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HSC Ancient History Question Thread
sudodds:
--- Quote from: grace.estelle on March 22, 2017, 10:22:51 pm ---Hi Susie, could you mark my essay please? :-* Also, I know you didn't study my topic, but for the 'roles' part in para 3, would I have to go into specific details or is what I'm doing still ok?
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Hi Grace!
I'm going to have a look over your essay now :) I just now created an essay marking thread, so I will post your feedback there once it is done! Here is the link! (I'll send you a PM as well once I've gone through everything!)
Susie
grace.estelle:
--- Quote from: sudodds on March 22, 2017, 10:44:20 pm ---Hi Grace!
I'm going to have a look over your essay now :) I just now created an essay marking thread, so I will post your feedback there once it is done! Here is the link! (I'll send you a PM as well once I've gone through everything!)
Susie
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Ok thank you!!
sudodds:
--- Quote from: grace.estelle on March 22, 2017, 10:47:41 pm ---Ok thank you!!
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No worries!
And to answer your specific question about going into detail on the roles of each of the members in paragraph 3, unfortunately I can't really say for sure as I haven't studied the option :( To me that paragraph seemed really strong, but as I said in my feedback, I highly recommend giving your teacher a draft as well (if they accept drafts), as they'll be able to direct you much better than I can in regards to stuff like that :)
jadelaishevsky:
Hi :) I have to write an essay on "How significant was the consulship of Pompey and Crassus in 70BCE on the developments of the late Republic?" and im really struggeling with an introduction, could you possibly give me any pointers? I aways struglle with history introductions because im never sure what to put in them becasue theyre not like english ones. Any help would be much appreciated!
Thanks!
sudodds:
--- Quote from: jadelaishevsky on March 24, 2017, 09:58:50 am ---Hi :) I have to write an essay on "How significant was the consulship of Pompey and Crassus in 70BCE on the developments of the late Republic?" and im really struggeling with an introduction, could you possibly give me any pointers? I aways struglle with history introductions because im never sure what to put in them becasue theyre not like english ones. Any help would be much appreciated!
Thanks!
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Hey Jade! Unfortunately I didn't study that unit :( So content wise I'm pretty useless. However I can give you a few pointers in regards to structure!
First of all you MUST start with a judgement. If your first sentence is not a judgement then you will lose marks, because it means that you are not answering the question. Looking at your question, I'd say the phrasing of your judgement should look similar to this:
The consulship of Pompey and Crassus in 70BCE was highly/partially/to a limited extent (pick which one you agree with) significant to the development of the late Republic.
See how simple the judgement was? You don't want to be going overboard, just one simple statement will do :) Then you need to explain your judgement. In 1-2 sentences, briefly explain the context of your judgement (maybe what consulship is and why it can be impactful? Again I'm not familiar with the content so I can't really say for sure what this would include), and why you have made that judgement. Then you need to outline your argument. This is literally just a list of what your paragraphs are going to be on - this can be either factors based (ie. the specific and relevant events/people/issues that resulted in the development of the late Republic) or thematic (economic, political, social, religious themes etc.). Finally, you want to link back to your original judgement/thesis.
I hope this helps! If you have any more questions let me know + feel free to post your intro here once you've written it if you'd like me to give it a look over so I can maybe be a bit more specific in my feedback :)
Susie
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