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bobcheng1111:
Hi I was pretty consistantly getting As in my advanced essays throughout this year, but crashed down with this speech by only getting 11/15 , so  was wandering what I lacked/ didn't do properly in it as the feedback said my presentation was fine and that the speech's content was the main issue thank you!
The question given to us was : “Representations of discovery are made memorable through the composer's ways of communicating.” Discuss this view in relation to your personal understanding of discovery.

angewina_naguen:

--- Quote from: bobcheng1111 on January 28, 2018, 12:33:45 pm ---Hi I was pretty consistantly getting As in my advanced essays throughout this year, but crashed down with this speech by only getting 11/15 , so  was wandering what I lacked/ didn't do properly in it as the feedback said my presentation was fine and that the speech's content was the main issue thank you!
The question given to us was : “Representations of discovery are made memorable through the composer's ways of communicating.” Discuss this view in relation to your personal understanding of discovery.

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Hey, bobcheng1111!

Sorry to hear about what happened  :( It must've been really disheartening. I worked on some annotations and feedback for your speech over the last two days so I hope they're of use to you. I fixated my feedback around your speech's content but also gave you some more pointers  on presentation or ways to consider structuring a speech to make your ideas flow more. I hope you can see all the annotations in the attachment and that this helps in some way! Have a good day and let me know if there's anything you need clarified  :)

Angelina  ;D

bobcheng1111:

--- Quote from: angewina_naguen on February 04, 2018, 03:45:16 pm ---Hey, bobcheng1111!

Sorry to hear about what happened  :( It must've been really disheartening. I worked on some annotations and feedback for your speech over the last two days so I hope they're of use to you. I fixated my feedback around your speech's content but also gave you some more pointers  on presentation or ways to consider structuring a speech to make your ideas flow more. I hope you can see all the annotations in the attachment and that this helps in some way! Have a good day and let me know if there's anything you need clarified  :)

Angelina  ;D

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Hey Angelina thanks so much for the feedback ! Unfortunately, I won't be able to read it tonight, but I'll have an in depth read of it  tomorrow for sure. Thank you once again !

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