Kite Runner Practice Essay

[dylancompany]

https://www.dropbox.com/s/bx6j57v1q6n0k25/Kite%20Runner%20Essay.docx

I was wondering if someone could have a read over this text response. BTW I am a Unit 1&2 Student.

Thanks

[JackSonSmith]

Hello,

I would say you are headed in the right direction.

+You are able to embed quotes quite well.
+You answer the prompt well

I would suggest expanding on some of your points. I found the tree analogy to be difficult to follow, elaborate on it a bit more.
Also, you use the words ''true hero'' too many times, look for some synonyms.

It was otherwise a solid essay. Good luck in your future essay writing.