Please check my essay introduction. (urgent)!

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Hey guys well I was doing an essay on the novel "In the country of men ". Only wrote an introduction but not quite sure on how good it is so i came here seeking for help. Could you please read and correct the introduction so i can finish off rest iof the essay please. :
Prompt : (How does the dominance of men affect Suleiman?)
The novel “In the country of men” written by Hisham Matar explores the issue surrounding masculinity and the violent characteristics associated with the gender. Throughout this novel one of the major themes is Dominance which Suleiman, the protagonist tries to overcome through valuable life lessons. The society that he lived in was under Qadaffi’s oppressive regime. In such society Men had more power compared to everyone else, they were able to do anything. But if they had done anything against the Qaddaffi government they were sworn to be punished brutally. Faraj had the most dominance over Suleiman and his mother. “We are the same page of an open book” tells us that Suleiman and Najwa both have been dominated by men in this society.  The way he controlled Najwa, showed Suleiman how much power a man can have in such society. When Faraj went out on business trips he had always told Suleiman “you are the man of the house”, this gave Suleiman the ability to control the events that took places. Najwa was dominated by the her family the high council, which then lead her into marrying Faraj. This marriage was done unwillingly.  It is through Najwa's stories of the past and of 'One Thousand and One Nights' that Suleiman is able to shape his own view about the true face of Libya.

[meganrobyn]

Okay, this isn't as much of an introduction as it is a collection of evidence you probably want to use in the body of the essay - so it's kind of like a body paragraph, but without a focused argument as the topic sentence and without as much analysis or linking to the argument as you would have in a BP. So I'm not really finding an essay argument here, responding to the prompt and giving you enough scope for 1200 words or so of detailed discussion.

- An introduction should start with kind of a 'background' sentence that places the text in its genre, or perhaps its time period, or perhaps the motivation of the author in writing it - something like that. It gives you a more elegant excuse to name the author and text, and kind of orients the text before narrowing down to the specific area of the prompt.

- Then you need a full thesis on the prompt. This has definitions of the key ideas woven in (subtly), an overall response to the prompt (eg affects her largely in <this> way...), and a foreshadowing of the three more specific arguments you're going to make in your three BPs to explore that overall response. You don't use evidence or examples in this - save that for your BPs, to "prove" each argument.

- Then you generally finish with some bigger 'deep meaning' statement about the author's intentions (at least as you perceive them). You know: to finish with flair.

Just a few smaller points, too:

- Try to cut unnecessary words. For example, "Hisham Matar's debut novel, In the Country of Men<underline>, ........" as an alternative to the current "The novel... etc"

- The text is ALWAYS in the present tense. Eg. "Faraj has...", "he controls...", etc.

- Try not to call themes "themes". Leave the word out. Likewise, don't call quotations "quotations" (not that you've done that here, but it's in the same category).

- Careful with little things like capitals, commas on both sides of subordinate clauses and full sentences rather than shorter ones.

I'm sorry to just focus on changes - but you obviously know the text well, so you have the content down!