Hello everyone,
Just got my essay about The Merchant of Venice back from my teacher and did not do as well as I hoped. I was not confident when I submitted it either. Her biggest comments to me were all about the order in which I chose to address my evidence within each paragraph.
I have fixed it up according to some of the feedback the teacher gave me but I was wondering if anyone else has any further feedback.
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In William Shakespeare’s The Merchant of Venice, he explores the way in which money is the driving force and motivation in interpersonal interactions. Shakespeare has highlighted the way that the pursuit of money and benefits of wealth cloud relationships. Greed truly corrodes relationships; whether it slowly creates mistrust between companions or instantly severes connections. It is a subtle but constant negative presence the permeates every interaction and decision. He explores this through the way in which Bassanio courts Portia, the gradual degradation of Jessica and Shylock’s relationship and the friendship that Antonio and Bassanio share.
Bassanio’s love for Portia is dubious as he pursues her to eradicate his own debts. After borrowing large amounts from Antonio in his youth, Bassanio is determined to come up with a plan in order to final repay him. When Bassanio first informs Antonio of his plan the very first thing he mentions is, “In Belmont is a lady richly left.” Shakespeare uses this line to make it evident to his audience that Bassanio very much values Portia’s estate, perhaps more so than her person. Shakespeare also illustrates the real feelings of affection that the pair have. Bassanio describes Portia as, “Fair, and fairer than the world,” although the timing of his pursuit appears to be quite unscrupulous which plants doubts in the mind of the audience as to the authenticity of their relationship. It is impossible to have an authentic relationship with a person when the judgement of one party is impaired so significantly by their craving for wealth.
Shakespeare explores this idea further through the paternal relationship and actions of Shylock and Jessica. She felt that she had no option but to flee from her home and her father’s intense desire to see his wealth grow. When Shylock discovered that his daughter had left him, stealing a portion of his fortune, he roamed the streets shouting, “O my ducats, O my daughter.” The way that Shylock appears to place equal value on his possessions and his child sits uncomfortably with the audience and forces them to question whether Shylock truly loves his daughter. When this is recounted by another character, Solanio, he is clearly disgusted by the value that Shylock places on his money and labels him as greedy. Through this action, Shakespeare offers his audience a window into the reasons that Jessica felt so suffocated in her house. He explores the way that wealth seeking behaviours caused Shylock’s oblivion to his daughter’s feelings. Through a modern lense, this is particularly clear. Jessica’s feelings of anguish and hopelessness are further explored in the conversation she has with Launcelot, a servant, “Our house is hell.” This reflects the years of feelings of worthlessness and pent up frustration that she experiences. She feels significant anger toward’s her father’s whole ideology and lifestyle. She is able to think with clarity about the reprehensible way money has slowly eroded her relationship with her father, perhaps beyond repair. Through these events, Shakespeare examines the way that selfish desires can attack the very basis of society.
Finally, the friendship that Antonio and Bassanio share is clouded by the selfish way Bassanio uses Antonio for his money. Friendship is meant to be a mutual affection between people born out a genuine enjoyment of each others company. Can a relationship formed out of a desire for money, rather than a desire for company really be considered a friendship? Antonio clearly has strong feelings of affection towards Bassanio and his blind trust is evident in the way Antonio agrees to take out the loan to aid Bassanio, even to his own detriment, “My purse, my person, my extremest means lie all unlocked to your occasion.” The unconditional love that Antonio felt towards Bassanio is evident through his behaviour, but Shakespeare forces the audience to consider whether or not it is reciprocated. It is highlighted to the audience that Bassanio has deep affection to Antonio when he says, “But life itself, my wife, all the world, are not with me esteemed above thy life,” however Shakespeare leaves the audience to wonder if Bassanio would have felt the same had Antonio disagreed to take out the loan. As a modern audience reflecting on this text, it is clear that Antonio’s deep, genuine and passionate feelings cannot be fully reciprocated while Bassanio’s heart is filled by a love of a wealthy lifestyle. It is impossible for a man to truly and all-consumingly love two things and Shakespeare makes it clear that time and time again Bassanio will choose wealth and relationship built on false pretences over genuine human connections.
Through the exploration of Bassanio and Portia’s engagement, Shylock’s turbulent fatherhood and Antonio’s raw and selfless feelings for Bassanio it is evident that wealth does nothing but corrupt the relationships between the key characters in every possible way. William Shakespeare illustrates the unscrupulousness that a thirst for wealth brings to genuine relationships. Trust, honesty and raw affection between the key characters are all corroded to some degree by money seeking behaviours, in The Merchant of Venice.
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Any thoughts would be greatly appreciated,
Laura