Hey guys,
I have written a persuasive essay today. I found that no one had corrected my previous piece (shack, fire and radio) so it would be great if someone also corrected that one. This was probably not a very great piece either but I continue to try and improve. Can you guys please just provide some suggestions on how to think of ideas really quickly as I continue to struggle with that. Some of the sentences in this piece are again weirdly structures so please provide an alternative, although if possible, don't worry about it. The word count continues to get better though so that's a positive. Thanks
Topic: Should money be spent on space exploration?
Billions of dollars a year are spent on space exploration. It is worth it or is it just a waste of money? Space exploration is the discovery and investigation of celestial structures in outer space. It is undoubtedly necessary to spend money on space exploration as it provides jobs for thousands of people around the world and allows for discoveries to be made that benefit humankind.
To begin with, space exploration is a field that provides jobs for many people around the world. With countries as populous as India, China, Russia and the United States of America, space exploration is a major factor in the economy. Rockets and spaceflight instruments require a large number of people to be designed and built. A vast portion of money spent on space exploration is used for salaries to pay these professionals. The community engaged in the space industry includes specialist scientists, engineers, designers and IT programmers and all of these occupations provide jobs for thousands of workers. More jobs in the space exploration field will be a major boost for a nation's recognition and wealth. Therefore, money should definitely be spent on space exploration as it is a major source of jobs.
In addition, as more money is spent on space exploration, more discoveries are made. The discoveries can then be implemented in various other fields of study such as the medical field. An example can be given using NASA, the world's leading space science and technology agency. For example, NASA has invented technologies that were later used in MRI's and even artificial heart pumps. It has been discovered that one of Saturn's moons, Titan, has enough lakes and oceans to provide residence of humans for at least thousands of years. This discovery was only possible by the money spent on space exploration. Recently, India launched the most number of satellites in a single rocket mission and that too at the cheapest cost. These technologies will allow other discoveries to be made on earth using the same technologies. Space exploration has also allowed scientists to predict the amount of time humans will be able to occupy the earth before natural causes force mankind to leave. Hence, space exploration not only allows for discoveries to be made in space but also on earth.
To sum up, money should unequivocally be spent on space exploration. First of all, space exploration provides jobs for occupations such as scientists, engineers and IT professionals. Furthermore, through space exploration (what's an alternative to use instead of space exploration?), discoveries can be made in various other fields such as medicinal purposes.
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