A person who is able to effectively deliver one’s own connotation of written words by bringing exceptional qualities to their voice
gets receives the recognition of being a ‘distinctive voice’. A distinctive voice stands out for
its own creation (this part of your work is jarring for me. Perhaps you mean, "creative construction..." and conversion of the text to the speaker’s own personal experiences, predicaments, views and opinions to their audiences. These voices force their audiences to listen,
get become engaged, acknowledge, understand, think and develop a sense of empathy for the speaker. Composers Aung Suu Kyi, Severn Cullis-Suzuki and Julia Roberts all powerfully transform their recount of experiences into meaningful perspectives.
This is looking really good! My only critiques are about the wording - make sure that everything you write, particularly in an introduction, describes exactly what you want it to. You want to give the marker a super clear vision. Aung San Suu Kyi’s heroic, experienced and mature voice invoked riveting arguments in justification for the ideal of universal human rights and the political construct that safeguards those rights. In an event hailed as the "Most remarkable in the entire history of the Nobel prizes", Aung San Suu Kyi, the Burmese democracy campaigner, delivered her acceptance speech for her peace prize in Oslo's vast City Hall more than two decades after it was awarded to her. Suu Kyi’s carefully chosen words in her acceptance speech are delivered with just the right mix of
perfectly perfectly here doesn't offer a lot. It is your opinion, which could be strengthened if you were directly basing it off a feature of the tone (soft, loud, etc). opted voice, tone and impressive body language allows her to enthral her audience. She has not used any hard figures or statistical data to relay the sufferings of her countrymen who believe in democracy and human rights, but instead employs inclusive language such as “endeavours of those”, “some of our warriors”, “best known detainees”, “many ethnic nationalities”. It is through this inclusive language of words like “We”, “Our” and “Us” that allows Aung San Suu Kyi to connect to the audiences ethos, they are made to feel like part of a group and inspired to take collective action.
Great! Richard Green, in his presentation ‘The 7 secrets of the greatest speakers in history,’ examines that speeches should not be overwhelmed with ‘data’ and ‘statistics’ but instead the manner and the style of the speaker weighs more importance. By not utilizing any statistical data, the rhetoric of Aung San Suu Kyi’s speech becomes even more compelling such that she uses her experienced and mature voice to push her audience to fight for their Human Rights. Through the use of inclusive language and the exclusion of statistical data, Aung San Suu Kyi is able to portray her powerful perspective on the political safeguards of Burma by powerfully retelling her experience.
Your essay is brought back to it here, which is great! But, throughout the paragraph, we need references to the idea that the text relived an importance experience beyond just recounting. After each literary analysis, drop in the essay question and make a connection to it. This strengthens your essay so much!I'd start this paragraph with a more explicit reference to the question at hand 
So by this I mean, talk about how the text goes from recount to important experience, rather than giving a plot outline Severn Suzuki’s youthful and energetic voice speaks about the endurance of her generation to experience the effects of climate change being brought about by the constant misuse and abuse of the bountiful natural resources by generations of humans. Vancouver native Severn Suzuki, 12 years old, took the microphone at the United Nations Earth Summit in Rio de Janeiro in 1992. Within five minutes, she'd delivered a speech from her youthful perspective and is now popularly known as "The Girl Who Silenced the World.” An example of her youthful perspective can be seen in the extract, “To tell you adults you must change your ways.” Suzuki's use of high modality in addressing her much older audience is evident through the words “You must,” whilst the words “To tell you adults” clearly establishes that it is the younger generation talking to the older generation. It is through this tone that Suzuki puts forth a real call to action and challenges those in power. This high modal tone is supported by Suzuki’s use of facts and statistics and how she immediately connects these with her audience by using statements like “We are all a part of a family 5 billion strong”, “30 million species strong” making these hard facts real and appreciative. These connecting statements compels her audience to visualise the plight she is narrating and accept her fears on behalf of her whole generation. By using these connecting statements, Suzuki clearly establishes a very compelling message for her audience in that the safety of our planet is no joke. Here she establishes Richard Green’s 4th point in his presentation ‘The 7 secrets of the greatest speakers in history,’ by “establishing a clear and compelling message” she is able to appeal to the audiences logos and further persuade them to start taking drastic action. Through the use of high modality and apt connecting statements, Suzuki’s rhetoric blends Richard Green’s fourth secret to great affect as she is able to recount her experience and portray her perspective.
I think you've done a good job here in talking about the text, techniques and effect. I think you need to work on making an explicit link to the idea that the composer isn't just recounting, but is in fact doing so so much more than that. The essay question is really great here, because it suits the module so well. So it isn't too difficult to weave through your response when you consciously think about it after each and every sentence. You will see so many little pockets to weave it in!As part of an awareness campaign in which well known celebrities are used to create voices of nature, Julia Roberts represents ‘Mother Earth.’ Her wise and sophisticated voice speaks about how material reality poses stark limitations on our narcissistic desires. The narrator’s tone and language as she discusses humanity is very ominous and off-putting. Speaking with all the haughty disdain we’d associate with a Witch like character, Roberts scoffs at man as an insignificant and transient biological blip. “I have fed species greater than you,” she recounts. “And I have starved species greater than you.” Roberts employs chiasmus in “I don't need people but people need me,” creating a special artistic effect which transforms her recounted experience and places emphasis on what she wants to communicate. We can't wreck the only known habitable planet and expect it to magically fix itself. By adopting a very ominous tone and through employing a clever chiasmus, Julia Roberts is able to transform her recount experience into a unique perspective.
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