[English] "Anna Bligh outperforms Julia Gillard" language analysis

[DNAngel]

 Susie O'Brien's complimentary opinion piece, "Anna Bligh outperforms Julia Gillard in the greatest leadership test of all" published in the Herald Sun on the 14th of January 2011, accompanied by a supplementary photograph, elucidates a current affair. O'Brien presents an issue centred on Anna Bligh's triumphant leadership as Queensland's Premier amidst the January Queensland floods. The writer adamantly argues that Bligh has proved herself as a competent and inspiring leader, more so than the incumbent Prime Minister, Julia Gillard. From the onset, the author establishes her tone as congratulatory of the Queensland Premier's efforts. However, O'Brien adopts an accusatory tone further in the piece in an attempt at coercing the Herald Sun readership, its audience, to coincide with her point of view.
 
 O'Brien begins the article with a hyperbole, "in the greatest leadership test of all", where the word "greatest" accentuates this technique. Furthermore, she instils an over-the-top connotation of this "leadership test" which creates an imposing scenario for the readers. At the same time, "more than ever" again, develops a sense of grandeur that the Queensland flood disaster entails; the hundreds of thousands of homes which have suffered extensive damage to furniture, electronics and infrastructure.
 
 O'Brien's use of inclusive language such as "we can scrutinise" and "we shouldn't be surprised" is employed throughout her editorial. Such language is incorporated into this article in an attempt to notify readers of O'Brien's own personal and emotional involvement in the Queensland floods. As a result, the audience is more inclined to harmonise with the writer's contention, as they believe that they play a part in the "leadership debate."
 
 The author evolves the debate through the use of emotional words such as, "unimaginable." This, when coupled with "crisis" heaves on the emotional heartstrings of readers, inducing despair and agony, thus, epitomising the importance and severity of the issue. Moreover, "It may be breaking our hearts at the moment, but it will not break our will." encapsulates the significance of the Queensland floods effect on "strong leaders like Anna Bligh to inspire them." By contrast, O'Brien has directly undermined Gillard's reputation. She declares that "Prime Minister Julia Gillard has been hitting the wrong notes" and "She seems unsure about what her role should be." Because of this, the reader too is "unsure" of the Prime Minister's competence in leading Australia and instils doubt within his or her mind. Such doubt impairs Gillard's future prospects of predominant popularity and above all, retaining her position as the main person introducing laws and enforcing authority.
 
 Similarly, these acute descriptions of Gillard are followed by a juxtaposition with Bligh's values. "Contrast this with Bligh. When she is calm, she seems genuinely in control, but when she lets the emotion show in public, the tears are real." This implementation of comparing two unique personas, endeavours to place Bligh on the plateau of "strong leaders." Therefore, injuring the Prime Minister's influence as a major political figure on the world map.
 
 Complementary to the article, is a photograph displaying the aforementioned leaders Anna Bligh and Julia Gillard. In this image, Bligh is placed at the forefront of the proceedings while Gillard is situated behind her in the background. This implicates that Bligh is in fact, a "strong leader" in a sense that she stands before the audience, at the centre of their attention. Whereas, the print depicts Gillard as an inferior; lingering out of the camera lenses' focus and fixed in the backdrop of the meeting.
 
 Overall, O'Brien has exercised various persuasive devices which bolsters he contention. For example, a hyperbole, inclusive  and emotive language among others that are utilised, effectively coercing the reader to presume Anna Bligh's potential as a strong and inspiring role model.

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[HERculina]

ello. im not pro at writing but i shall attempt to mark your work  :angel:

Susie O'Brien's complimentary opinion piece, "Anna Bligh outperforms Julia Gillard in the greatest leadership test of all" published in the Herald Sun on the 14th of January 2011, accompanied by a supplementary photograph, elucidates a current affair what affair?. O'Brien presents an issue centred on Anna Bligh's triumphant leadership as Queensland's Premier amidst the January Queensland floods. The writer adamantly argues that Bligh has proved herself as a competent and inspiring leader, more so than the incumbent Prime Minister, Julia Gillard. From the onset, the author establishes her tone as congratulatory (a bit wordy. wat about: establishes a congratulatory tone) of the Queensland Premier's efforts. However,  O'Brien adopts an accusatory tone further in the piece in an attempt at coercing the Herald Sun readership, its audience, audience to coincide with her point of viewthis sentence doesnt really match with the previous one. you went from congratulatory to accusatory tone :/ suggest that  the author changed her tone, "adopt" is a bit vague.
 
 O'Brien begins the article with a hyperbole, "in the greatest leadership test of all", where the word "greatest" accentuates this technique. Furthermore, she instils an over-the-top need to use a more formal wordconnotation of this "leadership test" which creates an imposing scenario for the readers. At the same time, "more than ever" again, develops a sense of grandeur that the Queensland flood disaster entails; the hundreds of thousands of homes which have suffered extensive damage to furniture, electronics and infrastructure.
 
 O'Brien's use of inclusive language such as "we can scrutinise" and "we shouldn't be surprised" is employed throughout her editorial. Such language is incorporated into this article in an attempt to notify readers of O'Brien's own personal and emotional involvement in the Queensland floods. As a result, the audience is more inclined to harmonise with the writer's contention, as they believe that they play a part in the "leadership debate." short paragraph needs more explaining
 
 The author evolves the debate i dont get wat you mean here through the use of emotional words such as, "unimaginable." dont put a quotes in your topic sentencesThis, when coupled with "crisis" heaves on the emotional heartstrings of readers, inducing despair and agony, thus, epitomising the importance and severity of the issue. < ---this is good Moreover, "It may be breaking our hearts at the moment, but it will not break our will." encapsulates the significance of the Queensland floods effect on "strong leaders like Anna Bligh to inspire them." <--- this is good too By contrast, O'Brien has directly undermined Gillard's reputation. She declares that "Prime Minister Julia Gillard has been hitting the wrong notes" and "She seems unsure about what her role should be." Because of this not specific enough , the readeraudience is a better word too is "unsure" of the Prime Minister's competence in leading Australia and instils doubt within his or her mind. Such doubt impairs Gillard's future prospects of predominant popularity and above all, retaining her position as the main person introducing laws and enforcing authority. <--- confusing ending sentence
 
 Similarly, these acute descriptions of Gillard are followed by a juxtaposition with Bligh's values. "Contrast this with Bligh. When she is calm, she seems genuinely in control, but when she lets the emotion show in public, the tears are real." shorten this quoteThis implementation of comparing two unique personas, endeavours to place Bligh on the plateau of "strong leaders." Therefore, injuring the Prime Minister's influence as a major political figure on the world map.
 
 Complementary to the article, is a photograph displaying the aforementioned leaders Anna Bligh and Julia Gillard. In this image, Bligh is placed at the forefront of the proceedings while Gillard is situated behind her in the background. This implicates that Bligh is in fact, a "strong leader" in a sense that she stands before the audience, at the centre of their attention. Whereas, the print depicts Gillard as an inferior; i like! lingering out of the camera lenses' focus and fixed in the backdrop of the meeting.
 
 Overall, O'Brien has exercised various persuasive devices which bolsters he contention. For example, a hyperbole, inclusive  and emotive language among others that are utilised, effectively coercing the reader to presume Anna Bligh's potential as a strong and inspiring role model.

Hmmmmmmm overall it was an okay essay but at times you used words that were unnecessary, making it harder for me to understand wat you was trying to say. You need to analyse the effects way more and build a stronger conclusion.
If you wanted me to rate this i would give it a 6.5/10