Read the low-scoring responses in the assessment reports!
some of the responses... makes you want to laugh
but just the low-scoring ones,
this is an analysis from 2004
They presented their point of use by presenting their work in a mananer so that the reader would understand what the writers have written.
The languages that each of these articles has used would be expressed and written with style and anger which involves skill and determination.
The language that was expressed from mind to paper was extrodinary because each sentence linked up to one another. In both of the principles letters there words that showed us and expressed to us in what type of mood the principal was in.
From what the letters of the principle showed it didn?t at all seem that he was in a happy mood.
To who ever had read the article everyone would say that he was in an angry mood.
For the parent in response to the principles article they weren?t very happy because the language that the lady used was also moody talk which was expressed in the words that she had written down in her article.
Which brings me to the end of my analysis. The language which was used to present their point of view was moody and angry language.
Assessors? comments:
? no apparent paragraphing is used, and expressive control and fluency is seriously and significantly lacking
? there is no real attempt to analyse the two pieces, and the student resorts to making vague and meaningless statements about supposed language use.
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