AOS

[RobertDyd]

Hi guys,

I have my AOS speech due next week wednesday and I have already completed it but in a text per paragraph form, I was wondering if it was worth it/ not too time consuming to change or try to adapt it into a integrated response before the due date or if its just not worth it this "late".

Thanks
Rob

[jamonwindeyer]

Hi guys,

I have my AOS speech due next week wednesday and I have already completed it but in a text per paragraph form, I was wondering if it was worth it/ not too time consuming to change or try to adapt it into a integrated response before the due date or if its just not worth it this "late".

Thanks
Rob

Hey Rob! Integrated responses are a very different animal to block essays (at least, depending on the essay) - If you've not written an integrated before, and you are happy with what you've produced already, then I wouldn't bother! It is always something you can try later on

If you aren't happy with the essay or have experience with integrated tasks, that's different, but especially if it is new to you - A few days isn't a whole lot of time, and I'd hate to see you scrap something you've worked hard on, only to rush something else

[RobertDyd]

Hi,

So would it be a good idea to continue to edit my block essay and meanwhile work on an integrated form aswell?

[jamonwindeyer]

Hi,

So would it be a good idea to continue to edit my block essay and meanwhile work on an integrated form aswell?

With your assignment due in like 5 days, nah, keep your efforts focused on one of those I reckon - And in my opinion you should stick with the block essay for this submission are you happy with it?

[RobertDyd]

With your assignment due in like 5 days, nah, keep your efforts focused on one of those I reckon - And in my opinion you should stick with the block essay for this submission are you happy with it?

Yea I am happy with it, although my teacher scared me when she sent me back my draft two days ago "You have some good ideas but need to be explained in more depth" ... "You should also work on integrating your essay in order to make it more effective", is this a sign that I really need to change the form? Im kind of lost as whether she is hinting to it being bad the way it is or saying that it is good and could get more marks as a integrated response.

Rob

[elysepopplewell]

Yea I am happy with it, although my teacher scared me when she sent me back my draft two days ago "You have some good ideas but need to be explained in more depth" ... "You should also work on integrating your essay in order to make it more effective", is this a sign that I really need to change the form? Im kind of lost as whether she is hinting to it being bad the way it is or saying that it is good and could get more marks as a integrated response.

Rob

Without adjusting the form too much, you can definitely make some changes before Wednesday if it's weighing on your mind. If you're not even connecting the texts conceptually, I'd make that my first stop. Your teacher is giving you feedback and they are the marker, so I'd be taking on at least a small level of integration. Between your texts, are you exploring completely separate ideas in each or is there overlap? If there is overlap, really highlight that in your speech, draw the connections for your audience. If you don't really think both texts have much to do with each other conceptually, then I'd be trying to link them based on their form or content. So, is a motif used in both? Third person? Both poetic forms? What is it between these two texts that have similarities, even if their purpose is different?

Now, this doesn't mean revamping your whole speech at all. This is simply adding a sentence that says, "The treatment of humility is far more subtle in Roman's text than it is in Yeats oeuvre." Then you can lead right on in with whatever you like, if you want to link again, perhaps have a contextual sentence, "Roman's responsibility to the Queen restricted his textual exploration of individual desires and qualities, and instead his focus was shifted to the community as a whole. Thus..."

Without adjusting your essay enormously, this might be what your response needs to bridge the gap that your teacher sees to get you over the line this assessment. If you are comfortable with your current response, then that's perfect. But, this little approach I've talked about will be helpful for you moving into integrated essays anyway. This is one of the first steps for drawing integrated connections. Good luck

[fr123_]

I am struggling to find good belonging AOS related texts. Any suggestions?

[jamonwindeyer]

I am struggling to find good belonging AOS related texts. Any suggestions?

Hey! There's a whole list of suggestions right here hope it helps!