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[2016 LA Club] Week 2

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qazser:

--- Quote from: Anonymous on March 03, 2016, 07:21:24 pm ---Will do one tomorrow night or so, when i finish editing my LA from Week 1

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Forgot the tick again

Anonymous:
I whipped up this in about 5 min as an intro, is it alright if I can get some feedback on it? For an introduction, is this adequate enough?  ???


In a newspaper response to the largely successful political campaign of the president candidate Donald Trump, Eileen Corrigan-Smith contends with a critical and indignant tone that Donald Trump is not an appropriate candidate for the running of president of the Unites States and if elected, may bring about negative outcomes for the future. Corrigan-Smith also advocates that the future president of the Unites States should have the capability to meet the challenges of leading a country, and not to waste time and resources.



Thank you so much!!! I have a language analysis SAC next week, kinda nervous :{

HopefulLawStudent:

--- Quote from: Anonymous on March 03, 2016, 08:23:53 pm ---In a newspaper response to the largely successful political campaign of the president candidate Donald Trump, Eileen Corrigan-Smith contends with a critical and indignant tone that Donald Trump is not an appropriate candidate for the running of president of the Unites States and if elected, may bring about negative outcomes for the future. Corrigan-Smith also advocates that the future president of the Unites States should have the capability to meet the challenges of leading a country, and not to waste time and resources.

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There isn't really a connection between the first and second sentence. Language analysis essays have to be a cohesive essay, right? This lacks a sense of cohesion. Could probably have condensed the entire thing into a sentence... Still, this is really good. You mention tone, the author and summarise the article's contention pretty; that was all pretty much on point (admittedly I only skimmed the article so I may have failed to pick up nuancy stuff about the contention).

Good luck for your LA SAC!

PS: Someone correct me if I screwed up.

FallingStar:
To convince the readers that Donald Trump they should not vote for Donald Trump as the president of the United states, Corrigan-Smith portray Trump as having a "narcissistic personality."  The word narcissistic has a strong negative connotation as a selfish person, encouraging the readers to disapprove of Trumps personality, hence positioning them to feel as though Trump should not be the president of their country. Furthermore, Corrigan-Smith states that he only offers "ridicule and insults" instead of discussing "current events." These words are often connoted with "adolescent pettiness", presenting Trump as not sufficiently mature enough to be the president. Voters generally want someone who is a strong leader to be the head of state in the country. With Donald Trump being reduced by the writer into a selfish, uneducated bully, the readers can only be encouraged to view him as a weak political leader, thereby they will view him as being unsuitable for being the president. Corrigan-Smith also mentions that America needs a president is "prepared to meet the challenges ahead." Readers, after being convinced that Donald Trump as being an immature bully, they are likely to view that Trump will not meet the challenges of solving issues in a variety of situations. This viewpoint highlights that Donald Trump is likely to be an incompetent person given that he is in the position of president, convincing them that Trump does not deserve to be the president of the United States. Also, the readers of this letter are likely to be voters in the presidential elections, so they probably would be convinced that they should not vote for Trump as the president of the United states.

Anonymous:
Only just got wind of this. Am typing this on my phone, right now. So, I hope it's good enough. It's just an introduction, but if possible I'll try to make a body paragraph as soon as I get home.

There has been much attention drawn by the controversial presidential candidate, Donald Trump, as his candidacy has split U.S voters, who hold polarising views on his legitimacy in running for presidency. Corrigan-Smith condemns in a scathing commentary of the presidential campaign, Donald Trump's candidacy as a disgraceful development, yet also deeply reflective of contemporary politics. That it has devolved into a commodified franchise exempts the presidential seat as having any true objective duty, which Corrigan-Smith coerces her readers to reject. Corrigan-Smith urges the American public to ignore and put aside their votes for Donald Trump lest his presidency degrades the American public image further, as evident from the public's consideration of him as president.

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