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angewina_naguen:
Hey, everyone!

This thread has been created for those who attended my HSC English Standard Trials Revision lecture. Post your short answer responses here for feedback by Tuesday 14th July 11:59pm. The question and stimuli are below!

Question: Compare how Texts 1 and 2 explore connection as an aspect of the human experience. (8 marks)

Text 1- Cartoon
Text 2- Articlehttp://honisoit.com/2020/06/an-ode-to-hiking/

slothologist:
Hi Angela!

Thank you for hosting the lecture! I feel alot more motivated to do English :)

Here is my response to your practice question. I don't think i answered the question right. Some feedback would be very well appreciated. Thank you so much :) :)


Composers draw on personal experiences of their perception of the world through a different lens by igniting new ideas and aspects of the environment. This encourages audiences to expose and challenge themselves to new surroundings as a way of connecting and exploring qualities of the human experience.

Text 1 exposes the significance of modern technology through the symbolic logos of social media apps to represent how all platforms provides connections into individuals’ lives and cultures, establishing a network that engages and virtually exposes individuals to new perspectives of the world. Without the connection empowered by technology, the salient image of the sinking ship in correlation to the dialogue (thought), “OH MY GOD! WE’RE DRIFTING AWAY!” symbolises individual’s fear of being detached from the other people, which may lead to anxiety and despair. Further, the composer stresses the prominence of technology through the vector that reveals the separation of the figures grasping distinct social medias dispersed in the ocean to illustrate how separation may result in the collective experience of isolation and boredom. Therefore, Text 1 portrays how modern technology is the ultimate connection to bringing individuals together into a community via virtual social interactions. Without technology, individuals may be distant and enclosed from drawing personal experiences from the wider world.

Text 2 encourages audiences to expose and connect themselves to new activities and environments through the collective pronoun and sensory imagery, “we are meant to engage with nature, the smells of the trees, the sounds of the birds, the rhythm of your walking,” to reveal the composer’s perception of tranquillity and exposure to freedom and independence. Thus, audiences may be allured by the benefits of hiking that may contribute to concerns in modern society through factual references and hyperbole, “an endless list of well-documented benefits to your physical and mental wellbeing,” to express the composer’s deep connection and motivations to nature. Furthermore, audiences are challenged to explore and appreciate new environments and activities through the personal pronoun, “I could go on forever about how much I love hiking. I truly believe that it is the best way to understand nature,” to reflect the composer’s personal experience of enjoyment, whilst providing a subjective response to the individual’s connection to nature. Therefore, audiences are inspired to make connections to nature in order to expose themselves to new measures of the world.
 
While Text 1 explores the inconsistencies of individual’s behaviour through the impact of modern technology of the wider world, Text 2 encourages audiences to attempt obstacles by engaging in new perspectives that will allow them to physically connect to aspects of the environmental world. Nevertheless, both texts allow audiences to gain valuable insight into complex human behaviours and motivations.

Slothologist

Nathan C:
Hi, hope you are doing well. Thanks for the lecture yesterday and thank you very much in advance.

   Both texts explore different routes connection to oneself have taken because of the collective’s morals. Text 2 analyses the benefits of hiking has on allowing us as an individual to have some time to clear our minds and be able to properly connect to our thoughts and surroundings. This is often difficult to achieve in the society we live in that Text 1 demonstrates through people surrounding themselves with social media.
   Text 2 addresses how being able to “go off, on your own accord, on your own two feet, is truly a blessing”. The repetition reinforces the individual connection to ourselves when you can leave behind “monotony of suburbia with the joys of nature”. When “anxiety and depression” are becoming the collective human experience, hiking provides a mean of “providing incredible stress relief and helping to ease symptoms of anxiety and depression”.
   Text 1 explores the other side, the side of the new collective human experience driven by social media. In the picture it has the people hanging onto different social media platforms, it is a metaphor on how people rely so heavily on social media, that without it we would drown. As the cartoon people drift further away from the ability to connect to ourselves, symbolised by the ocean carrying them away from the “AUTHENTIC HUMAN RELATIONSHIPS” ship. It is in clear contrast to text 2, that this text demonstrates the issues of the collective drifting further away shown through the metaphor and symbolism of the social media rafts.

I tried to keep this in line of what I could do in a test with the limited time and my limited handwriting speed, thanks again.
Nathan

steph.rinos:
Hi! Thank you for your very helpful lecture yesterday. Here is my response to your practice question.  :)

Connection is represented as an essential feature when showcasing human experiences. When displaying the importance of connection, composers are able to generate a personal reflection and ignite new ideas from within the audience.

Text one reveals how modern technology has indoctrinated the lives and experiences of individuals. The cartoon illustrates through the use of symbolism, social media apps that are disconnecting individuals from the ‘authentic human connection’. The salient positioning of the ship in the foreground helps display how disconnected the individual and collective are from one another. The vector and positioning of small individuals floating slowly away on iPhones uncovers their insignificance but also desire for connection. The evocative dialogue ‘help’ and ‘Oh my god, where drifting away!’ exhibits their longing for connection in their unconnected world. Thus, text one conveys how technology can explore and lead to the demise of connection as individuals turn to technology as a means of feeling connected.

Text two invites the audience to engage and connect themselves to the experience of hiking. The use of collective pronoun ‘we’ along with sensory olfactory, visual and auditory imagery ‘we are meant to engage with nature, the smells of the trees, the sounds of the birds, the rhythm of your walking—the pieces of the puzzle fit perfectly’ helps position the audience to feel a deep connection to place and the joys of being surrounded in nature. The repetition of ‘own’ ‘to go off, on your own accord, on your own to feet’ highlights how the connection to nature can bring full fullness to one’s self. The use of a rhetorical question ‘And how can we save nature without understanding it’ connects the responder to the want to protect the natural beauty that nature gives off. Therefore, connections are required to understand and appreciate the full beauty of place.

Text one and two provide difference into the experience of connection. Whilst text one conveys the neglected abuse of connection amongst people and how technology changes and shapes peoples level of connection, Text two appreciates the connection of nature and invites the audience to experience the joyful content nature that being outdoors and hiking brings.

keh204:
Hey Angelina, just wanted to say thanks for the lecture yesterday it was literally a lifesaver because honestly, I've been so clueless about English lately and your lecture just simplified everything! I wanted to try out that response you set although maybe I rambled on a bit I'm not entirely sure but hopefully you get around to reading it because the feedback would be much appreciated!

Thanks again! ;D
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Connection acts as a catalyst for human experiences in which it allows individuals to establish unfamiliar forms of perceiving the world. In turn, encouraging the audience to challenge and acknowledge a diverse range of encounters as a method of further developing one’s personal experiences.

Text 1 evidently reveals the significant impact that modern technology has had on the functions of contemporary society, in which its advancements have encouraged the disconnection of ‘authentic human connection’ in a physical sense and instead individuals have adopted a more electronic communication method as part of their differing worldly perspectives. Based on this sense of disengagement, the use of salient positioning of the sinking ship in the background expresses the substantial decrease of proper human interaction due to the interference of technology, causing individuals to experience a disconnection between their own kind in a physical sense, therefore, placing stress and despair in the emotive tone of the dialogue “Help”, further emphasising the dependency individuals have on social networking in order to communicate with other in a less ‘authentic’ way. Furthermore, the composer highlights the vector lines in correlation with the allegory portrayed in the separation of social media and technological devices from the ‘authentic human connection’ ship to illustrate the lack of physical relationships and human interactions that individuals in the modern age engage in, thus causing a state of isolation where our reliance on social media to connect with others prevails as the new societal norm and ultimately causes a detrimental impact in the way we collectively establish proper relationships based on emotional connections. Therefore, it is evident that Text 1 effectively conveys the interference of modern technology, specifically social media in the development of genuine human interactions, hence emphasising the significant contribution this has on the establishment of unfamiliar worldly perspectives and personal experiences.

Text 2 prompts the audience to expose and broaden their experiences in order to truly establish a sense of connection within one’s natural environment specifically through hiking. The use of pleonasm and repetition of ‘on’ in “To go off, on your own accord, on your own two feet, is truly a blessing.” ultimately signifies the deep value the author has of hiking and the independence an individual is able to gain from engaging in this activity, therefore properly establishing one’s true appreciation and acknowledgement as they broaden their
opportunities to connect with the beauty of nature and further develop their personal experiences in diverse encounters like hiking. Additionally, the metaphorical use of sensory visual, olfactory and auditory imagery and inclusive language evident in, “We are meant to engage with nature, the smell of trees, the sounds of birds, the rhythm of your walking - the pieces of the puzzle fit perfectly.” describes the deep connection that individuals are encouraged to express whilst being surrounded by the enjoyment and beauty of nature as it compliments the human existence by allowing individuals to recognise its deeper essence despite its appealing physical exterior such as health benefits, therefore inviting them to share this individual experience more collectively to allow others to develop a more unique interpretation of the world. Furthermore, the oxymoron and exciting tone in, “It can be a little boring at times - in the best possible way!”, highlights the common thought process/norm people believe hiking is like, however, the enthusiasm of the author’s personal experiences speaks otherwise and invites the audience to participate in this activity in order to successfully gather their own sense of appreciation and connection towards the natural environment.

Conclusively, whilst Text 1 comprehensively explores the disconnection of an individual's relationships based on the interference of modern-day technological advancements, Text 2 contrastingly demonstrates the significant influence that one’s association with unfamiliar surroundings have in discovering their sense of appreciation and value for worldly experiences. Nevertheless, both texts allow the audience to obtain relevant insight into the differentiating connection an individual establishes as a concept of their collective human experiences.

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