Transformative discoveries result in an individual’s meaningful
ly renewed perceptions of their capacity to question and appreciate their worlds.
Nice one! Through introspection and self-reflection, clarity is attained
, helping individuals to develop a response to the discovery, which is significant towards shaping their beliefs. Rosemary Dobson’s poems, ‘Young girl at a Window’ and ‘Wonder’ present, respectively, a girl forced into introspection due to her nearing adulthood and
herself This bit jars in the sentence? It is just a bit difficult to follow. Maybe take the comma out from between present and respectively, and then flip them around, and then put a comma after the "and" before herself? Just trying to get this to read a little smoother. who gains renewed understandings through the new found beauty of art. Similarly, Alistair McLeod’s emotional coming of age short story To Everything there is a season shows young protagonist’s changed perceptions as a result of maturation.
Beautiful! I love that you've given a sentence for each text so that you can give them their time to shine in the discovery light. Through the passage of time, individuals inevitably undergo introspection and self reflection to adjust to their situation, through
the questioning
of their worlds.
To me, this concept statement would be stronger with the "to adjust to their situation." In ‘Young girl at a Window’, the metaphysical aspects controlling her being are utilised to show the forceful nature of life in influencing change towards from adolescence to the larger world. The first line of the poem introduces the overarching motif of the poem, delineating that time is an omnipotent power as it forces her to “Lift your hand to the window latch”. The imperative elucidating this idea also portrays the passage of time to guide one’s development towards understanding of the real world. In reflecting consciously about the inevitable changes, the girl is uncertain “as she sighs, turns and moves away.” Questions of change allow for the persona to let go of her youth, “fading air is stained with red”, symbolising the death of her past and growth of her future. In this process of renewing perceptions, the persona has formulated fearful pretensions as evident in the tone of tension and anticipation in the “guiltless minute hand is still… the watchful room… be hosts to you this final night” as she lies await of the unknown future. Through this change the persona has the capacity to question her world allowing her to “travel a journey with [her] eyes”, metaphorically signifying the positive speculations which have transformed from the previous fear.
Absolutely seamless integration of the question here! Beautiful! Dobson further emphasises that the young girl’s changed perspective will force her to a long hardworking road however positive in that she will be successful. Thus, due to the discoveries as a result form the inevitability of ag
eing individuals will undergo transformative ramification in gaining renewed perceptions about their worlds.
Wonderful! In this last sentence though, you talk about ageing, which has a different connotation to coming of age. I'd use the words you already have, because suddenly I'm thinking of older people, but really you just mean growing, getting older, etc. It's a small thing, but when I read it I thought I must have misunderstood the text, "where's the old person?" Through the discovery of hidden beauties, an individual’s values about that finding will transform
Expression here could be clearer. I think the main problem is that the beauties are hidden, therefore unknown, so how can the value of that transform if it does not already exist because it is unknown...if that makes sense? Perhaps talk about individuals realising a capacity to value beauties that they did not know existed, for they were hidden? Just play with this a little more 
. Throughout the ekphrastic poem ‘Wonder’, Dobson utilises the elusive rhyme and rhythm of her poem to accentuate the transcendental realisation of the beauty of art in Van Eyck’s painting which transforms her mindset of life. Dobson portrays the wonder associated with discovery through the use of collection of soundless adjectives, “wordless”, “voiceless”, “dumb”, “without ovation”
Commas go inside the quotation marks - I know it looks a bit silly when you're doing them in quick succession, but y'know, it's how it is describes the experiences of discovery of beauty as transformative in that it is another world in one where one is left speechless. Similarly, to Young girl at A Window, an imperative is used, “Turn the page of the book and enter, marvelling” to convey that this discovery is also essential to the persona’s being. The use of diction in “marvelling” as well as “dazzled and “amazement” further accentuates the profundity of such a discovery. The use of a repertoire of historical and biblical figures which have undergone a discovery of one that is ground breaking and completely transformative such as in Lazurus’ “convers[ing] with angels” and Cortes’ discovery of the new “World”, it shows that Dobson can only accurately describe the impact of such discovery through examples of others. Thus emphasising the transformative nature of her discovery as juxtaposed as similar in extent to the allusion of important figures of the real world. Dobson’s use of the parenthetical statement, “I, also, wordless was there” amplifies the self-introspection and self-reflection in appreciating the new world of art. As a result of self-analysis, Dobson again represents discovery in having the ability to transform perceptions of different genres, in this poem through her own experience.
Beautiful! This paragraph is wonderful. Everything is linked to back to discovery so eloquently! Your text is always analysed in relation to discovery which is very needed, and very well done! Correspondingly, Discovery’s
No need to capitalise capacity to renew perceptions and hence transform an individual is also represented by Alistair McLeod. Through representing time also as an inevitable force driving an individual to discoveries, To Everything there is a Season similarly shows the maturation of a young boy reinforcing the ideas within Dobson’s ‘Young girl’. McLeod introduces the short story through the Narrator (a grown man) “speaking of a time when [he] eleven”.
Just for the purpose of being didactic - can you identify the type of Narrator? Voice of God? Third person? Omniscient? Before delving into his reminiscence he prefaces it with, “As we step into the nowness we often look into the past.” This paradoxical statement emblematic of self introspection and self reflection demonstrates the renewed perceptions the young boy (he once was) has formed due to his discoveries in the past.
I'm also intrigued by the use of inclusive first person, "we," that's really unique! Surely there's a purpose to it. Is it engaging the reader to have their own discoveries alongside the character? You don't have to talk about this, but if it fits in, why not embrace it? It's a technical piece of analysis that most people won't really look into. The trope of Seasons, McLeod, symbolically represents the young boy’s growth and maturation as inevitable. The composer uses the motif of Christmas and “Santa Claus” to represent the beliefs of the innocent youth, and as the young boy “tries to hang on to him” he slowly loses this and discovers the harsher reality within the “adult side of the world”. The discovery of the myth attacks the narrator’s sense of stability and security and hence he realises he is uncertain of what is in store for him in the future. This loss in youth is represented in the metaphor, “it is as if I have suddenly moved into another room and heard a door click lastingly behind me. I am jabbed by my own small wound” further describes the authors feeling of sadness and fear from the transition
"The loss of youth is metaphorically symbolised in..." just reads a little better than identifying "the metaphor." I'm being picky here, though! . However at the end of the story, his father reminds him that, “There is no need to grieve. He leaves good things behind. The reassurance, from a figure of admiration allows the young boy to develop renewed perceptions in that the future awaits us with challenges and rewards.
Individuals will often experience the transformative ramification of discovery when they are forced or influenced into a state of introspection and self reflection allowing for changed perceptions of different worlds. As seen Dobson’s poetry and McLeod’s short story, these transformative discoveries may sometimes result from the inevitability in the passage of time or the wonder of the world allowing for individual’s to change significantly in terms of outlook on life.
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