The recent floods in Queensland have made an impact all over the world. In times of crisis such as this, a hero duly emerges and Susie O’Brien’s opinion piece targeted towards the general public, “Anna Bligh outperforms Julia Gillard in the greatest leadership test of all” in the Herald Sun contends with a fervent and definite tone that Anna Bligh is this hero.
Make it clear that the piece is about leadership, and it's not just a piece about the flood. Also, "general public" doesn't really say anything about the target audience. If you're going to be broad, write something like "Herald Sun readers", and if it's relevent you can bring up that the target readership of the herald sun tends to be the less-educated, low-to-middle income or whatever. Some of the articles will also be targeted at, for example, conservative readers, or left-leaning people etc. If you're going to make a statement as general as the target audience being the "general public", I just wouldn't write about your target audience at all. Also, you don't need to write the general statement that heroes tend to emerge in times of crisis. Just give an account of the way that the media has portrayed the floods, and how this article fits in with that. Is there widespread criticism of Anna Bligh, that this writer is responding to? Are people questioning the political leadership at this time? Try to avoid general statements, because it isn't a sociology essay, it's about language.
O’Brien initiates the article with an emphasis on the “scrutiny” that politicians experience “24-hours” a day highlighting to the reader, the pressure Blight has been under and subsequently her strength in being able to deal with it so well.
Split this into two sentences.
Moreover, the writer continues to highlight her importance in the eyes of the reader by comparing her to other leaders who have been in similar situations.
This sentence should be part of the NEXT paragraph.
The reference to own premier gives the reader a better idea of Anna Bligh’s importance in this matter, since the Herald Sun is a Victorian Paper.
This is good. This is alluding to a target audience and giving the article context. See how this gives readers more information than "targeted at the general public".
is sure to create a gap in the ability of both leaders to act in crisis in the eyes of the reader.
NO. It's never "sure to". Also, I don't really understand what you're saying. Use more clear language.
This is well illustrated in the image at the forefront of the article.
Once again, this sentence is in the wrong paragraph.
The crux of this opinion stems from the vast differences in the abilities of Anna Bligh and her colleagues to adapt and respond in times of adversity. In comparing her to a lauded figure such as that of our Prime Minister, the reader is further led to feelings of respect. Not only that but in emphasising the conditions in which she had to do this, adds to the gratitude in the minds of the reader. Particularly in times such as these where all states have been affected by some form phenomenon, the reader is more likely to feel appreciation towards the efforts of Anna Bligh.
This is far too wordy. Just sum up the main techniques, and briefly evaluate the article's strengths and weaknesses. It seems like you're chosing to attempt to "appear smart" rather than have people understand what you're sayign. Focus on clarity before you try to make it sound smart, but you'll appear smarter if it's clear and concise.