discussing and debating art, feedback please?

[cathtacular]

this is the start of a prac essay for outcome 2
im doing  Gianlorenzo Bernini (pre 70s) and Ron Mueck (post)

it doesn't matter whether you do art or not i would love feedback for what i have written.

thanks,

For many years artists have sought to create perfect representations of the human form. Gianlorenzo Bernini is no exception to this. The 17th century sculpture created dramatically realistic representations of the male and female forms. Ron Mueck although 4 centuries after Bernini also achieves this perfection through his hyper realistic sculptures of the human form. Both artists achieve this perfection in different ways. Bernini creates perfection as was representative of the 17th century, he captures a brief moment of action which in turn tells stories through his sculptures. Mueck creates perfection as he finds it; he reveals emotions and stories of the people behind his sculptures.

Muecks sculpture ‘Ghost’ (1998) is a grand reflection of an adolescent girl, wrapped uncomfortably in a swimming costume leaning awkwardly against a wall with her face averted. Mueck portrays the girl’s adolescent anxiety in a common situation. Although made from a multitude of materials including; fibreglass, silicon and polyutherane foam the girl looks completely real, Brian Kennedy (director of the national gallery Australia) says that “Mueck seeks to achieve perfection, the precise demonstration of reality as he finds it’. Apart from her towering two-meter tall scale, the colouration Mueck uses is completely realistic as is her proportions. All colours are used in a realistic way, from the shades of brown in her hair to her light Skin tone. Mueck contrasts her light skin with the black bathing suit, this draws attention to the figures torso which is representative of every adolescent girls troubles in this situation and represents her fear and unknowing. The figures torso is also emphasised by the line created by the figures long flowing legs leading up to her core. The figure pulls a gawky expression that shows the viewer her pain of being caught forever in the awkwardness of her pubescence.
The figures exaggerated size and uneasy demeanour emphasise a sense of adolescent anxiety.

[cathtacular]

next part, if anyones interested please...

Mueck conveys the problems associated with adolescent life through his sculpture ‘Ghost’ he uses a common situation so people are able to link themselves with the similar situation they have experienced first hand or experienced through others. Mueck seeks to target an audience that feels the way the figures do, this is also evident in his sculpture ‘Seated woman’ (2000) a depiction of a elderly woman sitting with her hands clasped together, with almost shut eyes. Her small scale evoke an intimate feeling from the viewer and draw a connection with the viewer in some way, wether that be themselves, there mother, grandmother or friend. Susanna Greeves (writer) describes Muecks figures as “intensely personal, particular representations [that] seem to function in the same way, connecting us to universal emotions and experiences” The figures used are representative of real people, they appear real and evoke a real connection from every viewer.

[eilatan]

hi!
this is the essay using commentaries yes? if so, i think you would need to refer to them more and in doing so also put across your opinion about the commentary. you've definitely described well what the commentary relates to in the work but also justify the criticism given about the artwork.

i hope that made sense and helps!
good luck

[cathtacular]

thanks, ive already done this sac, got an a but your advice will help for the exam.

[eilatan]

oh sorry, bit late was i?

good luck for the exam! i've done a few practice essays and stuff but my art teacher is so slack and hasn't marked them yet! i need feedback! grrr

[cathtacular]

put them on here ill be happy to have a look, actually i would like to see how other people write, i think alot of the commentry questions are ambiguous

[eilatan]

i will as soon as i get them back...if i ever get them back...

[bingbinglanglang]

guys, i am doing art for the first time since year seven and like im trying really hard to do good...i averaged out to a B-B+ for SACs and i got an A-A+ for my folio...so i really really really want to get an A for the exam.....any helpful tips wud so sooo greatly appreiated.

p.s. my weakness seems to be the lack of art terminology in my practice exams.....were there any particular ways that u guys got used to using the art linggoooo??!!!

THANKS FOR YOUR HELPPPP!!!

[eilatan]

um...did ur teacher hand out a glossary of terms. cos thats what we got. i can't say i use a lot of them. it depends on what terms/language is relevant to the chosen artworks.

i've been getting good sac marks but i have a feeling i won't do as well in the exam...d'oh...

[cathtacular]

there seems to be a trend in everyones sac and sat marks being really good, but fairly average preformance on the exam...
with the art terminology, do you mean when your analysisng artworks?

[bingbinglanglang]

there seems to be a trend in everyones sac and sat marks being really good, but fairly average preformance on the exam...
with the art terminology, do you mean when your analysisng artworks?

yeah, like i don't really know the appropriate words to use when analysing artwork..

and nah we didnt get a glossary of terms....our teacher is not very helpful !!

[cathtacular]

i might have a list of terms somewhere...

[bingbinglanglang]

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i might have a list of terms somewhere...
[/quote]awww ...well if u find them pls put em up ...thanks heapss guys!!![