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hannahroseillia:
Oh, thanks! Sorry I'm really new to this.

walkec:
You could also look at why people choose to escape mainstream society into another (e.g. through video gaming or day dreaming)
With video gaming especially, because you can establish relationships with others online and interact with them, and have a greater sense of control over your own identity than you do in mainstream society.

Sorry if this is confusing, but I'm actually studying Whose Reality, not Identity and Belonging, so this might be too closely linked to reality than identity.

MNM101:
Does this make sense as a topic sentence " possessing a preternatural property can lead to an individual struggling with their identity"

aqple:

--- Quote from: MNM101 on May 11, 2014, 03:59:21 pm ---Does this make sense as a topic sentence " possessing a preternatural property can lead to an individual struggling with their identity"

--- End quote ---

Sounds too dramatic for the prompt you're dealing with. "Preternatural" associates more with what is beyond natural as in ghosts, spirits, etc and "property" following it sounds awkward, it's more like saying that someone has demonic-like eyes.

Instead, keep it simple, rather than making such generalised comment, you could write something about how certain characteristics of individuals cause detachment from the construct of the way we are meant to be/exceeds the expectations of society???

Hope this is helpful  :)

MNM101:
Thanks all. How would I challenge the prompt (expository)

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