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--- Quote from: Anonymous on January 14, 2019, 12:39:59 pm ---Remember, this piece is short and sweet so keep your analysis short and sweet as well! If I were to approach this under exam conditions, I'd just do one reasonably sized body paragraph with the contention "Roberts argues that Australian politicians have acted against national values", including some comments on the visual in my analysis.

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Didn't mean to post anonymously! Can we get rid of the default anonymous thing?

ngu0038:
This is only an introduction and two body paragraphs:


In a letter to the editor, Tony Roberts questions whether Australia has followed their national values after a Saudi teenager has been denied asylum in a country of “fair go.” Whilst being in an authoritative tone, Roberts aims to make Australian citizens start recognising the fault in Australia’s ability to give people the chance that they need. An image has also been included to accompany the writer in an attempt to show Australia’s lack of leadership skills.

Robert argues that the leaders of Australia have failed to recognise their country’s values. He contends this by using the quote “we’ll consider your refugee claim” from one of the political responses regarding the issue. The idea that the country’s politicians have verbally claimed this but failed to execute it implies a false sense of hope into readers, particularly Australian citizens, in Australia’s capabilities to give people a fair go in living. This attempts to make them feel like they need to show awareness for the issue and to make Australia grant asylum to people who need it. Additionally, Robert includes a relative analysis between Australia and Canada’s acceptance of the Saudi teenager. Mentioning that Canada has acknowledged “her courage” and “her plea for refuge affirms” further depicts Australia incapability to allow immigration, which thus causes the reader to understand that Australia’s current national values are a few steps behind from others across the world.

Whilst Robert argues in a firm tone, an image included in the centre of the piece is used to convey an idea to readers about Australia’s inadequacy to follow their nationally established policies. The right half of the image causes the readers to feel as if the country’s “leadership” skills aren’t going anywhere in towards what was admired. This is due to the ropes tied onto the boat’s wheel which shows a lack of control in changing directions, implying that the government is highly unlikely to change or take ethical action in regards to the issue. Furthermore, the two parts of the image being placed adjacent to each other shows the degeneration of the country’s leadership skills, where it is first seen on the left as freedom and open-minded, which then turns into a cruise with no control only to show that the politicians are only facing towards a negative direction.

Anonymous:
An introduction and one very long body paragraph (oops, but I thought it would just be good to get something written and out there rather than nothing). 

In advance, thanks for any advice/feedback!!!  :P

Recently, a young Saudi Arabian girl fled her allegedly abusive family and eventually arrived in Canada after being denied asylum in Australia. Tony Roberts’ letter to the editor, titled “Rhaf Mohammed al-Qunun: Canada the land of fair go, not Australia,” harshly criticises this political response, or lack thereof, contending that Australia’s failure to provide asylum is a blatant act of hypocrisy against our national values.

Adopting a disappointed tone, Roberts condemns the Australian government’s decision to cancel the “incredibly brave” girl’s visa, asserting that this does not align with “national characteristics or ethics.” Immediately, Roberts engenders a sense of unity between himself and readers through the use of inclusive language, stating “[w]e think of ourselves as the land of fair go.” Moreover, through the use of the word “think,” Roberts elicits doubt in readers, implying that the impression of Australia as a place where “courage… [is] admired” and “kindness…is practiced” is perhaps untrue. Instead, Roberts highlights how, despite being in “fear for her life,” the teenage girl was turned away from Australia while “our two most prominent politicians, Scott Morrison and Peter Dutton, are mysteriously quiet.” Here, readers are positioned to feel ashamed of their representative’s inaction, especially as Roberts underscores that their silence left a girl in fear of a “violent patriarchal family,” conjuring a disturbing and unsettling image. In this way, Roberts highlights the disparity between what the public believes Australia’s values to be, and what values are actually reflected through our government’s decisions.

This is further cemented through the image, titled “Leadership,” accompanying the article. On one hand, there is a ship’s steering wheel able to easily move if need be, and on the other, there is a steering wheel being pulled in all different directions by ropes, with screws and springs breaking off. This is representative our current political climate, where, in favour of pushing their own political agenda such as the “anti-immigration voter base,” Morrison and Dutton are abandoning national values, causing the direction of leadership to be strained, dangerously heading towards an iceberg. Here, Roberts evokes fear within readers, reminding them that they are also directed by these politicians, whose actions therefore reflect upon everyone. Furthermore, his description of the same politicians as “stick[ing] their heads in the sand,” serves to emphasise to readers how, through doing nothing, the government has disregarded the core values of acceptance and kindness integral to Australia’s identity. Instead, he extols Canada as being the “land of the fair go,” for granting asylum to this girl, leaving readers questioning which country really upholds its national ethics.

Anonymous:
^^ sorry the above was meant to be one paragraph, not split into two.

MissSmiley:

--- Quote from: ngu0038 on January 15, 2019, 05:42:02 pm ---This is only an introduction and two body paragraphs:


In a letter to the editor, Tony Roberts questions whether Australia has followed their national values after a Saudi teenager has been denied asylum in a country of “fair go.” Whilst being in Using an authoritative tone, Roberts aims to make Australian citizens start recognising the fault in Australia’s ability to give people the chance that they need. Rather than saying 'aims to...' in the intro itself, you could just say Robert contends that...and perhaps...Australia has acted our humanitarian values and has wrongly denied asylum or just something like that. An image has also been included to accompany the writer in an attempt to show Australia’s lack of leadership skills.Don't need to say this in an intro, unless the image is a separate text. Overall though, nice and short, succinct intro. But make sure you're not forgetting to mention the target audience! :)

Robert argues that the leaders of Australia have failed to recognise uphold? their country’s values. He contends this by using the quote “we’ll consider your refugee claim” Just to make this stronger, you could say "Expressing a quoted political response: “we’ll consider your refugee claim” with derision, Roberts aims to demonstrate how the country's politicians have created a false sense of hope, by not executing this response and the fair go values associated with it...or something like that. Do you see how I've added the tone and also combined the 'how' and the 'why' - reader effect in one sentence? Just trying to give you other ways to experiment! :)
from one of the political responses regarding the issue. The idea that the country’s politicians have verbally claimed this but failed to execute it implies a false sense of hope into readers, particularly Australian citizens, in Australia’s capabilities to give people a fair go in living. This attempts to make them feel like they need to show awareness for the issue and to make Australia grant asylum to people who need it If 'them' is the readership, then the common public can't possibly make Australia grant asylum. So just your point about raising awareness is good, and to make your reader effect stronger, you could say something like: "As a result, Australians who have an interest in humanitarian issues (see how I'm being really specific with my target audience as well), are likely to lose their trust on Australian politicians and instead praise and look up to Canada's welcoming grant. or something like that Additionally, Robert includes a relative analysis between Australia and Canada’s acceptance of the Saudi teenager. Mentioning that Canada has acknowledged “her courage” and “her plea for refuge affirms” further depicts Australia incapability to allow immigration, which thus causes the reader to understand that Australia’s current national values are a few steps behind from others across the world. Does it reflect Australia's incapability or does it immensely praise Canada's commitment to righteous humanitarian values? Also, you can analyse the emotive language and the sentiments associated with "courage" and "plea" and this is to further praise Canada. Really good you're zoning in on really specific evidence, but make sure to also look at the other side of the reader effect. :)

Whilst Robert argues in a firm tone, Could you say "Similar to the authoritative nature of Robert's letter...an image included in the centre of the piece is used to convey an idea to readers about Australia’s inadequacy to follow their nationally established policies. The right half of the image causes the readers to feel as if the country’s “leadership” skills aren’t going anywhere in towards what was admired. This is due to the ropes tied onto the boat’s wheel which shows a lack of control in changing directions, implying that the government is highly unlikely to change or take ethical action in regards to the issue. Furthermore, the two parts of the image being placed adjacent to each other shows the degeneration of the country’s Australia's leadership skills, where it is first seen on the left as freedom and open-minded, which then turns into a cruise with no control only to show that the politicians are only facing towards a negative direction. This image analysis is really excellent! Great original insight! The quality of your visual analysis will be elevated though if you include a reader effect statement and just summarise again how the readership is thus more likely to respect Canada's more dignified approach to allow the Saudi teenager to enter. At the same time, Australian politicians are denounced and challenged to question whether they are really upholding fairness as per our national values.

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Hi ngu0038!

Great job with your analysis! I really enjoyed reading your visual analysis especially, because of its originality and great insight! Well done!
You're also picking up on specific pieces of evidence which is great, but try and make a goal for next time to also analyse the connotations behind some words that authors use! Analysing the connotations will also help you look at the other side of the reader effect and you'll notice how you can be really specific with the stakeholders in the issue!
Don't forget to mention the target audience in the intro as well! Keep mentioning how each group in the audience are likely to feel and act when they read the language, hear the tone and visualise the author's expressions!
Also, a tip, if a writer quotes something, like the political response in this case, that can literally be called as a technique where you write "By using quotation marks to write the politicians' response, the author expresses disapproval..etc" Sometimes quotation marks often mean the author trying to be sarcastic, mocking, or maybe they're disappointed like in this case.
(Just something to elevate the quality of your analysis! Assessors love this! :)
Overall, a fantastic piece of analysis before Year 12 formally begins!  :D
Looking forward to reading more of your AA writing! :)

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