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Re: HSC Modern History Question Thread
« Reply #1125 on: March 20, 2018, 02:07:19 pm »
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Hi!
I've got a bit of a problem - a few weeks ago I was at the state library, researching for my upcoming essay. I wrote down a quote in a book, but didn't write down who said it or even what book it was from. The quote is:
“Hitler emerged in the troubled post-war years as the fanatical champion of German nationalism”
So, if anyone possibly recognises the quote, or knows who stated it, could they please let me know?!
If not, is there any way I can still use it, but not say who said it?
Thanks a lot  :)

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Re: HSC Modern History Question Thread
« Reply #1126 on: March 20, 2018, 03:05:21 pm »
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Hi!
I've got a bit of a problem - a few weeks ago I was at the state library, researching for my upcoming essay. I wrote down a quote in a book, but didn't write down who said it or even what book it was from. The quote is:
“Hitler emerged in the troubled post-war years as the fanatical champion of German nationalism”
So, if anyone possibly recognises the quote, or knows who stated it, could they please let me know?!
If not, is there any way I can still use it, but not say who said it?
Thanks a lot  :)
Hey! I dont know where the quote was from. But you If you quote it in your essay then you certainly need to cite it.
You could try putting the quote into google and seeing if it comes up with a direct match?
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« Reply #1127 on: March 24, 2018, 01:43:14 pm »
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Hey _____ (interesting username  ;) )

That was a very hard question, that a lot of people struggled with last year. In fact, I literally felt exactly how you did after the exam, expecting Trotsky to be my worst section because I felt like I made more of a judgement upon the historians than I did Trotsky (basically wrote a history extension essay). Flash forward to getting my raw marks back and I find out it was actually my best section - 15/15  ;D So please don't worry yourself too much :) I obviously can't guarantee your mark as I haven't read your essay, but from what you have said, your argument seems fine!

First of all I think you might be overthinking things a bit - differing and different mean essentially the same thing, so no worries there! I think the way that you have approached this question is great, and is very similar to what I did during my HSC :) For my response, I basically said that the interpretations say more about the historians and their political and ideological leanings than it says about Trotsky - so pointing out that those who think he was a naive idealist where those who lean further right politically and thus have a negative interpretation of Communism and by extension Trotsky (eg Service, Conquest, Pipes, Figes, etc), in comparison to Left wing historians such as Wood and Deutscher who instead suggest he was a practical revolutionary!

So basically, using my power struggles paragraph as an example;
"Right wing historians such as Service assert that it was Trotsky's personal flaws that resulted in his loss of the power struggle, such as his arrogance and naivety. However, Left-wing historians such as Deutscher present an alternative perspective, suggesting that it is too simplistic to assert personal attributes as the defining issue, instead suggesting that the primary factor resulting in Trotsky's loss of power was the social changes that had occurred after the Civil War, whereby the war-weary society was more attracted to Stalin's "stable" ideology of socialism-in-one-country in comparison to Trotsky's 'Permanent Revolution.'" (obviously went into more detail but you get the gist of my argument).

So I didn't just look at what the perspectives where, but how and why they came to these conclusions. I answered the question upon how differing interpretations assist us in understanding Trotsky's significance, as I established that his significance is developed through this debate :) You can definitely present the argument that no matter what the interpretation, the fact that such wild interpretations exist asserts his significance (had one of my students assert that recently in an assessment)! The question isn't asking was his significance good or bad - just was he a significant figure overall. Whether you accept either position, he was still clearly significant as either a terrible failure or a critical success!

Hope this clears up any concerns (though may have made you more confused - as I was when I found out I got this mark, as I was so worried that I hadn't made a judgement/was sitting on the fence).

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Hey AJ2019 - Susie, who state ranked in Modern, did Trotsky and outlined how she would go about this question above^ :)
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Re: HSC Modern History Question Thread
« Reply #1128 on: March 27, 2018, 11:05:55 pm »
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Hey guys,
I'm currently making an argument table (Susie where you at ;)) for my Personality Study (Leni Riefenstahl) and one of the debates addressed in the syllabus is feminist pioneer. However, in class, we've been focusing more on whether she is a propagandist vs artist. Could the argument of Riefenstahl being an artist be combined with the argument of her being a feminist pioneer or are they completely different ideas?

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Re: HSC Modern History Question Thread
« Reply #1129 on: March 28, 2018, 07:37:31 am »
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Hey guys,
I'm currently making an argument table (Susie where you at ;)) for my Personality Study (Leni Riefenstahl) and one of the debates addressed in the syllabus is feminist pioneer. However, in class, we've been focusing more on whether she is a propagandist vs artist. Could the argument of Riefenstahl being an artist be combined with the argument of her being a feminist pioneer or are they completely different ideas?

Thanks in advance :)
Could you argue that she used her movies as an expression of her femimist ideals?
Her artistic expression included her feminist ideals within itself?
Sorry that I'm not more help; i am doing albert speer as my personality study not Riefenstahl
Good luck!
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Re: HSC Modern History Question Thread
« Reply #1130 on: March 29, 2018, 08:37:51 pm »
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Hey Guys,

If anyone can have a read of my essay and let me know what they and an estimated mark range that would be awesome. Also, I'm struggling to cut it down, originally it was 1863 words, now it is 1400 words. If someone could suggest what I can take out to cut it down to 1000.


TO WHAT EXTENT WAS NAZI GERMANY A TOTALITARIAN STATE?
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To a great extent, under the direction of Adolf Hitler and his national socialist party, Nazi Germany was a totalitarian state, which was a system of government whereby power and all aspects of state affairs were in the hands of one party and its charismatic leader that tolerated no opposition. Following the death of Hindenburg, Hitler became the Fuhrer (supreme ruler) of the German state, rapidly altering the country into an all controlled nation; installing many of the characteristics which can be usually defined as totalitarianism. This was manifested through the extreme application of propaganda, terror and repression through the implementation of the Radio, the SS and the Gestapo to construct a system of terror and advertise the official ideology of Nazism. Hitler obtained jurisdiction of social and cultural life in Germany through youth and women, permitting him to express his Nazi ideology into all aspects of life and ensuring the success of his government, although he did tolerate particular opposition with the swing youth, Edelweiss pirates and confessional church. Additionally, the severe Nazi racial policy being drilled into Germany with anti-semitic laws and full-scale violence meant that the moral and ethical codes of a liberal democratic state were disregarded, forming a totalitarian state. Thus, Nazi Germany was to a great extent a totalitarian state as it featured many of the aspects of totalitarianism
 
Clearly, Nazi Germany was a totalitarian state to a great extent, as apparent through the employment of propaganda, terror and repression to achieve complete domination throughout all aspects of German life. Under the direction of Joseph Goebbels, propaganda was utilised successfully by the Nazi’s in an attempt to broadcast the party and promote the new government as one of national recovery. Propaganda was essentially employed to advocate their party, upbraid other political parties, promote the ideologies of nationalism, articulate a sense of hatred among the enemies and form an image of Hitler as a saviour (Fuhrer myth). Ultimately, it is apparent through the use of the radio, which was an essential tool that was developed in order to be employed for propaganda in industrialising Germany as it had a significant impact upon citizens of Germany. Goebbels realised the capabilities of the radio and developed the people’s radio (Volksempfanger), which was cheap and effective, granting him the ability to compose public opinion through the telecom of Hitler’s speeches and playing of popular music. As a result, the Germans were continuously being advised of Hitler’s authority and power, endorsing the official ideology of the Nazi party, the foundation of a totalitarian state. This is reinforced by Guberger who places strong importance on the responsibility and impact of propaganda on the people of Germany, to the extent where public opinion was created with the assistance of the radio.
 
Additionally, the Nazi regime exercised terror and repression to infuse fear and violence into German’s, in turn upholding control over the individuals who did not support their cause and removing any conflicting political parties. This terror was authorised through militaristic means with the development of the SS (Shutzstaffel), a greatly structured and cruelly resourceful police structure. The SS dealt with all internal enemies of the Nazi regime, living and acting out the philosophy of National Socialism, henceforth advancing the official ideology of Nazism. Founded by a decree on the 30th of November 1933, The Gestapo, controlled by Heinrich Himmler, was in charge of the internal security of the Reich. They were vicious and successful in pinpointing enemies of the Nazi party and were seen by Germans as a terror system, stifling any opposition to the Nazi regime. Through this, Germany encapsulated a system of terror, adding to its essence of being a totalitarian state. Himmler supports this as he stated that “the best political weapon is terror”, clear in the way he utilised the Gestapo to create fear and terror amongst Nazi opposition. Hence, Nazi Germany was significantly a totalitarian state as the party promoted one official ideology with no opposition and incorporated a system of terror through means of propaganda, terror and repression.
 
Moreover, Hitler and Nazi party founded Germany as a totalitarian state to a significant extent as they obtained control of social and cultural life through Hitler youth and women. The Nazi party wanted to shape Germany in relation to their ideology of Nazism, campaigning the idea of Volksgemeinschaft, the concept of a new, harmonious community where all societal divisions were to be replaced by a sense of national unity. This was achieved through the Gleichschaltung period, meaning coordination; where Hitler transformed Germany into a Nazi state with the purpose of creating a racially pure nation, rooting his ideology into all aspects of life. In 1926, Hitler commenced the Hitler youth league and the female equivalent, the league of German girls, to control and shape the entire youth of the nation. Followers of the Hitler youth were brought up and educated so that they could become future inheritors of the Nazi party. By embracing the significance of the young generation, Hitler assured the maintenance of his third Reich, claiming, “He alone who owns the youth, gains the future”. Likewise, Nazi ideology positioned women in a very traditional role; they were sustained by men, not allowed to have leadership positions, could not work in certain occupations and were encouraged to stay at home. The German women’s league encouraged this traditional role of women, testifying that “the women has her own battlefield… with every child she brings into the world, she fights a battle for the nation”. Large families and more children toughened Germany, allowing Hitler to further erect his racially ‘pure’ nation, programming his Nazi ideology even into unborn babies by influencing their mothers. While Hitler did take control of most social and cultural aspects in Germany, there were numerous groups which opposed his regime, in particular, the youth. This is emphasised through the middle-class Germans who combined the swing youth and the working class who contributed to the Edelweiss Pirates, aggressively opposing Nazi ideology. Furthermore, some religions tried to stand against Hitler, especially the Protestant clergy who recognised the confessional church, nevertheless the Nazi regime was able to control these rebellions by arresting and incarcerating anyone who spoke out. Thus, Nazi Germany was to a large extent a totalitarian state as its ideology consumed all levels of society, especially youth and women.

Furthermore, the authoritarian Nazi racial policy demonstrates in what way the moral and ethical codes that feature a liberal democratic state were overlooked, thus being a totalitarian state to a great extent. Best understood as discrimination towards Jews, anti-Semitism was implemented by anti-Semitic laws and through full-scale persecution commencing in 1933. The Nuremberg laws of September 1935 was a number of anti-semitic laws intending to end German rights and freedoms and disregard the integrity of all Jewish people, establishing Jew’s as second-class citizens. Kristallnacht, on the 9th and 10th of November 1930, was the annihilation of Jewish business and synagogues where almost 100 people were killed and over 30000 arrested. This reveals the ruthlessness of these anti-semitic policies, for the first time creating Hitler’s objectives clear to Germany and the world. Stein Weis mirrors this as he stated that “Kristallnacht was a monumental development in Nazi anti-Jewish policy”. As a result of these vicious anti-semitic policies, Jew’s were strongly discriminated against, separated from the rest of Germany and humiliated. Evidently, moral and ethical codes were not in place as Hitler was eager to remove Jew’s and other enemies of the state, reflecting how Nazi Germany was, in fact, a Totalitarian state to a great extent.

Evidently, it is clear that to a great extent Nazi Germany was a totalitarian state. This is apparent as Hitler and his Nazi party were striving for complete control over Germany, encouraging their official ideology and programming it into all levels of society, existing a system of terror and ignoring any moral and ethical codes. Hitler effectively accomplished this as he went to tremendous measures to obtain support for his party by means of propaganda, terror and repression. By obtaining control of German social and cultural life, combined with the authority over youth and women it granted Hitler the ability to form a totalitarian state. Additionally, the authoritarian Nazi policy through anti-Semitic laws and full-scale violence towards Jew’s meant that Hitler eradicated his enemies and opposition, achieving direct jurisdiction over Germany. Ultimately, it can be said that Nazi Germany was to a great extent a totalitarian state.


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Re: HSC Modern History Question Thread
« Reply #1131 on: March 29, 2018, 09:51:42 pm »
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Hey Guys,

If anyone can have a read of my essay and let me know what they and an estimated mark range that would be awesome. Also, I'm struggling to cut it down, originally it was 1863 words, now it is 1400 words. If someone could suggest what I can take out to cut it down to 1000.

.....
Thanks in advance!

Hi!

Sure, I'll read your essay :-) I can't trust myself to give marks out because I don't want to give people false hope lol. Comments will be in the spoiler, and general comments below.


essay here
TO WHAT EXTENT WAS NAZI GERMANY A TOTALITARIAN STATE?

To a great extent, under the direction of Adolf Hitler and his national socialist party, You don't really need this! All you need is a straightforward judgement :-) Nazi Germany was a totalitarian state, which was a system of government whereby power and all aspects of state affairs were in the hands of one party and its charismatic leader that tolerated no opposition. Following the death of Hindenburg, Hitler became the Führer (please include the umlaut) (supreme ruler) of the German state, rapidly altering the country into an all controlled nation; installing many of the characteristics which can be usually defined as totalitarianism. This was manifested through the extreme application of propaganda, terror and repression through the implementation of the Radio, the SS and the Gestapo to construct a system of terror and advertise the official ideology of Nazism. Hitler obtained jurisdiction of social and cultural life in Germany through youth and women, permitting him to express his Nazi ideology into all aspects of life and ensuring the success of his government, although he did tolerate particular opposition with the swing youth, Edelweiss pirates and confessional church. Additionally, the severe Nazi racial policy being drilled into Germany with anti-semitic laws and full-scale violence meant that the moral and ethical codes of a liberal democratic state were disregarded, forming a totalitarian state. Thus, Nazi Germany was to a great extent a totalitarian state as it featured many of the aspects of totalitarianism.
 
Clearly, Nazi Germany was a totalitarian state to a great extent, You don't need 'clearly' here - just "To a great extent, Nazi Germany was a totalitarian state" will do. as apparent through the employment of propaganda, terror and repression to achieve complete domination I wouldn't say propaganda, terror and repression achieved complete domination - maybe 'indoctrination' would be a better word here. throughout all aspects of German life. Under the direction of Joseph Goebbels, propaganda was utilised successfully by the Nazis in an attempt to broadcast the party and promote the new government as one of national recovery. Propaganda was essentially employed to advocate their party, upbraid other political parties, promote the ideologies of nationalism and articulate a sense of hatred among the enemies and form an image of Hitler as a saviour (Fuhrer myth). Ultimately, it is apparent through the use of The radio was an essential tool that was developed in order to be employed for propaganda in industrialising Germany as it which had a significant impact upon citizens of Germany. Goebbels realised the capabilities of the radio and developed the people’s radio (Volksempfanger) I think you can just use "Volksempfanger" here :-), which was cheap and effective, granting him the ability to compose public opinion through the telecom of Hitler’s speeches and playing of popular music. As a result, the Germans were continuously being advised of Hitler’s authority and power, endorsing the official ideology of the Nazi party, the foundation of a totalitarian state. This is reinforced by Guberger who places strong importance on the responsibility and impact of propaganda on the people of Germany, to the extent where public opinion was created with the assistance of the radio. Insert your judgement here to link back to the question.
 
Your topic sentence should relate back to the question! Additionally, the Nazi regime exercised terror and repression to infuse fear and violence into Germans, in turn upholding control over the individuals who did not support their cause and removing any conflicting political parties. This terror was authorised through militaristic means with the development of the SS (Schutzstaffel) Choose which term you want to use, a greatly structured and cruelly resourceful police structure. The SS dealt with all internal enemies of the Nazi regime, living and acting out the philosophy of National Socialism, henceforth advancing the official ideology of Nazism. How? A bit confused lol Founded by a decree on the 30th of November 1933, The Gestapo, controlled by Heinrich Himmler, was in charge of the internal security of the Reich. They were vicious and successful in pinpointing enemies of the Nazi party and were seen by Germans as a terror system, stifling any opposition to the Nazi regime. Through this, Germany encapsulated a system of terror, adding to its essence of being a totalitarian state. Himmler supports this as he stated that “the best political weapon is terror”, clear in the way he utilised the Gestapo to create fear and terror amongst Nazi opposition. Hence, Nazi Germany was significantly a totalitarian state as the party promoted one official ideology with no opposition and incorporated a system of terror through means of propaganda, terror and repression.
 
Moreover, Hitler and Nazi party founded Germany as a totalitarian state to a significant extent I think you could put "to a significant extent" at the beginning of your sentence as they obtained control of social and cultural life through Hitler youth and women. The Nazi party wanted to shape Germany in relation to their ideology of Nazism, campaigning the idea of Volksgemeinschaft, the concept of a new, harmonious community where all societal divisions were to be replaced by a sense of national unity. This was achieved through the Gleichschaltung period, meaning coordination; where Hitler transformed Germany into a Nazi state with the purpose of creating a racially pure nation, rooting his ideology into all aspects of life. In 1926, Hitler commenced the Hitler youth league Hitler Jugend and the its female equivalent, the league of German girlsBund Deutscher Mädel, to control and shape the entire youth of the nation German youth. Followers of the Hitler youth were brought up and educated so that they could become future inheritors of the Nazi party. By embracing the significance of the young generation, Hitler assured the maintenance of his third Reich, claiming, “He alone who owns the youth, gains the future”. Likewise, Nazi ideology positioned women in a very traditional role; they were sustained by men, not allowed to have leadership positions, could not work in certain occupations and were encouraged to stay at home. The German women’s league encouraged this traditional role of women, testifying that “the women has her own battlefield… with every child she brings into the world, she fights a battle for the nation”. Large families and more children toughened Germany, allowing Hitler to further erect his racially ‘pure’ nation, programming his Nazi ideology even into unborn babies by influencing their mothers. While Hitler did take control of most social and cultural aspects in Germany, there were numerous groups which opposed his regime. , in particular, the youth. This is emphasised through the middle-class Germans who combined the swing youth and the working class who contributed to the For example, the Edelweiss Pirates, aggressively opposed Nazi ideology. Furthermore, some religions tried to stand against Hitler, especially the Protestant clergy who recognised the confessional church, nevertheless but the Nazi regime was able to control these rebellions by arresting and incarcerating anyone who spoke out. Thus, Nazi Germany was to a large extent a totalitarian state as its ideology consumed all levels of society, especially youth and women.

Furthermore, the authoritarian Nazi racial policy demonstrates in what way the moral and ethical codes that feature a liberal democratic state were overlooked, thus being a totalitarian state to a great extent. Best understood as discrimination towards Jews, anti-Semitism was implemented by anti-Semitic laws and through full-scale persecution commencing in 1933. The Nuremberg laws of September 1935 were a number of anti-semitic laws intending to end German rights and freedoms and disregard the integrity of all Jewish people, establishing Jew’s as second-class citizens. Kristallnacht, on the 9th and 10th of November 1930, was the annihilation of Jewish business and synagogues where almost 100 people were killed and over 30000 arrested. This revealed the ruthlessness of these anti-semitic policies, for the first time creating making Hitler’s objectives clear to Germany and the world. Stein Weis mirrors this as he stated that “Kristallnacht was a monumental development in Nazi anti-Jewish policy”. As a result of these vicious anti-semitic policies, Jews were strongly discriminated against, separated from the rest of Germany and humiliated. Evidently, moral and ethical codes were not in place as Hitler was eager to remove Jews and other enemies of the state, reflecting how Nazi Germany was, in fact, a Totalitarian state to a great extent.

Evidently, it is clear that to a great extent Nazi Germany was a totalitarian state. This is apparent as Hitler and his Nazi party were striving for complete control over Germany, encouraging their official ideology and programming it into all levels of society, existing a system of terror and ignoring any moral and ethical codes. Hitler effectively accomplished this as he went to tremendous measures to obtain support for his party by means of propaganda, terror and repression. By obtaining control of German social and cultural life, combined with the authority over youth and women it granted Hitler the ability to form a totalitarian state. Additionally, the authoritarian Nazi policy through anti-Semitic laws and full-scale violence towards Jew’s meant that Hitler eradicated his enemies and opposition, achieving direct jurisdiction over Germany. Ultimately, it can be said that Nazi Germany was to a great extent a totalitarian state.

Okay so, a few things:
- I found there was a lot of redundant wording. What I mean by this is you wrote a huge sentence which could've been cut down a ton - check out the strikethroughs, I kinda gave up closer to the end lol.
- You have a great grasp on content :-) There is an immense amount of detail in this, well done!
- You need to sustain your judgement the whole way through! Make what you think clear in your thesis statement, then follow through in each of your paragraphs. Your topic sentence in each paragraph needs to link back to the question (and your judgement), and there should be a linking sentence at the end.
- Your introduction doesn't need to cover every single detail of the point you're going to make. All you need to do is mention the points you're going to make in the paragraphs. I think you expanded a little on propaganda, terror and repression where you mentioned the radio and stuff - not needed in your introduction.
- Terminology: choose one or the other. You can use the German term, or the English, it doesn't really matter - just choose one. Although wink wink nudge nudge it's suggested you use the German.
- On that note, if there's an umlaut in the terminology, use it! It's letters like these: ä, ü, ö, etc. You can google how to put them in (just hold the letter key if you're on Mac) - probably just me being annoying because I'm studying German right now, but that's not a huge issue.
- There's no need to be so fancy! All Modern asks you to do is to make a judgement in relation to the question, and deliver your information in a way that answers it and supports your judgement.

Keep writing essays and send them in to be marked :-) I hope this helped - best of luck for your exams! Sorry if it looked like I was really harsh lol

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Re: HSC Modern History Question Thread
« Reply #1132 on: March 30, 2018, 08:09:35 am »
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Sure, I'll read your essay :-) I can't trust myself to give marks out because I don't want to give people false hope lol. Comments will be in the spoiler, and general comments below.


essay here
TO WHAT EXTENT WAS NAZI GERMANY A TOTALITARIAN STATE?

To a great extent, under the direction of Adolf Hitler and his national socialist party, You don't really need this! All you need is a straightforward judgement :-) Nazi Germany was a totalitarian state, which was a system of government whereby power and all aspects of state affairs were in the hands of one party and its charismatic leader that tolerated no opposition. Following the death of Hindenburg, Hitler became the Führer (please include the umlaut) (supreme ruler) of the German state, rapidly altering the country into an all controlled nation; installing many of the characteristics which can be usually defined as totalitarianism. This was manifested through the extreme application of propaganda, terror and repression through the implementation of the Radio, the SS and the Gestapo to construct a system of terror and advertise the official ideology of Nazism. Hitler obtained jurisdiction of social and cultural life in Germany through youth and women, permitting him to express his Nazi ideology into all aspects of life and ensuring the success of his government, although he did tolerate particular opposition with the swing youth, Edelweiss pirates and confessional church. Additionally, the severe Nazi racial policy being drilled into Germany with anti-semitic laws and full-scale violence meant that the moral and ethical codes of a liberal democratic state were disregarded, forming a totalitarian state. Thus, Nazi Germany was to a great extent a totalitarian state as it featured many of the aspects of totalitarianism.
 
Clearly, Nazi Germany was a totalitarian state to a great extent, You don't need 'clearly' here - just "To a great extent, Nazi Germany was a totalitarian state" will do. as apparent through the employment of propaganda, terror and repression to achieve complete domination I wouldn't say propaganda, terror and repression achieved complete domination - maybe 'indoctrination' would be a better word here. throughout all aspects of German life. Under the direction of Joseph Goebbels, propaganda was utilised successfully by the Nazis in an attempt to broadcast the party and promote the new government as one of national recovery. Propaganda was essentially employed to advocate their party, upbraid other political parties, promote the ideologies of nationalism and articulate a sense of hatred among the enemies and form an image of Hitler as a saviour (Fuhrer myth). Ultimately, it is apparent through the use of The radio was an essential tool that was developed in order to be employed for propaganda in industrialising Germany as it which had a significant impact upon citizens of Germany. Goebbels realised the capabilities of the radio and developed the people’s radio (Volksempfanger) I think you can just use "Volksempfanger" here :-), which was cheap and effective, granting him the ability to compose public opinion through the telecom of Hitler’s speeches and playing of popular music. As a result, the Germans were continuously being advised of Hitler’s authority and power, endorsing the official ideology of the Nazi party, the foundation of a totalitarian state. This is reinforced by Guberger who places strong importance on the responsibility and impact of propaganda on the people of Germany, to the extent where public opinion was created with the assistance of the radio. Insert your judgement here to link back to the question.
 
Your topic sentence should relate back to the question! Additionally, the Nazi regime exercised terror and repression to infuse fear and violence into Germans, in turn upholding control over the individuals who did not support their cause and removing any conflicting political parties. This terror was authorised through militaristic means with the development of the SS (Schutzstaffel) Choose which term you want to use, a greatly structured and cruelly resourceful police structure. The SS dealt with all internal enemies of the Nazi regime, living and acting out the philosophy of National Socialism, henceforth advancing the official ideology of Nazism. How? A bit confused lol Founded by a decree on the 30th of November 1933, The Gestapo, controlled by Heinrich Himmler, was in charge of the internal security of the Reich. They were vicious and successful in pinpointing enemies of the Nazi party and were seen by Germans as a terror system, stifling any opposition to the Nazi regime. Through this, Germany encapsulated a system of terror, adding to its essence of being a totalitarian state. Himmler supports this as he stated that “the best political weapon is terror”, clear in the way he utilised the Gestapo to create fear and terror amongst Nazi opposition. Hence, Nazi Germany was significantly a totalitarian state as the party promoted one official ideology with no opposition and incorporated a system of terror through means of propaganda, terror and repression.
 
Moreover, Hitler and Nazi party founded Germany as a totalitarian state to a significant extent I think you could put "to a significant extent" at the beginning of your sentence as they obtained control of social and cultural life through Hitler youth and women. The Nazi party wanted to shape Germany in relation to their ideology of Nazism, campaigning the idea of Volksgemeinschaft, the concept of a new, harmonious community where all societal divisions were to be replaced by a sense of national unity. This was achieved through the Gleichschaltung period, meaning coordination; where Hitler transformed Germany into a Nazi state with the purpose of creating a racially pure nation, rooting his ideology into all aspects of life. In 1926, Hitler commenced the Hitler youth league Hitler Jugend and the its female equivalent, the league of German girlsBund Deutscher Mädel, to control and shape the entire youth of the nation German youth. Followers of the Hitler youth were brought up and educated so that they could become future inheritors of the Nazi party. By embracing the significance of the young generation, Hitler assured the maintenance of his third Reich, claiming, “He alone who owns the youth, gains the future”. Likewise, Nazi ideology positioned women in a very traditional role; they were sustained by men, not allowed to have leadership positions, could not work in certain occupations and were encouraged to stay at home. The German women’s league encouraged this traditional role of women, testifying that “the women has her own battlefield… with every child she brings into the world, she fights a battle for the nation”. Large families and more children toughened Germany, allowing Hitler to further erect his racially ‘pure’ nation, programming his Nazi ideology even into unborn babies by influencing their mothers. While Hitler did take control of most social and cultural aspects in Germany, there were numerous groups which opposed his regime. , in particular, the youth. This is emphasised through the middle-class Germans who combined the swing youth and the working class who contributed to the For example, the Edelweiss Pirates, aggressively opposed Nazi ideology. Furthermore, some religions tried to stand against Hitler, especially the Protestant clergy who recognised the confessional church, nevertheless but the Nazi regime was able to control these rebellions by arresting and incarcerating anyone who spoke out. Thus, Nazi Germany was to a large extent a totalitarian state as its ideology consumed all levels of society, especially youth and women.

Furthermore, the authoritarian Nazi racial policy demonstrates in what way the moral and ethical codes that feature a liberal democratic state were overlooked, thus being a totalitarian state to a great extent. Best understood as discrimination towards Jews, anti-Semitism was implemented by anti-Semitic laws and through full-scale persecution commencing in 1933. The Nuremberg laws of September 1935 were a number of anti-semitic laws intending to end German rights and freedoms and disregard the integrity of all Jewish people, establishing Jew’s as second-class citizens. Kristallnacht, on the 9th and 10th of November 1930, was the annihilation of Jewish business and synagogues where almost 100 people were killed and over 30000 arrested. This revealed the ruthlessness of these anti-semitic policies, for the first time creating making Hitler’s objectives clear to Germany and the world. Stein Weis mirrors this as he stated that “Kristallnacht was a monumental development in Nazi anti-Jewish policy”. As a result of these vicious anti-semitic policies, Jews were strongly discriminated against, separated from the rest of Germany and humiliated. Evidently, moral and ethical codes were not in place as Hitler was eager to remove Jews and other enemies of the state, reflecting how Nazi Germany was, in fact, a Totalitarian state to a great extent.

Evidently, it is clear that to a great extent Nazi Germany was a totalitarian state. This is apparent as Hitler and his Nazi party were striving for complete control over Germany, encouraging their official ideology and programming it into all levels of society, existing a system of terror and ignoring any moral and ethical codes. Hitler effectively accomplished this as he went to tremendous measures to obtain support for his party by means of propaganda, terror and repression. By obtaining control of German social and cultural life, combined with the authority over youth and women it granted Hitler the ability to form a totalitarian state. Additionally, the authoritarian Nazi policy through anti-Semitic laws and full-scale violence towards Jew’s meant that Hitler eradicated his enemies and opposition, achieving direct jurisdiction over Germany. Ultimately, it can be said that Nazi Germany was to a great extent a totalitarian state.

Okay so, a few things:
- I found there was a lot of redundant wording. What I mean by this is you wrote a huge sentence which could've been cut down a ton - check out the strikethroughs, I kinda gave up closer to the end lol.
- You have a great grasp on content :-) There is an immense amount of detail in this, well done!
- You need to sustain your judgement the whole way through! Make what you think clear in your thesis statement, then follow through in each of your paragraphs. Your topic sentence in each paragraph needs to link back to the question (and your judgement), and there should be a linking sentence at the end.
- Your introduction doesn't need to cover every single detail of the point you're going to make. All you need to do is mention the points you're going to make in the paragraphs. I think you expanded a little on propaganda, terror and repression where you mentioned the radio and stuff - not needed in your introduction.
- Terminology: choose one or the other. You can use the German term, or the English, it doesn't really matter - just choose one. Although wink wink nudge nudge it's suggested you use the German.
- On that note, if there's an umlaut in the terminology, use it! It's letters like these: ä, ü, ö, etc. You can google how to put them in (just hold the letter key if you're on Mac) - probably just me being annoying because I'm studying German right now, but that's not a huge issue.
- There's no need to be so fancy! All Modern asks you to do is to make a judgement in relation to the question, and deliver your information in a way that answers it and supports your judgement.

Keep writing essays and send them in to be marked :-) I hope this helped - best of luck for your exams! Sorry if it looked like I was really harsh lol

Also for future reference, when posting essays, make a thread on this board here.

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Re: HSC Modern History Question Thread
« Reply #1133 on: March 30, 2018, 04:19:22 pm »
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I have my Modern History exam coming up, and Section 1 (multiple choice and short answers) of my exam is on WW1. Just wondering, what I should do in preparation for the exam, really stressing out and could use any help.

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Re: HSC Modern History Question Thread
« Reply #1134 on: March 30, 2018, 06:11:07 pm »
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Hey Guys,

I have my Modern History exam coming up, and Section 1 (multiple choice and short answers) of my exam is on WW1. Just wondering, what I should do in preparation for the exam, really stressing out and could use any help.

Thanks in advance!
Hey!
So ww1 is a source based section. So the best way to prepare for any sort of sources and questions you'll be facing is past papers. That way you'll have alot of experience dealing with a variety of sources.
However, some questions in addition to disscussing the sources, ask for YOUR OWN KNOWLADGE so brushing up on your notes regarding all the syllabus dot points is definitely a must!

Good luck!  ;D
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Re: HSC Modern History Question Thread
« Reply #1135 on: March 30, 2018, 06:22:08 pm »
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Hey Guys,

I have my Modern History exam coming up, and Section 1 (multiple choice and short answers) of my exam is on WW1. Just wondering, what I should do in preparation for the exam, really stressing out and could use any help.

Thanks in advance!
Hey there,
My Task 1 was basically Section 1 of the HSC exam, and one of the things I learnt from that task was time management. Even though I finished, I rushed towards the end of my source analysis. Looking back at my response, I could've enhanced my analysis if I didn't spend too much time on the 6 mark question (although, the typo in my exam also threw me off as well). Go through the content you learnt and make sure you know all the details (dates, terminology etc.)

And just like Mada438 said, past papers are important as well. I compiled a list of available sources in past papers so there's a place to start!

Hope this helps!
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« Reply #1136 on: May 14, 2018, 07:30:47 pm »
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Hey Guys,

If anyone can assist me in the answering the following question or provide some pointers/ideas that would be awesome!

"Describe THREE significant events that influenced the rise to prominence of the personality you have studied (ALBERT SPEER)"

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« Reply #1137 on: May 14, 2018, 07:46:41 pm »
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Hey Guys,

If anyone can assist me in the answering the following question or provide some pointers/ideas that would be awesome!

"Describe THREE significant events that influenced the rise to prominence of the personality you have studied (ALBERT SPEER)"

Thanks in advance!
Hey there,
The best way to answer this is to have a general look at your personality's life overall and decide which are the three main events in their life- even though it's a describe question, the best way to view this is what do you think are the three most important events in Speer's life? You can view this kinda like your thesis. But remember, it's describe so no assessment questions. I didn't do Speer, but from my basic knowledge on him, maybe you can talk about him meeting Hitler, one of his most famous works (Cathedral of Light?) and possibly denazification? Or even his role during WW2?

Also, maybe consider using his memoir as a source. Just remember to be careful with what he says because there is a chance that he may distort the past (considering how he kinda did help Hitler).

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« Reply #1138 on: May 15, 2018, 06:14:55 pm »
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So I'm doing Speer...The question asks about he rises to prominence of Speer.
There are two ways i would look at the question. The first would be talking about his rise to prominence as a Nazi. So I would look at his most notable architecture works (e.g cathedral of light)-which lead him to become "first architect of the Reich" or something and his promotion to armaments minister and how he subsequently transformed it and kept Germany in the war.
Then for the third event, perhaps you could look at the Nuremberg trials. I say this because none of the other senior Nazis acknowledged what they had done, but Speer did so this put him in an entirely new category (he was the ONLY ONE to admit). This is where the big historical debate comes in: whether he was the "good Nazi or not"
At the end of the day, an individual does not live forever, but their actions CAN. Speer may be dead now, but as long as we still talk about him he is still prominent.
And that is why i believe the Nuremberg trials/his admittance can be looked at as an event leading to his rise to prominence (on the world stage).

Hope this helps!
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Re: HSC Modern History Question Thread
« Reply #1139 on: May 20, 2018, 04:40:24 pm »
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Hey guys,
Just a question on referencing: if we were to use a primary source from a textbook, do you reference the primary source or the textbook?
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