ATAR Notes: Forum
VCE Stuff => VCE English Studies => VCE Subjects + Help => VCE English Work Submission and Marking => Topic started by: Willba99 on June 18, 2017, 09:45:12 pm
-
Hey guys!
I'm doing my year 12 analytical SAC this week so, for a practise run, i picked a random article from The Age to analyse. If you could read my essay and offer any feedback I'd really appreciate it. Just to clarify, I attached the article first and my essay second!
-
Yo Wilba...
Thanks for the opportunity...
These analyticals are what stuff me up as well...
Not an expert by any means, but I personally would change the conclusion around a little...
Try this one...
"Dow’s article uses an array of indirect persuasive techniques to express her contention that the plastic cladding in the Lacrosse Tower is endangering lives. She appeals to fear, quotes experts, and uses subtle connotations to weave a tapestry of alarm. Finally, her visuals also add to the sense of urgency which Dow is trying to create."
Not sure about the rest of it...
thats just what I picked up on, sorry... ;)
-
Thanks for the feedback mate
i agree, the conclusion is a bit bland as it is