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12070:
--- Quote ---All the best - hopefully this gives you a hand to tighten up the essay a little, although I can ensure you I'm impressed by it![/b]
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Hey Elyse, thanks heaps for this. Really appreciate you doing such a thorough job in a short amount of time. I am so sorry that I forgot to mention that this was a follow up from the essay ('Outline how peace is expressed through the sacred texts of TWO religious traditions and demonstrate how this provides guidance for the attainment of world peace.') that had the quote you said was really appropriate and relevant. It was in the SOR question thread. I think I will incorporate the catholic example into the second paragraph and focus more on Anglican in the first to hopefully compete at the top. Thanks for all the confidence building comments as it really encourages me to go back and improve my essay. Thanks again :)
elysepopplewell:
--- Quote from: 12070 on June 12, 2017, 08:14:18 pm ---Hey Elyse, thanks heaps for this. Really appreciate you doing such a thorough job in a short amount of time. I am so sorry that I forgot to mention that this was a follow up from the essay ('Outline how peace is expressed through the sacred texts of TWO religious traditions and demonstrate how this provides guidance for the attainment of world peace.') that had the quote you said was really appropriate and relevant. It was in the SOR question thread. I think I will incorporate the catholic example into the second paragraph and focus more on Anglican in the first to hopefully compete at the top. Thanks for all the confidence building comments as it really encourages me to go back and improve my essay. Thanks again :)
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Ohh! Sorry I didn't make the connection. Well in that case I think you've done a better job of answering the question than what I first anticipated. I'm keen to know how you go. I didn't study SOR2 myself so I haven't written a response like this, but I've read a lot now so I'm still learning too. Hopefully this was handy! :)
12070:
--- Quote from: elysepopplewell on June 12, 2017, 09:24:39 pm ---Ohh! Sorry I didn't make the connection. Well in that case I think you've done a better job of answering the question than what I first anticipated. I'm keen to know how you go. I didn't study SOR2 myself so I haven't written a response like this, but I've read a lot now so I'm still learning too. Hopefully this was handy! :)
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I spent the last two hours making more explicit references and adding variants to each paragraph. I'll let you know for sure, and your help has undoubtedly improved my essay. Jamon took me from a 13 to a 19/20 so I have realised the effectiveness and importance of your feedback. Could only wish we got feedback like yours at school. Thanks again :)
camillablome:
Thankyou so much Elyse! I'll make those changes now. Here is another response to 'Outline the importance of Mabo for the Land Rights movement.' If you have time, i would love for you to read through this one as well!
The land rights movement recognises the inextricable connection between land and Indigenous spirituality and identity. The land is the basis for the strong connection held with the ancestral beings providing them with links to the Dreaming as well as kinship bonds and totems. Without the land Aboriginal people are unable to stay connected to their ancestors through ceremonies and also cannot preserve and celebrate sacred sites. As stated by Nyaparu Rose, a Nyangumarta Elder, “Native title is very important to us because it allows us to get our country back, to protect our spirits and sites, to go camping, hunting and fishing. Before native title we never had any recognition as traditional owners, we had no rights in our own country.” Indigenous Australians have struggled with the land rights battle since European invasion in 1788. The Land Rights Movement is both a religious and political movement to secure the rights and re-establish the spiritual links of Aboriginal people to their land and culture. From the 1960s onwards, many tribes attempted to reclaim their land to be able to reconnect with their spirituality. The Mabo case was initiated by five Indigenous plaintiffs, led by Eddie Mabo, from the Murray Islands in the Torres Strait, where the Meriam people were fighting for land rights. In June 1992, the High Court of Australia, ruled in favour of Eddie Mabo, stating that the Aboriginal and Torres Strait had a continuous link with the land and continued to practice laws and the customs associated with the land before British colonisation. This was immensely important as it over threw the legal fiction of ‘terra nullius’, through the acknowledgement that there was an error in common law that failed to recognise native title. Despite the Mabo judgement being regarded as a landmarking decision by non-Indigenous Australians, the Aboriginal perspective can differ as the case merely represents a marginal shift in the way Australian law views native title. Regardless of the perspective taken, the Mabo judgment did achieve some measure of justice for Aboriginal people. It opened the way for them to make claims in respect of their traditional lands. It set precedent for the Native Title Act 1993, the Wik Decision in 1996 and for the ongoing land rights movement.
mattmorley:
Hey,
I was going to post my religion and peace essay here, but we have to submit through turnitin, so i think my whole essay will come up 100% plagarism due to it being here.
Is there anyway i could get it marked by you guys without having the issue stated above.
Thanks
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