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The effect of the media upon World order is a very highly complicated legal issue which justifies the law and the media is moderately effective in achieving justice between nation-states. Good start, sets up your judgement, not sure what you mean by 'justifies the law' though? Be sure your statements/arguments are clearly stated. Regards to this legal issue this definitely impacts the society in underpinning the media and the law representation between each issues that arise from world order. Watch expression - I'm getting the rough idea you are putting across but you want to make sure that the marker doesn't have to do to much work to decipher what you are presenting. The media has been an inclusively beneficial representation of the arising issues in world order, regarding the conflict Israel v Palestine the media’s role and judgement regards to this conflict has been bias and judgmental throughout their reports. Try and keep cohesive - Are you saying the media is beneficial? Biased? However, regarding discretion other independent media reports have been just and fair regarding this conflict. Furthermore, the civil conflict between North and south Sudan has arisen major legal issue regards to the media as being moderately ineffective with their published news reports regarding this civil conflict. Independent media reports has played a crucial role in regards to world order with it’s justified news reports concerning this civil conflict. Additionally, the vital issue of the war on terror conflict has raised world order issues. Many media reports have acted problematic bias with their false criticism towards iraq with its false and misleading broadcast. To conclude, the media and the law’s impact towards world order has been beneficial allowing it to be moderately effective towards nation-states overall. This is a good introduction, it sets up the argument - However, it is a tad long. Try and trim it down to five, maybe six sentences at the most. Introduce the ideas, give one or two sentences evaluating the media's coverage of the world order issues, then conclude - You just need to streamline things a little.
The media characterization upon world order regarding the civil conflict between Israel and Palestine has raised crucial world order issues with its false Accusations throughout their published reports, however the media and the law have been useful towards this conflict as they are moderately effective of accomplishing justice between nation-states overall. How does the media help accomplish justice specifically? Is it about promoting the issue, or otherwise? World order issues have risen as the media have been bias towards Palestine with their ambiguous broadcast and reports. According to Accusations of bias in coverage of the israel-Palestine conflict publishing “Israeli security forces allege they were under attack before the killings, but no soldiers were hurt which undermines the veracity of the attack. Where does the quote end there, does it go to the end? Be sure to be clear when you
include headings as to when they finish (finish off your quote marks). Furthermore, according to Three Palestine teenagers shot dead on west bank the youths were considered as a threat towards the israelites as they were presumed to have opened fire to the israelites soldiers, but no allegations of israelis soldiers being wounded or killed. Try not to just retell the article - What has the article done to impact on the scenario? What role has the media played here? This sophistically underpins the media's highly false reports towards the Palestine. Make a judgement - Is this effective or ineffective? Furthermore, the UN Charter treaty underlines that every nation should be equal and be cooperating peacefully, but Israel has incredibly violated the treaty as Un observers were denied, separation wall were built, and created illegal settlements were included. In addition, according to the Geneva Convention treaty that innocent civilians, and hospitals are not be attacked.Further, biological dangerous nuclear weapons are not to be used, but Israel has violated this treaty with its dangerous attack that wounded and killed 8 boys in total according to the article Israel strike four boys on Gaza beach as ‘’humanitarian ceasefire’ announced. Do these relate to the media? Be sure to stay on track with the question. These innocent civilians were playing by the fisherman's container and missiles were aimed straight at the container at Gaza beach with no prose threat towards the israelites at all, but were attacked by the israelis. However, the article 5 Palestinians killed while attacking israelis, as two Palestinians were fatally shot after they opened fire with automatic weapons on Israeli security forces, also as two Palestinians were throwing rocks at passing vehicles near the West Bank city allowing israelis soldiers killing them. Again, don't just retell the media articles. You need to analyse them - Are they effective/ineffective? Why? Further, another Palestinian gripping a knife ran at Israeli paramilitary border police officers, and an officer shot and killed him. In conclusion, the media and the law have been moderately effective regarding this conflict and nation-states overall.
Regarding the Media and the law’s representation in relation of the civil conflict between North and South Sudan has raised various world order distributions with regards with their publishes of reports and broadcasting with numerous of world order problems occurring, but the media and the law are not always unjust and bias with their reporting with the issues of world order and this civil conflict. This is a looong sentence, try to break your ideas into smaller chunks. Also, try to add some variety to how you start your paragraphs. Just repeating the same phrase again is a bit monotonous to the marker. Thus, the media and the law’s impact in regards of this civil conflict its has been moderately effective in achieving justice for all Nation-states. Good job on making an obvious judgement here. The media have taken action against North Sudan. According to the treaty international Criminal Court it is that no crimes against humanity, war crimes, torture, genocide is to be committed at all. However, the president of Sudan has committed five counts of crimes against humanity such as murder, and torture. Two counts of war crimes by intentionally directing attacks against a civilian population as such or against individual civilians by not taking part in hostilities. Further, as well three counts of genocide were committed as well by the cause of serious bodily and mental harm was applied upon civilians. Furthermore, more genocide was committed as deliberately inflicting on each target group, as dangerous rebels the janjaweed militia have committed these types of genocide according to the prosecutor v. Omar Hassan Ahmad Al Bashir. This information, while it would be useful in general, isn't strictly related to the media. Keep things on track! The treaty Geneva Convention states that torture, war crimes, and any act of genocide is forbidden, but it was violated by the sudanese president Omar Hassan Ahmad Al Bashir regarding the crimes that bashir committed the media and the law have been very weak in regards with their reporting and publishing which determines that the media have been limited effective as well the ICJ treaty regarding world order issues towards this conflict. Another really long sentence, break it up a little! However, the article Omar al-Bashir Case Shows International criminal court’s Limitations strikes at Mr. Bashir as given an arrest warrant, but the international criminal court is only powerful towards weak nations as it has failed to prosecute Mr. Bashir as it had no power to handcuff them and put them in the dock. The media has predominantly failed in raising awareness with this world order issue concerning this conflict, towards the society, and with its regards how the international court of justice has failed with their reports and publishing regarding this conflict. Good, this is what you need more of - Actually evaluating the media's response to the issue. To add more, according to UN approves new peacekeeping force to south sudan from the foreign media Al Jazeera as the United Nations Security Council has approved the deployment of an additional 4,000-strong peacekeeping force in South Sudan this peacekeeping is to act as a protection force regarding this civil conflict. To conclude, the media, other independent media, and the law publishes and reports have been moderately effective in achieving justice between nation-states.
Regarding the media and law representation upon the world on terror conflict, the media and law has explicitly raised various of world order issues regarding this tremendous conflict. Further, the media and the law have been ultimately highly bias regarding this conflict especially towards iraq as this has been the media’s and the law's biggest target and enemy. However, the media and the law have been moderately effective within this conflict overall. The media has extraordinary been unfair and bias with its highly misrepresentative propaganda publishing and reports regarding this conflict as it pronounced it weapons of mass destruction. According to the ‘Iraq war 'waged on false intelligence',as the media and the law have falsely broadcasted misleading Accusations towards iraq as it believed that within this conflict that iraq had dangerous ‘’biological weapons’’, nuclear bombs and weapons. As this is completely forbidden under the Geneva Convention as the use of biological, chemical and nuclear weapons is not to be used or taken into sort of account during a use of force conflict as it will violate the treaty. But however, regarding other independent media reports it has found no source of evidence of iraq using any highly toxic dangerous chemical or biological nuclear gas and weapons. According to the article ‘’Media's failure on Iraq still stings’’, as well 100,000 Iraqi civilians have been killed, and not a single of biological of weapons were found.
- Watch expression. You don't need to be an incredible writer to argue a point well in Legal, but your sentences do need to flow logically and express your ideas clearly. I was doing a lot of work to interpret your evidence and perspectives. Get a friend to help you read the essay out and tidy up the word choice and syntax!
- Good job making an obvious judgement in places, but you need to do a little more to back that up. A lot of your analysis/evidence wasn't strictly to do with the media, but to other responses. This isn't relevant for this question!
- Trim down your introduction, if for no other reason than to make your life easier