Identity and belonging piece, critique would be excellent.

[kendraaaaa]

This is an unfinished piece, as I'm not sure whether where I'm going with this is good or not. I'm worried about whether the statements I make are too absolute, and if I should tone this down a bit.

‘A strong sense of identity depends on belonging to community as well as to family.’

“Nothing of me is original, I am the combined effort of everyone I’ve ever known”, words from Palahniuk. As developing persons, we imitate rather than create. Acquiring knowledge is a form of imitation, likewise acquiring an identity is another form of human imitation. Hence, personal identity is a fallacious concept. Humanities’ identity is collective, an individual’s attempt at forming an identity is severed in parallel to their connection with society.

Association with community provides the basis for human social development and sustenance. This association influences the forging of ourselves. Whether consciously or uncontrollably if one floats through life as a single entity and hence without the aforementioned association, an identity becomes a utopian idea. For this single unrelated entity  there is nothing to mimic, nothing to imitate.


Any feedback is greatly appreciated. 

[kendraaaaa]

bump.

[kendraaaaa]

i hate bumpinggggg =.=

[kendraaaaa]

Thank you

[minilunchbox]

Nice quote. This is quite interesting and is a really good start, but it also looks like it could end up great or disastrous depending on how you end it and the direction you take it.

[xXNovaxX]

I don't know the conditions you wrote this in, if you had memorised statements, had a book in front of you, copied quotes etc (it is a brilliant piece btw),

But for your benefit, please make sure you are writing at this stage in timed conditions, or at least coming u with your OWN ideas rather than copying off somewhere else.

I may be 100% wrong!! Don't get me wrong, but I really like the piece, but could you REALLY come up with this in an exam?

Hope you don't take it the wrong way, you might have come up with this all on your own

But yeah

Nice piece

[kendraaaaa]

It was all done under exam conditions, the ideas I had gathered about a couple of days ago.

Nice quote. This is quite interesting and is a really good start, but it also looks like it could end up great or disastrous depending on how you end it and the direction you take it.

That's the worry I had as well, I'm going to finish it off now and I'll post up the end product tomorrow. Thank you for the feedback

[geeza23]

I don't know the conditions you wrote this in, if you had memorised statements, had a book in front of you, copied quotes etc (it is a brilliant piece btw),

But for your benefit, please make sure you are writing at this stage in timed conditions, or at least coming u with your OWN ideas rather than copying off somewhere else.

I may be 100% wrong!! Don't get me wrong, but I really like the piece, but could you REALLY come up with this in an exam?

Hope you don't take it the wrong way, you might have come up with this all on your own

But yeah

Nice piece

hahaha seems like ur fairly concerned for him