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2018 AA Club - Week 3
MissSmiley:
--- Quote from: clarke54321 on January 15, 2018, 09:38:24 pm ---Well-done on your analysis and overall commitment, MissSmiley! By the end of this year, you will be in a very enviable position ;) In comparison to your previous analyses, this piece was much more concise and varied in technique. I've noticed also that you're becoming more intimate with the language, which is always a big plus. Just continue to ensure that you are contextualising quotes, avoiding subjective statements/speculation, and making specific comments on analysis. If you can work on this (especially the contextualisation of evidence), you will keep strengthening your work. As always, please ask if anything is unclear :)
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Thanks a lot for your detailed feedback as always, clarke54321 !!
I just wanted to ask you about the comment on the 'compounded words' notion. I didn't understand firstly, but I had a go at writing those sentences again and also with that "pool of gasoline" imagery that you said to work on. Would you mind please checking those lines again? And have I got the compounded words interpretation right?
With the intent of evoking fear and guilt in Twitter executives for their acceptance of Trump’s violent comments, Duthie commences by juxtaposing a “nuclear-armed world” to “children in a pool of gasoline playing with matches.” The war-like imagery in the compounded lexeme “nuclear-armed” and “matches” connotes ideas of terror and innocent suffering of children and hence allows Duthie to emphasise the dangerous nature of Trump’s comments that bring about such frightening imagery reflected in the comparison. This strives to trigger more anger in an already “nuclear-armed world.” The hyperbolising in “pool of gasoline” forming an image of national land invaded by the hazardous smell of immense petrol causing congestion aims to instil feelings of fear and insecurity in Twitter executives thorough which they are compelled to block Trump’s public tweets, in order to strive for a peaceful world where suffering is far from apparent.
Thank you so much !! :D
clarke54321:
--- Quote from: MissSmiley on January 16, 2018, 11:11:00 am ---Thanks a lot for your detailed feedback as always, clarke54321 !!
I just wanted to ask you about the comment on the 'compounded words' notion. I didn't understand firstly, but I had a go at writing those sentences again and also with that "pool of gasoline" imagery that you said to work on. Would you mind please checking those lines again? And have I got the compounded words interpretation right? Apologies about this explanation. What I wanted you to consider was the close proximity of the words "nuclear-armed," "gasoline," and "matches." Because of their similar connotations- of threat and disaster- their syntactical intimacy creates an overwhelmingly painful image for readers. That is, the sentence provides no opportunity to "breathe" and escape reflections/thoughts of conflict.
With the intent of evoking fear and guilt in Twitter executives for their acceptance of Trump’s violent comments, Duthie commences by juxtaposing a “nuclear-armed world” to “children in a pool of gasoline playing with matches.” The war-like imagery in the compounded lexeme “nuclear-armed” and “matches” connotes ideas of terror and innocent suffering of children and hence allows Duthie to emphasise the dangerous nature of Trump’s comments that bring about such frightening imagery reflected in the comparisonstill a bit wordy. If you recognised this comparison as a metaphor of Trump's irrationality/ignorance it may become clearer.. This strives to trigger more anger in an already “nuclear-armed world.” The hyperbolising in “pool of gasoline” forming an image of national land invaded by the hazardous smell of immense petrol causing congestionyes, in a literal sense. However, to fully appreciate and analyse this phrase, you'd be better to read it in a more symbolic sense. Duthie implies that citizens are living in a perpetual state of peril. Trump lacks the proper perspicacity to recognise the consequence of his actions. aims to instil feelings of fear and insecurity in Twitter executives thorough which they are compelled to block Trump’s public tweets, in order to strive for a peaceful world where suffering is far from apparent.
Thank you so much !! :D
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Hopefully this helps :)
MissSmiley:
--- Quote from: clarke54321 on January 16, 2018, 11:33:16 am ---Hopefully this helps :)
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Thanks a lot!! :)
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