Could you please correct my essay? (really urgent)

[NeedHelpWithStudy]

Hey guys , I've done an essay on the novel in the country of men . the prompt is " "I couldn't wait to be a man" what does it mean to be a man in the Libya of in the country of men?". Could you please corrrect it and send it to me if ossible, I do understand it's a pretty crappy essay. Thanks in advance.

[walkec]

I have edited and reattached it.
I have read the book, but I haven't studied it, so my feedback may not be as in depth as you would like, but I hope it helps 

On the whole, some good points but I feel that:
-you need more textual evidence to support your discussion
-your paragraphs were too short
-some of your discussion wasn't that relevant to the prompt.