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chuckiecheese:
Thesis ideas for the question: ‘Significant discoveries surprise and challenge’. How is that idea conveyed in ‘The Tempest’ and ONE other related text of your own choosing?
Any help would be great!
brontem:
Hi Elyse! Thanks so much for your feedback, a fresh set of eyes can really help point out areas of improvement :)
I did my best to fix up according to your suggestions, and would love for you to take another look :)
thanks so much again!
Alalamc:
Well Elyse,thank you so much. You are VERY helpful. I totally agree about everything you have said and will improve on them. I tried writing this essay in 40 minutes for my half yearly exam and so I understand about the clarity. Once again thankyou for being able to take the time and look through my essay in such a short amount of time😁😁😁
elysepopplewell:
--- Quote from: Alalamc on March 06, 2016, 07:29:46 pm ---Well Elyse,thank you so much. You are VERY helpful. I totally agree about everything you have said and will improve on them. I tried writing this essay in 40 minutes for my half yearly exam and so I understand about the clarity. Once again thankyou for being able to take the time and look through my essay in such a short amount of time😁😁😁
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That's okay! I'm glad we are both agreeing on the features of your essay! That is a very impressive effort for exam conditions this early on in the course, you should be very proud :)
elysepopplewell:
--- Quote from: chuckiecheese on March 06, 2016, 05:55:44 pm ---Thesis ideas for the question: ‘Significant discoveries surprise and challenge’. How is that idea conveyed in ‘The Tempest’ and ONE other related text of your own choosing?
Any help would be great!
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Hey! So, I don't know the Tempest well and I don't know what your ORT is, so I of course don't know what that is either haha. What I will do is give you some examples of thesis statements and you can kind of mix and match sections and hopefully find one that gives you an idea of how to write your own thesis :)
'Significant discoveries surprise and challenge’
* Although discoveries may be carefully planned, they may have the capacity to surprise and challenge the individual nonetheless.
* The surprising and challenging nature of discovery may have the ability to be transformative of an individual's perception of the world around them.
* The once understood notions of reality/identity may be altered by the surprising and challenging nature of discoveries.
* The evolution of one's perception may be accelerated by significant discoveries that challenge and surprise.Hopefully this gives you a bit of direction. From what I know of the Tempest, these can suit some readings of the text. :)
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