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Title: ADVANCED ENGLISH: The Crucible and Animal Farm Comparative Essay
Post by: xxxonakillstreak on November 24, 2018, 10:59:58 pm
Hey I do Advanced English and I will have to write this essay in class, and am given 40 minutes to complete 2 essays, so I will have 20 minutes to write this one essay.
My assessment is on Monday, so if you could give me feedback whenever you're free that would be great thanks :D
Thanks <33
Title: Re: ADVANCED ENGLISH: The Crucible and Animal Farm Comparative Essay
Post by: jasn9776 on November 25, 2018, 11:08:17 am
Hi, I have read your essay. I felt like the expression was generally quite good and the ideas were easy to understand. However, i felt that the punctuation could be improved and the linking could be better. I did the crucible for power and politics last year.
Here is more detailed feedback:
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1EzuW8pATyH_ZCGA5czaNx8foNmVqgHdJikv7tK7tKW8/edit?usp=sharing

Hope that helps.
Title: Re: ADVANCED ENGLISH: The Crucible and Animal Farm Comparative Essay
Post by: xxxonakillstreak on November 25, 2018, 12:10:21 pm
Hi, I have read your essay. I felt like the expression was generally quite good and the ideas were easy to understand. However, i felt that the punctuation could be improved and the linking could be better. I did the crucible for power and politics last year.
Here is more detailed feedback:
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1EzuW8pATyH_ZCGA5czaNx8foNmVqgHdJikv7tK7tKW8/edit?usp=sharing

Hope that helps.
I just realised I uploaded the wrong essay, sorry :/
I sent you a PM with the right essay if you would still be willing to give me feedback, thank you <3
Title: Re: ADVANCED ENGLISH: The Crucible and Animal Farm Comparative Essay
Post by: xxxonakillstreak on November 25, 2018, 12:12:45 pm
Also I have updated the attachment to my actual essay, so if anyone else could give me feedback that would be helpful <3