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2019 AA Club - Week 3

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MissSmiley:

--- Quote from: Anonymous on January 24, 2019, 08:56:50 pm ---Hey, not a language analysis but just a question:

How do you quote something that is already in quotation marks in the article? For example in this one, if I wanted to say:
Men who agree "women ain't shit".... The "woman ain't shit" is already quoted in the article, but do I ignore that?

Just something I've always wondered but never asked  :D

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Hey!
Great question!
If it was me I'd just say something like: By writing the typical man's response that "women ain't shit" in direct quotation marks, the author castigates (severely disapproves) misogyny...or whatever the argument or the effect is that you want to add to complete this sentence.

So I guess you could play around with your sentence structures:
- By writing....in quotation marks....
- The author references....in quotation marks
- In an attempt to .... the readership of.... the author employs quotation marks when writing....

Hope this helps!  :)

Jigsaw:

--- Quote from: peachxmh on January 22, 2019, 10:33:13 pm ---Clementine Ford, in a scathing her opinion piece titled "Men of Australia, it's time to pick your side" (The Sydney Morning Herald, 17/01/19) addresses the recent killing of Aiia Maasarwe, contending (there's nothing wrong with this, but accentuates works well here, too!) scathingly accentuates that the increasingly frequent issue of sexual and physical violence against women in Australia needs to stop. Close! Ford is positing that sexist and misogynistic acts directed towards women primarily by men, which in extreme cases culminates in senseless murder, must be eradicated. Ford aims directsher article primarily at the Australian public, in particular males, as well as politicians who refuse to help resolve the issue in the hope that...

 Nice intro! The only thing that is really missing here is purpose. Why is Ford writing this article? What does she hope to achieve from it?

She Ford initiates her piece via (inserting a tone word here would be nice)asserting that violence against women in Australia is a prevalent and ongoing problem. By describing Maasarwe's death as "another" loss of a young woman's life, the writer Ford (establishes this issue as longstanding) allows her readership to envision this issue as longstanding and superfluous, due to connotations of longevity elicited by this adjective in an attempt to alarm readers through drawing attention to the issue's commonplace nature in our society. :)Good!Having established that this violence occurs in Australia at particularly high rates, Ford then goes on (good awareness of argument progression)to state that women of
colour are much more likely than other women to be targets of this violence, highlighting their increased vulnerability (quote an example from the text here and hence, elicitsing sympathy from readers due to (explain language from quotation. She continues ( :) ) to build on this  sympathy through her suggestions that women have had to alter their own lifestyles to try to prevent such violence from befalling them. Her description utilisation of common preventative tactics; "quote examples here" is an attempt to make female readers more aware of the habits they have been accustomed to following and to demonstrate that they are not alone in their experiences, fostering a spirit of unity amongst them. Also to create a sense of outrage amongst the readership due to the fact that women are forced to be reactive to acts that go against human decency. In this way, Ford not only suggests something needs to be done to combat the issue as it is affecting the lives of numerous women, but also creates a call to arms for women to support each other and continue to fight against their shared injustice Notj just a call to arms for women, but to all to fight against this injustice, women AND MEN.. Ford's specific mention of Jill Meagher as a victim is another attempt (avoid this wording. Your task is to comment on how language is being utilised, not whether or not you believe it is successful. to bolster her argument by using Meagher, another high-profile case, to remind readers that similar events have occurred in the past.  Good, but can you take this further? It's not just to remind readers of the fact that this has occurred in the past. It's also to reignite a feeling of anger felt during this period years ago, and to hence emotively concur that more must be done in order to avoid tragedy as countless deaths are still occurring. It is also an effort to carry forward the anger generated by that case towards Maasarwe's and the issue of violence against women in general. Yes, good, on the right track here. Ford therefore not only establishes the issue of misogynistic violence as frequently occurring a frequent occurrence but also shows (try and avoid this word) emphasisesthat despite similar incidents occurring in the past, nothing has really been done to resolve the issue as it is still taking place, and at high rates.

A good opening paragraph. It may be a little long to write an in actual examination setting, but for practice it's fine. Good job.

The writer Fordthen furtherargues that people should need toaddress the root causes of this misogynistic violence, instead of blaming it on other circumstances. As Ford is a feminist commentator, it is likely that she has a vested interest in misogyny. This is irrelevant. You are not analysing language here. You are simply making an assumption. Try and focus specifically on language and argument :)

She claims that politicians are contributing to the violence faced by women of colour. By labelling these politicians as "dog whistling", Ford suggests that they are aware of their actions as well as the resulting consequences, and vilifies them through the phrase's connotations of being sneaky and deceptive.. This positions Australians to feel...Furthermore, she criticises men for being too focused on themselves and for "whin[ing]" whilst women are experiencing danger daily. Expand on your analysis of "whining." Thus, she likes men to little children and portrays them in a negative light by implying that they are unable to act with maturity. Bring in connotation here. Ford also makes a clear separation between men and women by referring to men as "you" and women as "we". In this way, she suggests that men and women are fundamentally different in their struggles, playing into her assertion that women's struggles to avoid violence are more poignant than men's struggles of avoiding criticism. She continues her attack (ad hominem) on men by claiming that all men are responsible for the violence, in a generalisation. Her inclusion of coarse language in her condemnation emphasises and exemplifies the vehement nature of the violence women are facing. Through her metaphorical description of men as "bricks in the wall... of sexism and misogyny", Ford points out that even bystanders are playing a part, causing resulting in a that proportion of her readership to feel negligent. Hence, she implies that standing up to displays of misogynistic behaviour is a plausible solution andargues that to put a stop to the issue of violence against women, the behaviour and warning signs that lead to such acts should be dealt with, by other men.

Therefore, Ford claims that changing men's behaviour is an instrumental part of reducing the high rates of violence against women. She completes (concludes) her piece by listing women who have been victims of such violence, which again emphasizes its long history (work on expression here. Also try to link in effect on the readership; what emotions are felt?. By asserting that it will happen again, she criticizes the public's habit of only attempting to solve the issue in the immediate aftermath of another similar crime, and still, ultimately, allowing it to happen again. Her use of the short, sharp sentences "Pick. Your. Side" grabs the attention of readers and conveys her anger as well as her determination to solve the issue once and for all.

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Overall, given that school hasn't even started yet, your argument analysis skills are already very impressive! You had a lot of extremely detailed analysis; well done. As for some constructive feedback, make sure your expression stays consistent throughout your piece. Make sure you are always coming back to how language and argument are being utilised to position the audience to do or feel something. Sometimes, you identified WHAT and WHY language was being used, but not HOW it was being used. This HOW part forms a massive chunk of your analysis, so if you can reference this more, your analysis will become a lot stronger. Keep practising! You are already at such an impressive level.

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