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« on: April 25, 2011, 08:55:03 pm »
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Hey guys, this is my speech that i will be presenting on Wednesday!! It's about duck hunting -.- I made quite a few changes to it, mainly the strucutre. I decided to keep it basic. Here we go:


[Steps onto podium] Good morning ladies and gentlemen,

The recent decision by the Victorian Government and the Department of Sustainability and Environments to extend the Victorian duck hunting season from the 19th of March to the 13th of June has ignited much controversy.

As a person who has a passion for helping others and a fond relationship with animals, I find it utterly astounding that in the twenty first century there are minorities who still hunt ducks and animals of any kind. Of that minority there will be people who call themselves hunters so that they can experience the sadistic pleasure of killing other living beings. And of course there will be those who are genuinely enthusiastic about the sport. Whoever the hunter may be, they are both just as likely to leave a duck injured after shooting it. It is a fact that 1 in 4 ducks are left wounded and deserted to experience a prolonged and painful death. This is the brutality that exists in the world we live in, how would you feel if your beloved pet is blasted by double barrelled shotgun, but not killed? [Pause] Imagine the immense pain your dear friend would be suffering. What would you do about it? [Pause] The cruelty endured by a duck is due to the hunter’s negligence and disregard for the waterfowl’s health. We, as a community, have the opportunity to abolish duck hunting and create a brighter future.

How can there be a law that allows children as young as twelve to start shooting ducks? Who in their right mind would allow such a law to be legalised? [Pause] It is absolutely ridiculous that our children are allowed to partake in such events. We are promoting them to believe that cruelty is acceptable, but the worse part is that we may possibly be manifesting an unearthed trait in them. Research has revealed that there is a strong [Emphasise ‘strong’] correlation between violence perpetrated by children against animals and the likelihood of them committing violent acts against people in later life. The evidence speaks for itself, we have the opportunity to avoid these future consequences, we must act now!

Again the injuries that ducks may suffer due to the inexperience and carelessness of hunters are a worry. According to the Department of Sustainability and Environment, 23 infringements were issued to hunters in the opening weekend of the hunting season! [Add emphasis to this sentence] Of those infringements, 5 hunters were fined for not retaining the head or the wing of the duck, 12 hunters were fined for using or possessing toxic shots, 3 hunters were fined for hunting from a boat with the engine running, 1 hunter was fined for failing to destroy game on recovery and 2 hunters were fined for littering. All of these infringements stem from a hunter’s carelessness, it exemplifies that they are ruthless cronies who seek blood. These fines also accentuate the notion that duck hunting becomes a crime when a hunter disregards the laws that they must abide.

In addition, the younger and more inexperienced hunters may ‘accidentally’ [Finger movements] kill rare ducks. Obviously this won’t occur often, but every death of a threatened or endangered species is a loss to Mother Nature and one that we cannot afford if we want our future generations to be able to witness such exquisite and unique organisms. We cannot allow this barbaric behaviour to continue any further; action must be taken! [Slam fist]
For those who argue that duck hunting is a sport or profession, they should take note that we are living in the twenty first century! I fail to see how duck hunting can be labelled as a sport. How does shooting animals for the sake of it come under the category of a sport? [Shrugs] There are plenty of other real sports [emphasis ‘real sports’] that require more precision and skill than duck hunting. Imagine what one may accomplish if they take the path of becoming an Olympic archer or clay shooter. [Pause]

Duck hunting has limited benefits. In a time where the environment, flora and fauna are fundamental to creating a safer and more sustainable future, duck hunting does not have a role. It will only pose as a danger to our children’s health, eradicate threatened and endangered species - if not increasing the number of endangered species simultaneously.

Duck hunting is neither a sport nor profession; it is a heartless, cruel and callous activity that only hooligans wish to pursue.

Thank-you for your time. [Steps away from podium]



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« Reply #1 on: April 25, 2011, 09:05:30 pm »
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So you're topic is in regards to Duck hunting, and you are saying "We shouldb't be allowed to hunt ducks" - correct?
correcting as i go
Hey guys, this is my speech that i will be presenting on Wednesday!! It's about duck hunting -.- The structure i used is quite different and im not sure if it will work so any feedback would be great! Also i could probably change it back to the usual 3 arguments and rebuttal if that works better. Thanks :)


(Good Morning Ladies and Gentlemen - Not sure whether to include this or to just start with the intro/para1)

As a person who has a passion for helping others and a fond relationship with animals, I find it utterly outstanding Definition of outstanding = "excellent; clearly very much better than what is usual" Probably not what you're trying to say lol that in the twenty first century there are minorities who still hunt ducks and animals of any kind. Of that minority there will be people who call themselves hunters so that they can experience the sadistic pleasure of killing other living beings. And of course there will be those who are genuinely enthusiastic about the sport. Whoever the hunter may be, they are both just as likely to leave a duck injured after shooting it. It is a fact that 1 in 4 ducks are left wounded and deserted to experience a prolonged and painful death. This is the brutality that exists in the world we live in, how would you feel if your beloved pet is blasted by double barrelled shotgun, but not killed? [Pause] Imagine the immense pain your dear friend would be suffering. What would you do about it? [Pause] It would be in our best interest and the animals to give them a quick death,-(probably leave this part out, it would be in your best interest to keep your furry friend alive, lol) but this is not the case with duck hunting.  The cruelty endured by a duck is due to the hunter’s negligence and disregard for the waterfowl’s health. We, as a community, have the opportunity to abolish duck hunting and create a brighter future.
There are many factors that support the view of duck hunting, these include: peoples’ freedom of rights, that ducks are a pest species and that duck hunting is a sport and hobby. We are all entitled to certain rights and freedom. However, the law restricts what we can and cannot do. Duck hunting is a legal hunting practice provided that the hunter has a certified license.  In order to obtain this license you are required to pass the Waterfowl Identification Test and pay a fee. Once one has this license, by law they are permitted to shoot ducks during duck season. Wild ducks are a pest to rice fields, Lucerne, young cereal and vegetable crops. They can potentially cause much damage to farmers’ crops, effectively causing financial loss for the famers. Duck hunting is a sport and hobby that humans have participated in over the past few centuries. It requires precision and skill to properly kill the duck, a quality that many hunters desire and develop.
Nevertheless, there are many flaws in those ideas presented. What has society come to? How are there laws that enable children as young as twelve to wield such a powerful weapon(i would say your steering off topic a bit here)? Allowing our children to partake in events such as this is ridiculous.  We are promoting them to believe that cruelty is acceptable and we may possibly be manifesting an unearthed trait in them.Research has revealed that there is a strong correlation between violence perpetrated by children against animals and the likelihood of them committing violent acts against people in later life. Isn’t this enough reason to ban duck hunting? Again the injuries that ducks may suffer due to the inexperience and carelessness of hunters are a worry. According to the Department of Sustainability and Environment, 23 infringements were issued to hunters in the opening weekend of the hunting season! [Add emphasis to this sentence] Of those infringements, 5 hunters were fined for not retaining the head or the wing of the duck, 12 hunters were fined for using or possessing toxic shots, 3 hunters were fined for hunting from a boat with the engine running, 1 hunter was fined for failing to destroy game on recovery and 2 hunters were fined for littering. It is absolutely outrageous that hunters are committing such offenses. [yea I think you should use these statistics to prove that hunters are cruel and ruthless, to give the hunting a bad feel and almost a crime, rather than a sport] In addition, the younger and more inexperienced hunters may accidentally kill rare ducks. Obviously this won’t occur often, but every death of a threatened or endangered species is a loss to Mother Nature and one that we cannot afford if we want our future generations to be able to see such exquisite and unique organisms. We cannot allow this barbaric behaviour to continue any further; action must be taken! (Uptil now, i must say im not convinced that duck hunting is barbaric. You started off well with the emotional appeal in regards to pets, but then you said good stuff about it. rather i think it is legal, and something humans are entitled too. I do understand however, that "Accidents may happen, where rare ducks are killed, and that there are a few hunters out there that are not following the rules, but that is all.)[Slam fist]
The first steps to make duck hunting illegal would firstly include enhancing the current law for obtaining a hunting license and making it stricter and more stringent. To do this we can: increase the age limit for hunting from the age of twelve to eighteen, the Department of Sustainability and Environments should enforce stricter regulations during the duck hunting season and provide more officers to deal with any unwarranted behaviour by hunters, and increasing the fees to obtaining a license. The most prominent change that should be made is an adjustment to the identification test. This examination should be made more difficult so that only the more experienced and dedicated hunters can pursue their hobby. These alterations will ensure that the people who are passionate and enthusiastic about the sport are allowed to continue; but the hooligans who only want to experience the thrill of killing a living being will be discouraged from either obtaining a license or to participate in future events.
We cannot allow this heartless, cruel and callous activity to continue! You have the power to stop this!

Thank you for your time.


The grammar and such for it seem fine, but just a general note on your argument, i thought it was a bit convoluted and for a moment it seemed as if rather than considering the opposing views and rebutting, you actually agreed with them
I highlighted these parts in red..

I'm sorry if i've missed the topic, from your second lsat and end paragraph it seemed as if you wanted to make the legal age for a duck hunter higher, but from the first paragaph it seemed as if you wanted to abolish it completely.

This is only my opinion and how i'd go about doing things, so you don't take me for every word.

 overall i think you played devil's advocate too strongly, however, i can see where you were going with your ideas, and your speech has potential. Perhaps rephrase a few of your points and make your contention a bit clearer
Keep working at it!
« Last Edit: April 25, 2011, 09:22:58 pm by nacho »
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Re: My Speech :D
« Reply #2 on: April 25, 2011, 09:13:22 pm »
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Maybe he meant outrageous?
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« Reply #3 on: April 25, 2011, 09:19:43 pm »
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Perhaps astounding.
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« Reply #4 on: April 25, 2011, 09:20:36 pm »
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I agree with the two posts above. I think he was using 'outstanding' in the sense that something is outrageous and beyond belief.
Not a bad speech I would say, made me think about the issue in more depth. If possible try and use imagery somehow in it for an extra touch.
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Re: My Speech [Take 2]
« Reply #5 on: April 26, 2011, 11:39:44 am »
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Changed the speech, feedback me pls :)

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Re: My Speech [Take 2]
« Reply #6 on: April 26, 2011, 11:44:28 am »
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Much much better, a solid 8.5/10 on the content from me,
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are you allowed/do you plan to use any prompts?
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Re: My Speech [Take 2]
« Reply #7 on: April 26, 2011, 11:52:42 am »
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Other than the final paragraph, your arguments seem to support stronger regulation of duck hunting rather than abolishing it. You might want to emphasize that if criminalizing the sport is not possible or would require a prolonged decision making process, it is critical that stronger regulatory processes are introduced to combat the problems you described

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Re: My Speech [Take 2]
« Reply #8 on: April 26, 2011, 12:01:01 pm »
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Awesome thanks again!! I think i'll try to enforce the idea of the stricter regulations, because that was my main goal to begin with.
Umm i suppose we could use a prompt, but im not sure how i would incorporate it.