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Title: Quick feedback on creative please.
Post by: left right gn on October 15, 2017, 02:32:02 pm

Hello,
Can someone give me some final brief feedback on my creative?

Thanks

Title: Re: Quick feedback on creative please.
Post by: jamonwindeyer on October 15, 2017, 06:39:55 pm

This is actually really similar to the idea for my Creative, like you could actually put them next to each other and be about the same character almost! ;D

Beautifully written, had me hooked from the start, seriously fantastic stuff. I think the dialogue at the end is perhaps a tad forced, I personally think just "I'm gay." would work better, buuuut personal nitpick. Love your work :)

Be sure you practice tailoring this to different stimuli!! ;D