English Exam-What do I have to include?

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This is from Re: English Work Examples Directory

'With the police’s recent decision to begin patrolling graffiti “hot spots” in Avonlea in an attempt to combat vandalism, debate has been sparked as to the effectiveness of this approach and to the nature of graffiti itself.  One commentator, Vanessa Swan, writes in an opinion piece from a Melbourne newspaper that graffiti is in fact an art form, contributing more to society than those who would like it to be removed tend to believe.  A photograph published together with the opinion piece supports Swan’s contention, presenting graffiti as vivifying society and encouraging self-expression through artistic creation.  This issue is set to spark further conflict, as it deals not only with graffiti and its place within society, but also the nature of art itself and its role within human civilisation.'

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