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VCE Stuff => VCE English Studies => VCE Subjects + Help => VCE English Work Submission and Marking => Topic started by: SarahEve on November 06, 2019, 09:26:14 pm

Title: Please help edit/give feedback on my personal essay! Much appreciated :)
Post by: SarahEve on November 06, 2019, 09:26:14 pm

Hi!! Any notes would be appreciated! Thanks!

Title: Re: Please help edit/give feedback on my personal essay! Much appreciated :)
Post by: yourfriendlyneighbourhoodghost on November 07, 2019, 08:50:25 am

Quote from: SarahEve  on November 06, 2019, 09:26:14 pm

Hi!! Any notes would be appreciated! Thanks!

Hey

I thought it was quite engaging and thought-provoking. Just some minor expression errors like in the intro you have 'is' repeated twice, other than that I really enjoyed it (:

Title: Re: Please help edit/give feedback on my personal essay! Much appreciated :)
Post by: SarahEve on November 07, 2019, 02:52:14 pm

Quote from: yourfriendlyneighbourhoodghost on November 07, 2019, 08:50:25 am

Hey

I thought it was quite engaging and thought-provoking. Just some minor expression errors like in the intro you have 'is' repeated twice, other than that I really enjoyed it (:

Thank you! Thanks for helping me with grammar :)