Here is my Workplace Intro for anyone to offer their thoughts:
(plz help trials are tmrw and my teacher has not responded to any of my emails rip)
"To what extent do contemporary issues in the workplace reflect changing values and ethical standards?"
The workplace is of inherent value to society, providing individuals with financial security, while also contributing to the greater economy through employment. Thus, it is important that workplace law reflects the evolving values of society. An important expectation of workplace law is to govern employer and employee relationships to achieve fairness. Yet, in light of contemporary issues such as safety, termination of unemployment, social concerns and expectations towards the liability of employers have increased, to which the law has to some extent, responded. Through law reform in particular, workplace law has aimed to adapt to these growing concerns,however, it struggles to reach full effectiveness through struggling to balance the rights between the employer and employee.
Hey there inescelic,
From a quick skim over of your intro, the main issue I have with it is that it provide a clear judgment until the very last sentence, and even here it is still a little bit 'on the fence.' For legal studies essays, markers really want to see that you have a strong overall judgment (in our legal essays we had words that were banned such as "some extent" "a little bit effective" "moderately effective" etc. as these words clouded your argument making it unclear what your overall stance on the question is; also "completely effective/ineffective" as everything in the justice system has some flaws to it but also some positive) It's really good that you mention the flaws of the system as this really heightens your argument that you can acknowledge both sides but in the end you should have one overall judgement that guides the direction of your essay.
Hope this gives you an initial direction, definitely post it back up for us to see your progress!
how do I remember legislation/cases/media articles/victim impact statements and statistics? also in the trials..what do I do if I know what the specific act does, but cant remember the name of it?
also, what is adjudication? and the difference between bail and remand? I understand that bail is awarded between the period of being charged and awaiting trial, but is remand when you are taken back into custody after abusing one of the terms by which you were awarded bail?
lastly...any words of encouragement? trials are this week and I'm stressing majorly!
MT!
Hi Sophia123!
Memorising the large amount of content was one of the biggest things i struggled with during legal studies - the way around this was to choose pieces of evidence that were broad enough to use in multiple dot points. This way I could remember one case that covered a variety of dot points instead of memorising 5 individual cases for specific dot points. Once you have culled away and found the "essential" pieces of evidence you need, actually memorising it is another story. I found that writing out the legislation and the main provisions, cases and the judgments, media articles and their effect - writing these out 2-3 times then reading it helped me to initially understand. Then i would make an essay plan in closed book circumstances and pick what evidence i would use and dot point the main parts. Sadly, there is on secret formula for memorising it but making it engaging and not just a boring read over and over again is the best way to go about it - this can be done in many ways, palm cards and testing yourself, translating each evidence into a symbol to trigger it etc.
Bail/remand - so you know that when a person is charged, there is a time lag between then and when the case actually starts. This time can be up to one year and is to compensate for lawyers to get their cases together as well as the backlog of cases the courts have to deal with. So during this time period a person can be let out on bail which is the "conditional release of a person awaiting their trial" or they are detained until then which is called remand. This is a big issue to do with law reform, moral/ethical standards etc. and is dealt with in the bail act; having ramifications on overcrowding of prisoners as well as the cost involved in keeping people in prison when they havent been convicted etc. An incredibly interesting topic area that I highly recommend you look over as it can be used in a variety of theme & challenge essay questions.
Don't worry, the trial is just a piece of paper - just realise it's just paper; don't let it scare you that much!!! Imagine you are the fire burning through the paper, growing bigger with every question answered and mark you will get 
ahah that was very cringe but i hope you understand that it is only one test, there are other opportunities to do better!! But the fact that you are realising your problem areas now and asking about them is actually amazing for you (even if you don't realise), so don't stress and just go into it with a confident mindset that you will ace it!!!
Good luck!
Last one, can someone please offer their thoughts on my IP intro:
"To what extent has state sovereignty assisted in recognising the rights of IPs?"
State sovereignty has the power to promote Indigenous peoples' (IPs) right to self-determination yet equally can prevent IPs from pursuing their political, social and economic status. The worldwide history of colonisation has impeded upon the rights of IPs, and thus as social values change, a new body of law aims to assert the rights of IPs and rectify past wrongs and injustices. However, a nation state's ability to recognise rights related to land, natural resources and language, is dependent upon political will, thus making state sovereignty a limited tool for the achievement of justice for IPs, as highlighted by the disparities of IPs rights worldwide.
Hey there,
State sovereignty has the power to promote Indigenous peoples' (IPs)
not sure if this is acceptable but if your teacher said it is then totally ignore right to self-determination yet equally can prevent IPs from pursuing their political, social and economic status.
so the same sort of issue as your other introduction - it lacks a clear stance/judgment, especially since you said "equally" it seems very on the fence and I am not sure what way you are arguing for. The worldwide history of colonisation has impeded upon the rights of IPs, and thus as social values change, a new body of law aims to assert the rights of IPs and rectify past wrongs and injustices
try to link this sentence a bit more to the question, is this going to a paragraph? or is this just setting up the context of state sovereignty's role in promoting recognition of IPs. However, a nation state's ability to recognise rights related to land, natural resources and language, is dependent upon political will, thus making state sovereignty a limited tool for the achievement of justice for IPs, as highlighted by the disparities of IPs rights worldwide.
really like how you mention disparities internationally - this sets up really good points of comparison that can strengthen your argument - however it still lacks an overall clear judgement that acknowledges both sides of the argument --> this is really necessary to achieve the top marks in essays. Try to incorporate this a little bit more!! Hope this helps a little bit!!
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