Practice Language Analysis - would anyone be so kind as to give me a quick mark?

[bluehorizon]

not that this is useful any more, but i'd like to say i dont think this is convoluted. the sentence lengths are fine, altho one thing i think might be detrimental is your own use of adjectives. when in a long sentence, cutting down on these, either by simply removing them or finding a verb that incorporates then, makes for easier reading but i would give this 19/20 accounting for 2 examiners, otherwise 10/10