone awol over the holidays so anything is appreciated, thanks
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‘To suggest a change in the way we think about Anzac is dangerous territory. Over the past 20 years, Anzac has become impregnable; a bastion of patriotism over which words and argument cannot prevail.’. Ideals and values on significant cultural events appertaining national identity, such as Anzac Day, are bound to shift over time due to societal reformations in individual’s philosophies and worldview. My personal upbringing as a first generation Australian with parents unrelated to any Australians or New Zealanders who fought for their country has had a direct impact on my social and cultural identity in regard to acknowledging arguably Australia’s most significant cultural day, Anzac Day. While this is a nice opening statement, it doesn't contribute to the requirements of your intro much, while being wordy. You need to be more clear about what your pip is about (maybe in a few less words). I do like your part about your personal upbringing; the other thing about this paragraph is that it needs to explain why you chose this area of inquiry. If you want, you can try to reword as you will gain some words back by rewording the first half of this statement
Through my project I endeavour to examine and deconstruct contemporary beliefs and values held towards Anzac Day, including public opinions on its prevalence in Australian society and its impact on our national identity, common ideals on the correct way to acknowledge such a sacred event through both Australia and New Zealand and the shift from solemnity to nationalism. I'd put a break here, as this can be your 2nd paragraph. This is where you talk about what you aim to prove/find out with this project (which you've started doing-nice!). Although one other thing you need to do in this paragraph is mention your central hypothesis. From there, you build on it by elaborating using some of what you have already said.
Through extensive research into the common conceptions and misconceptions surrounding Anzac Day I will attempt to pursue a wide range of both qualitative and quantitative data through a comprehensive collection of secondary research sources and through my own primary research mediums of questionnaire, observation and interview. Over intensive synthesis of my own research with qualified academics and journalists I venture to find correlations and contrasts between my own data and others, either supporting or destabilising pre-eminent ideals or theories. Through the method of questionnaire, I will be able to gather responses from both a New Zealand and Australian audience, accomplishing the cross-cultural comparison requirement and providing me with both qualitative and quantitative data through multiple choice or open-ended questions. Interviews with Australians, New Zealanders and local RSL representatives would yield effective qualitative data which will supply me with personal opinions and beliefs from people in direct contact with Anzac Day and its portrayal. Observations at my own local Anzac Day services will also provide first-hand data on the portrayal of Anzac Day in rural communities. Armed with this data I will be able to correlate it with the predominantly qualitative secondary sources, fulfilling the tenets of social and cultural literacy. You've done a good job with discussing your methodologies here! Although, if you're looking to make changes in other areas, it may be best to try to reword this section as it is a bit wordy
Through the cross-cultural study between Australian and New Zealander responses I will be able to garner dominant views and beliefs of both cultures towards the shared occasion of Anzac Day. You've addressed the cross-cultural component here, Nice! However, this is where you need to add stuff. While you have addressed the cross-cultural component you need to remember to explain how this cross-cultural perspective will allow you (the researcher), to empathise (identity) with the "other" (In this case i believe the other for you would be those of New Zealand descent?). This is the point of integrating the cross-cultural component into your pip. It presents you with a view that is beyond your regular world of personal experience (how does it do this?)
By analysing the significance of Anzac Day through time and the newly emerging controversies and disputes surrounding the binational day I hope to satisfy the continuity and change aspect, furthering my own knowledge not only on the concept but on its application to contemporary events.
Through my project I aspire to culminate not only a comprehensive knowledge on the subject of Anzac Day and its portrayal, but also an increased sense of social and cultural literacy, being able to cross-examine contrasting thoughts and ideas on the topic of Anzac Day and the myriad of considerations that are present in its representation and acknowledgement.Nice last paragraph! Here, it's all about tying everything up so it makes sense. So i recconmend adding an extra sentence instead of talking about the change and continuity aspect to really give it more oomph. The rest is still good, as you are talking about the PIP as a journey and how it will enhance both your skills and social and cultural literacy
I've added spaces where i believe it's good to move onto a new paragraph as there is pretty much 5 sections you need to cover in an intro (hence, 5 paragraphs! :o )
If you're struggling to add more information to improve clarity, etc as well as cut down enough, don't be afraid to have say 520 words. It's okay to stray a fewwords over. I say a few because it becomes obvious pretty fast that you've ignored the word limit.
This is good for a draft! You still have plenty of time to rework this intro before the deadline. From here, it's all about refining and improving what you already have!
Hope this helps!
Good luck! ;D
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Hey just wondering if I could get advice on both my introduction? Thank you :)
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“Comedy induces far greater anxiety than any other genre. It reveals a great deal about a culture’s preoccupations, prejudices, and character—it tells viewers who we’re laughing with and who we ought to be laughing at” I like this, is it a quote? If it is then it still counts towards your word count
Bogans and Hipsters; twenty first century Australian Comedies talk the language of class. Contemporary Australian comedy triumphs include the likes of Kath and Kim, Upper Middle Bogan, Housos and Here Come The Habibs; it is not hard to miss – Australia finds comicality in the representation of class. The lower class become synonymous with the lesser class and the upper are depicted as the elite. This is a nice bit of information, but given the parameters you need to satisfy in your intro, it may be best to place this in your central material. That being said, it may be good to put in maybe one or two lines introducing your overall topic before delving into your secific pip project topic; so you'd need to make this more concise. It's like 118 words, which you will need elsewhere.
These stigmatisations of social class within ‘egalitarian’ Australia have manifested into the macro mainstream discourse, shaping ‘The Australian Identity’. From as early back as c. 380 BC, humanity has recognised the effect of expectations upon pre-adult identity. Greek philosopher Plato noted “[The stage of adolescence is] their most plastic, each thing assimilates itself to the model whose stamp anyone wishes to give it.”
As an adolescent from a lower socio-economic background, the impact that stigmatisation has upon identity and my peer’s sense of self has been profound, shifting from a macro level and deeply embedding itself into micro level interactions. So this is where you're explaining why you chose your area of inquiry. I'd put this under the bit where you say "For my Personal Interest Project I have investigated....." to make it flow better
For my Personal Interest Project,(Can be shortened to 'PIP' if you really need to cut down on your words) I have investigated the effect of stereotypes projected through Australian comedy television. Comedy was chosen because of its “capacity to perpetuate ideas and representations that, in other contexts, would be unacceptable but, using the guise of humour are rendered permissible” . Highly-exaggerated situations and characterisations are expected in comedy films; harmful messages, therefore, about perceptions of class can be disseminated without boundaries. This part is good as you have introduced what it is about and why chose this area of inquiry (Also see above comment)
Hence, this Personal Interest Project has a prevalent focus upon Contemporary Australian Comedy’s Representation of Social Class and Its Influence upon Adolescent Identity. With class as my cross-cultural comparison, I will examine how higher and lower-class adolescents interpret the phenomena of constructing ones’ identity from the conceptions perpetuated by Australian Comedy Television. So your cross cultural comparison is looking at different socio-economic levels? Cool! Though you have other stuff to introuduce here first, so the cross cultural component can come in later
The utilisation of secondary resources, such as academic articles, books and comedy television series, have presented effectual base knowledge in determining the impact of comedy television’s representation of class upon the adolescent’s identity. Subsequently, in order to further delve into my Project, I employed both qualitive and quantitative research methodologies. Due to the nature and demographic of this topic, I have conducted appropriate research including an online distributed questionnaire, aimed at current adolescents (aged 14-19), incorporating both open and close-ended questions, to assess the general meso opinion. In one particular case study I did a content analysis of Australian comedy series ‘Struggle Street’ as well as conducting an online interview with a former student to understand the profound influence of comedy upon her community adolescent identity within Australia. So you've introduced your research methods, Nice! Although it'd be good to add something on why you're using them-why they're best suited to your topic (like why would you use these ones over others?)
This would kinda be where you introduce your cross cultural comparison as it the 4th paragraph. The third should be about addressing your research methodologies
This Personal Interest Project relates to the Society and Culture course, as media and class have a mutually dependent relationship in the influence of the socialisation of an individual. Throughout this project I aim to research effectively and ethically, further establishing a sense of social literacy to understand the effect of the comedic stigmatisation upon adolescents. Nice little round off!
-> What is your hypothesis? What are you setting out to prove in your research? You may have mentioned it somewhere; in that case it needs to be clearer. A marker should know what your hypothesis is and what you're trying to prove from the beginning. So add in a paragraph between your first one dealing with your area of inquiry and your third one on methodologies and focus soley on your hypothesis/what you're trying to prove.
->What is your aspect dealing with change and contrinuity? You have to address this concept somewhere in the PIP and i couldn't work out what it was from what i read. You don't HAVE to include it in your intro, but its good to do as the maker then knows from the outset. This differs from the cross-cultural part as it is a competely new component
->When disscussing your cross-cultural component, explain how it presents you with a point of view different from your own and how that allows you to empathise better with whatever group/thing/culture etc that you're going to talk about.
->This isn't a bad intro. The language is pretty good as well. As i have said, there's just some things that you need to add/tweak to make it even better!
Good luck! ;D
Hi!
I was wondering if I can get my Intro checked over! It's 495 words and the topic is about "The Depiction of Gender and Racial Stereotypes in Gaming and How It Affects the Socialisation of Young People".
Ooooooh a pip on gaming! This sounds cool
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"In a land, far, far away, a little girl at the age of 4 grew up with a console in her hand. The hours of spare moments where her little fingers worked away on the controller, showcasing her determination to win against the boss; her innocence yet to know of the complexities of gender and race present in gaming.I like this! It really draws me in, like i want to find out more! That being said, if you add more and are struggling to cut it down later then this might be a good bit to get rid of if you need to get under 500 words
Gaming being an integral part of my micro world has had a profound effect on me whilst growing up, and being exposed to gaming at an early age, I would spend hours playing Super Mario trying to rescue the damsel in distress, Princess Peach. Including a girl adventure game where slim figured women with enhanced physiques were your playable characters. This raised the question to if that was the ideal expectation women were meant to satisfy; the hourglass body, breasts no bigger than a D cup demigoddess and the tendency to need a guy to save her. At such an impressionable age, it had altered my perception of gender and carried it into reality. Additionally, reoccurring racial stereotypes had also captured my attention. Why were dark skinned men often portrayed as criminals? And, being from an Asian descent, were bulky Asian men with scars, dragon tattoos and residence in Chinatown all that society perceives of us? Due to these stereotypes the gaming world presents, it has fuelled my reasoning to do an in-depth investigation within this area of topic. Good! You've explained why you chose this area of inuqiry. Although, i'd look at making some of it more concise in order to introuce your actual topic (what is your pip about?)
Through undertaking my PIP, I hope to gain a better understanding of gender and racial stereotypes in gaming and how they affect the socialisation of young people. Including, the influence stereotypes have on a person’s development of their self-identity and their role in society. So is this your hypthesis? If so it needs to be clear that is, cause right now im just guessing that.
This area of topic will be investigated through both quantitative and qualitative methodologies in order to obtain information to form the foundation of my personal interest project. By using questionnaires, it will allow me to gather large amounts of data from both males and females about their perceptions of race and gender within gaming, in a short amount of time. Questionnaires also allow anonymity which will opt for more honest responses. Content analysis will allow me to quantitatively record characters within numerous video games that are targeted by gender role stereotypes. Often including characters that inherit male power authority over female characters. While an in-person interview with a professor, will enable me to gain valid qualitative information on how gender and racial stereotypes effect the identity of young people, consequently then effecting their socialisation with others. Secondary research will also assist me to gain both certified information and personal opinions to form the basis of my research. Good! There's nothing i can see that needs fixing here
In my quest for social literacy, I chose this topic not only due to my passion for the psychological effects of gaming on young people, but for the chance to analyse a gender and racial issue that has been occurring for centuries influenced by traditional values but now carried on as a trope in contemporary gaming."Good
->What is your cross-cultural comparison? You haven't mentioned it i believe? When talking about it explain how it presents you with a point of view different from your own and how that allows you to empathise better with whatever group/thing/culture etc that you're going to talk about.
->How will you be exploring change/continuity in your pip as well? This is also compulsary; to be included somewhere within your pip
->Look, tbh you don't HAVE to include these two things in the intro (they do of course most definitely need to be included within your pip), but it's good that the marker knows that how you're addressing these requirements from the outset.
All in all, this is a good draft.
Keep up the good work and good luck! ;D
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CONGRATULATIONS to the class of 2018 for completing their Personal Interest Projects and submitting them today woohoo!
I hope that you have felt that a huge weight has been lifted off your shoulders. Your PIP is FINALLY done! Goodbye to your resource annotations. Goodbye to your central material. And most of all- goodbye to this hectic yet rewarding journey. Would love to get some reflections here in the PIP Thread. Best part of doing the PIP? Worst part? Favourite research method? But the thing I want to ask everyone- how have you as a person become a more socially and culturally literate person?
PS: This PIP Thread has been a tremendous success and this wouldn't have happen without you guys!
Good luck with the rest of trials and your HSC journey. ;D
Bea x
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CONGRATULATIONS to the class of 2018 for completing their Personal Interest Projects and submitting them today woohoo!
I hope that you have felt that a huge weight has been lifted off your shoulders. Your PIP is FINALLY done! Goodbye to your resource annotations. Goodbye to your central material. And most of all- goodbye to this hectic yet rewarding journey. Would love to get some reflections here in the PIP Thread. Best part of doing the PIP? Worst part? Favourite research method? But the thing I want to ask everyone- how have you as a person become a more socially and culturally literate person?
PS: This PIP Thread has been a tremendous success and this wouldn't have happen without you guys!
Good luck with the rest of trials and your HSC journey. ;D
Bea x
I handed mine in today and posted an entry in my Major Works thread for my HSC Journal but I definitely do want to expand a bit more here ;D
I agree so much with owidjaja (what even is trials when you have 40% of a course due before that) and I relate on such a spiritual level about the stress of the annotated bibliography. Writing about what was essentially the same thing for 35 secondary resources was not at all fun >:(
I found the Log the most difficult part as well because 500 words was definitely not enough to cover my whole process. My original Log draft was double the amount and I almost wanted to cry seeing that word count because I had to cut out half of what I originally wrote. While it ended up more concise, I did find the Log really restrictive.
My favourite methodology was the focus group and I actually dedicated a whole chapter to it as the main methodology I referenced, alongside the secondary resources I found. I enjoyed discussing with the girls I facilitated it with and they were really open to sharing their experiences. This was the most useful research methodology for me out of the three I used (survey and interviews were the other two).
A ridiculous example of this is probably whenever I binge-watch videos of this kpop band Seventeen (any kpop fans out there?), one of the members is biracial and he often talks about how he looks like a 'foreigner' and was discriminated as a child even though he moved from New York to Seoul at the age of 5. I was watching a video of his interview and whenever the hosts of the talkshow gushed about his appearance, he looked really uncomfortable and I think that's when I realised how my PIP changed my perspective on biracial people. Even in the comments section, a lot of people noticed how uncomfortable he was throughout the interview but there are people still saying 'Omg halfie babies are so pretty'- I'm really hesitant to stan him just because just saying 'Oh he's pretty that's why he's my bias' makes me feel like I'm fetishising biracial people.
Vernon is actually my bias so I screamed when I read this ;D I think your topic is incredibly interesting! I did mine on interracial relationships and the acceptance of them in multicultural societies so our links are quite similar. I found it very educational for me to expound beyond my own relationship experiences and found a lot of personal reconciliation in seeing how other interracial couples have resolved conflicts. It definitely informed myself of how I could maintain a healthy relationship with my own partner.
Perhaps the greatest thing I learnt was how bloody bad the media can be in turning what is ultimately love into something of criticism. I found some really racist articles and close-minded discussions of interracial relationships that infuriated me. My case study on 'Yellow Fever' particularly incited anger in me because of how poorly the media illustrates East Asian women and the propaganda of the exotic East Asian identity. What should only be love has become an area of judgement and the media's role in it was something I became more aware of. Agenda setting is inevitable but some of the resources I found were really biased and uncool.
In summation, the worst part of the PIP might have been me realising how much of a demand it was. I justified it in my HSC journal thread that the PIP is arguably the most demanding major work (I also do Ext 2, Music and VA) of the ones I did. I didn't think it would take me so long to annotate a bibliography, nor did I think it would make me want to delete a whole perfectly written draft because of a word count that exceeded the prescribed one by twice the amount. I exhausted myself on this baby but the best part was realising that I made it my own. I chose a topic that mattered to me and that will continue to matter as I live and love with my partner. One of the biggest regrets I know I would have had would be choosing a topic just for the marks. I'm glad I chose to explore something that meant more than a HSC mark.
I came out of the submission feeling braver for my other major works and feel liberated knowing that almost half of SAC is already done and dusted. I look forward to hearing how everyone else went ;D That'll be all for me ;D