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2017 AA Club Week 8
Anonymous:
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Good job! ;D ;D
Anonymous:
Great piece of analysis. To improve, I'd recommend that you fully tease out evidence before coming to the reader effect. It just strengthens your argument. Also try and avoid subjective statements. But apart from these minor things, your analysis and break down of argument is strong. Keep it up :)
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Thank you my friend :)
Gogo14:
--- Quote from: HopefulLawStudent on September 11, 2017, 05:08:30 pm ---Back due to popular demand: Week 8 of the AA Club.
If you haven't been taking part, now is a good time to start. And if you have been taking part, please continue being a part of this great initiative. Hope everyone's exam revision is going well!!!
You'd have to be living under a rock to not be familiar with good old Banksy and his work. From the streets of the world to the internet to our art galleries - the elusive artist's fame seems to be on the up and up. So why is everyone so up in arms at the fact that Britain named his iconic Girl with Balloon as its favourite artwork?
In a climate of much unrest and uncertainty, Banksy, like many other graffiti artists, uses the streets as a canvas to expose and undermine the most sordid aspects of our society. It might not be as high class and sophisticated as some critics would like but surely moving our eyes from our screens and onto the world and issues around us is more important and what better way is there to achieve that then to slap it right in front of us to see on the way to work?
Giving an artistic voice to those who may not have had the opportunity or desire to attend a prestigious art school, it's a vehicle of expression for all; everyone and anyone from the poshest to the most oppressed can enjoy these masterpieces and appreciate that at least someone is out there trying to do what our politicians seem to have forgotten to do amidst their squabbling -- create change.
This is why Banksy's artworks are so heavily appreciated and why this iconic artwork was named Britain's favourite artwork. Who wouldn't love it?
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The author lauds Bansky's balloon girl painting and attempts to defend the art from critics. The author attempts to alienate dissenters by characterising them as "living under a rock" thus implying that they are ignorant and oblivious to Banksy's art works. This shames audience members who are unaware of his art, thus elevating "good old Banksy" to become perceived as something akin to a legend. To contextualise street art for readers who are unaware, the author describes it as using "the streets as a canvas to expose and undermine the most sordid aspects of our society" "in a climate of much unrest and uncertainty". The portrayal of society as "sordid" with "much unrest and uncertainty" is used to establish a grim mood, whereby the audience is positioned to perceive street artists as heroes who highlight the "issues around us". This bolsters appraisal of Banksy, as the audience is now left in a state of admiration for the heroic artist capitalising pressing issues that draw the attention of the audience "from our screens". The author advances the notion that the actions of street artists is "a vehicle of expression for all". The audience is positioned to appreciate the effort that artists are putting into "these masterpieces" from the heroic deeds of artists to "create change". The image depicts a sombre child reaching out to a red, heart shaped balloon symbolic of the powerful gift of love. This reinforces the influential paintings street artists make, because they resonate influential messages such as "there is always hope". By juxtaposing the heroism of artists with "what our politicians [have] forgotten to do amidst their squabbling", the author insinuates that these artists to be more influential and contributing to society, hence evoking awe and reverence for these artists from readers. The author once again attempts to alienate individuals who disprove of Banksy, through the rhetorical question of "who wouldn't love it?"
fml why am i so bad at english
clarke54321:
--- Quote from: Gogo14 on September 25, 2017, 10:20:05 pm ---The author lauds Bansky's balloon girl painting and attempts to defend the art from critics. The author attempts to alienate dissenters by characterising them as "living under a rock" thus implying that they are ignorant and oblivious to Banksy's art worksnice. Try to switch up your sentence structure (ie. from active to passive) . This shames audience members who are unaware of his art, thus elevating "good old Banksy" to become perceived as something akin to a legend jump to legend may be a bit of a stretch.. To contextualise street art for readers who are unaware, the author describes it as using "the streets as a canvas to expose and undermine the most sordid aspects of our society" "in a climate of much unrest and uncertainty"cut down on quote length. Better to integrate short sharp quotes with analysis close by where possible.. The portrayal of society as "sordid" with "much unrest and uncertainty" is used tocan never be sure about this. Try endeavours/strives/seeks/aims to.... establish a grim moodhow? Tease out the connotations of these adjectives. Word-level analysis is a great every now and then!, whereby the audience is positioned to perceive street artists as heroes who highlight the "issues around us"I'm not quite seeing the link from a grim mood to then seeing street artists as heroes. What is it about the street art that relieves civilians of such grim feelings? A bit of fleshing out would serve this point well.. This bolsters the appraisal of Banksy as a.... (doesn't make sense to just have appraisal hanging alone), as the audience is now left in a state of admiration for the heroic artist capitalising pressing issues that draw the attention of the audience "from our screens". The author advances the notion that the actions of street artists is "a vehicle of expression for all"?? Not too much analysis is going on. Work on the intermediate, 'fleshing out' stage a bit more. The audience is positioned to appreciate the effort that artists are putting into "these masterpieces" from the heroic deeds of artists to "create change"always try and analyse quotes! There's lots of goodness in them.. The image depicts a sombre child reaching out to a red, heart shaped balloon symbolic of the powerful gift of love. This reinforces the influential paintings street artists make, because they resonate influential messages such as "there is always hope". By juxtaposing the heroism of artists with "what our politicians [have] forgotten to do amidst their squabbling", the author insinuates perhaps implies/intimates/indicates would be better. Also, tease the evidence out further. What is it about the verb 'squabbling,' which indicates the politicians' ignorance?that these artists to be more influential and contributing to society, hence evoking awe and reverence for these artists from readers. The author once again attempts to alienate individuals who disprove of Banksy, through the rhetorical question of "who wouldn't love it?"But how does it alienate? The how component is very important.
fml why am i so bad at english you're not bad at all! :)
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Great job on the analysis. You have a really good awareness of authorial intent and reader effect. To ensure coherency, make sure that you fully pull the evidence apart! Tease it out to provide the intermediate stage of your analysis. This will improve your analysis even further. Keep it up :D
Isla77:
From the outset of the piece, the author praises Banksy as an artist, and the creator of the painting in debate. The slang "good old" brings some sense of familiarity and approacheableness, which from the beginning allows the reader to be drawn into hearing the argument, along with giving a clear indication of the attraction the author experiences towards Banksy. He attempts to convey the injustice and ridiculousness of Banksy's work being made to look worthless of massive attention, stating that Banksy graffities on he streets, "like many other artists." Doing so, the reader is made to realize that graffiti is widely considered as a form of art, and therefore suitable for being considered as Britain's favorite artwork.
Having established the significance of the works created by Bansky, the author then moves on to explore how the "masterpieces" can be a form of communicating the problems around us. Labellung the graffitied as being "masterpieces" adds weight to his prvious attempt to signify he importance of the artworks. Slightly exaggeratedly, the author claims art to be "a vehicle for expression", which although with some degree of force, lets the reader to accept art as a convent tool in thief lives, and to consider them with more importance. Including the whole population, "for all" and "everyone and anyone", this tool for communication does not exclude anyone form the society, and thus lets the whole population be on the same page about a particular issue. Appealing to a sense of justice and equality, this gains further acceptance and appreciation of art from the readers who may feel that at times the society has become divided and the leaders misguided, and that a tool for bringing people together giving them a chance to agree on a topic is what is desired.
Thanks in advance for any corrections/comments!
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