Introduction for my AOS essay

[nickglyn]

Hey guys, I was just wondering if you could see if my intro for this essay question is okay? I'm in Advanced studying Away (bleh) for my prescribed and the film Pleasantville for my related! Cheers x

“Discoveries require new understandings and confronting old views. It sometimes requires us to re-evaluate who we are.”

Using the quote, discuss how discoveries can create change in oneself.

Changes to an individual’s psyche, and ultimately their perceptions of themselves and the world around them, are catalysed through unexpected self and emotional discoveries. These changes may further be evoked through deliberate action and ambition for change, ideas evident in Michael Gow’s play Away and director Gary Ross’ motion picture Pleasantville (1998). By examining the transformative power of journey, as well as ideas of redemption and reconciliation, both composers illustrate their characters re-evaluation of themselves, provoked through a confrontation of old values, thus forcing them to question their and the audience’s beliefs.

[jamonwindeyer]

Hey guys, I was just wondering if you could see if my intro for this essay question is okay? I'm in Advanced studying Away (bleh) for my prescribed and the film Pleasantville for my related! Cheers x

“Discoveries require new understandings and confronting old views. It sometimes requires us to re-evaluate who we are.”

Using the quote, discuss how discoveries can create change in oneself.

Changes to an individual’s psyche, and ultimately their perceptions of themselves and the world around them, are catalysed through unexpected self and emotional discoveries. These changes may further be evoked through deliberate action and ambition for change, ideas evident in Michael Gow’s play Away and director Gary Ross’ motion picture Pleasantville (1998). By examining the transformative power of journey, as well as ideas of redemption and reconciliation, both composers illustrate their characters re-evaluation of themselves, provoked through a confrontation of old values, thus forcing them to question their and the audience’s beliefs.

Hey Nick! Welcome to the forums! Let me know if you need a hand finding anything!

I would say that this works extremely well! I'd perhaps add a little bit on each texts conceptual basis explicitly; just in one phrase/sentence explain how the text represents the idea of Discovery that you will be discussing? Further, I've not seen a question that says "Using the quote," before, but I think you would have to quote it directly? You've definitely addressed the idea really well, but it might need to be a direct quote? I'll get Elyse to follow up here, she'd know better than I

[nickglyn]

Okay awesome, thanks heaps brother!

[elysepopplewell]

Hey Nick! Welcome to the forums! Let me know if you need a hand finding anything!

I would say that this works extremely well! I'd perhaps add a little bit on each texts conceptual basis explicitly; just in one phrase/sentence explain how the text represents the idea of Discovery that you will be discussing? Further, I've not seen a question that says "Using the quote," before, but I think you would have to quote it directly? You've definitely addressed the idea really well, but it might need to be a direct quote? I'll get Elyse to follow up here, she'd know better than I

I haven't seen it commonly either, but, to be on the safe side, I would at least directly quote a snippet of the question. So I'd take on even just 5 words from the quote and directly source them into your work. Quoting an entire sentence is really difficult and awkward and chunky and bleh, but if you directly quote just a snippet I think it will be good enough to show you have attacked the stimulus!

[nickglyn]

you guys are the best, thanks for this!