Our school is currently doing the Great Gatsby and after looking at the high scoring responses from vce examination reports, I realize that they don't really follow the TEEL structure and kind of integrate everything together.
I tried to replicate this, but I fear that I may be summarizing too much, however I'm not sure. Can someone please read over my body paragraph and see if this is true?
Question - "The Great Gatsby shows that living the American Dream can end in tragedy. Discuss".
Gatsby’s trait of manifesting the American Dream is initially his strong suit. Gatsby was born into a “poor family”, however his ambition led him “restless” and not contempt with his current situation. Gatsby is presented to have pursued the idea of the American Dream from a young age, as he “left his home at age 17” to seek prosperity. Fitzgerald exemplifies the hard-working nature of Gatsby through his ability to please and become a “right hand man” of Dan Cody, a rather influential man at the time. It is through this relationship that Gatsby attains the knowledge and elegance of the higher class of society, and despite not receiving his “20k inheritance” from Cody’s death, his perseverance still enables him to enter the upper class of society. In all, his manifestation of The American Dream at this point, serves as nothing else but an advantage.