Mod C Essay Marking!

[dermite]

Hi There,
I have trials in about 4weeks, so if anyone can give comments on my essay, that would be appreciated!

Thanks

[jamonwindeyer]

Here is some feedback dermite! Take it in the context of the fact that I didn't have a question to go with your essay. Overall, I think you have an excellent grasp of techniques and super strong textual and contextual knowledge, but that you need to do more to conceptually develop your argument. You say what the techniques are and what is being represented, but I'm not really getting the why, exactly what is the composer trying to accomplish with their representation? How succesful is it? These flow on thoughts that take the essay further.

Also, ensure all techniques are attributed to the composer. That's super important - Characters are puppets

[dermite]

thanks heaps!

Just as a side-note, what mark range would this receive out of 20?
just curious as to how much more input is needed to make it into A range essay ..

Thanks again!!