Throughout Jhumpa Lahiri’s Interpreter of Maladies, the idea of a relationship is stretched beyond its normal means, whereby she challenges the commonly held belief that relationships bring with them emotional harmony, instead purporting that at times they can be quite the antithesis as evidenced with many of her characters Your ideas are good, but this sentence is incredibly long-winded. Shorten it - be more concise. . Lahiri perhaps comments that there exists no paragon of relationships but instead each is carved by change, in this case often a cultural one This sentence makes no sense. . However hard one may try to remain connected, we observe through these stories that even in a relationship one can be ostracised and feel no such emotional belonging they so wish for. Yet Lahiri offers us hope in showing us that some relationships do indeed bring what they promise in the form of an emotional home. Ultimately, Lahiri’s exploration of this concept makes the reader acutely Acutely? aware that both possibilities exist when considering a relationship, one of fulfilment and the other of disharmony and dissatisfaction This last sentence contradicts, to an extent, with your opening sentence. Just clear up your contention, that's all. .
Characters in Lahiri’s short story collection are observed pursuing a relationship for a sense of belonging but even when they find themselves in one it does not fill the emotional chasm they have left themselves This sentence isn't well phrased - you could say the same thing in much more clarity. . Mr Kapasi You haven't mentioned the story title. who seems to yearn for some sort of connection is drawn into Mrs Das who he is attracted to in both a physical and emotional way. Her Instead of using this word, start with 'He observes her..' because you're referring it back to Mr Kapasi's observations, not your observations (or Lahiri's observations). “long, bare legs,” although a merely a physical characteristic, give us an initial insight into his desire to be in a proper and functioning relationship. Kapasi’s current relationship is absent of any emotional connection, instead his wife, who constantly reminds him that his “job is a sign of his failings,” becomes the starting point from which his feelings of inadequacy burgeon This last clause doesn't make sense - bad syntax. . For Mr Kapasi, Mrs Das is someone to fill this emotional void This doesn't make sense. , someone who believes that his job is “worthwhile” and “romantic". However it is here that Lahiri enforces upon us that such a relationship does not bring with it such emotional sustenance, Mr Kapasi’s initial desire for Mrs Das is fleeting, evaporating when she reveals to him her infidelity, a “confession that depressed him.” Although in Mrs Das Mr Kapasi sees a relationship that would “in its own way fulfil his dream,” it is later revealed to him that is not but a facade, pretending to bring with it emotional peace This is a good point, but relate it more to the words of the prompt. VCE English, unfortunately, is a bit of a tick-the-boxes exercise. If you mention the words of the prompt here (particularly difficulty and fulfilment), you'll earn more marks for 'answering the question'. . It is in a similar vein where we observe Miranda, in Sexy, wishing to discard her sense of loneliness in committing to a relationship with Dev. She is wooed by his ability to “know what it it’s like to be lonely” and tempted initially by a physical attraction. However in this instance Lahiri, perhaps reveals the positive side to the breakdown of Miranda’s relationship with Dev, it transforms her into a more mature character, one that understands that a relationship means more than just being “sexy.” Lahiri, quite explicitly, uses the sky to mirror her development whereby it moves to being “clear blue.” In a sense, Lahiri contends This isn't the right word to use in this context. that by escaping this relationship, Miranda is finding emotional stability and rising above her cravings for attention. It is through these two instances where Lahiri reveals that relationships may not provide emotional contentment, even on such a pursuit.
Whilst Lahiri endeavours to make the reader aware that perhaps relationships do not always bring with them a sense of belonging, she also explores the ways in which relationships can have a positive effect This is drifting away from the words of the prompt. What is this 'positive effect'? Is this your definition of 'fulfilment'? If it is, you need to be more specific. . Mr Pirzada who arrives in America from the Indian diaspora, is observed experiencing what Lahiri perhaps presents to the reader as the ideal relationship. This communion between Lilia’s family and Mr Pirzada is reflective of this notion that relationships can indeed harbour emotional support along with a sense of belonging Further explain this - is a sense of belonging fulfilling? Why? . Both Lilia’s family and Mr Pirzada are seen as one entity, “a single person, sharing a single meal, a single body a single silence and a single fear.” Work on your quoting technique, this quote seems to have been tagged onto the end of the sentence only. It doesn't 'weave' into your essay very well. For Mr Pirzada it becomes both his physical and emotional home, even the food he eats is reminiscent of his home. Lahiri throughout nearly all her stories uses food as a device for connection and in this instance both bond over food, the sharing of wish perhaps symbolizes the true extent of a relationship that proves that not all relationships bring difficulties but bring with them a deep sense of connection. It is also the relationship Lilia and Mr Pirzada that explores these positive effects. The narrative perspective from which this story is told from reveals to the audience the gradual maturation of Lilia who progresses from a child who is simply an “observer” to one who critically thinks about the “unruly sweltering world” to which Mr Pirzada is connected to. Though Mr Pirzada becomes dislocated from his family in Dacca he finds emotional solace in his new family Wrong - they're not his new family. . Similarly Lahiri uses Bibi Haldar’s situation to highlight the sense of belonging 'Sense of belonging' wasn't mentioned in the prompt, yet you talk a lot about it. It's not a context piece! There are many other things you can suggest about the relationships. that may arise from a community atmosphere. Although it is revealed to the audience that these concerns may not be genuine – “we were glad we could go home in the night, forgetting about her worries “ – the communal relationship that Bibi shares with the rest of the women offers an emotions stability, something that perhaps By using the word 'perhaps' you make yourself seem unsure about your own stance. Avoid words like this so you can appear to have more authority and control in your expression. Lahiri comments is something a good relationship can bring This line doesn't make any sense. . Through these instances we can observe Lahiri also contending that some relationships or positive.
As Lahiri explores the differing situations between both the positive and negative aspects of a relationship, she also use instances where one lacks a relationships to highlight why they may be so important. In the Real Durwan, Boori-ma’s demarcation is forced by the partition of 1947 which results in her living in poverty with an absence of any meaningful relationships. Boori-ma’s It is Boori Ma, not Boori-ma. character lives in the past, reminiscing over “such comforts one could never dream,” and it is these reflections on what may have been a past life that suggest she is using them to fill a void left years of isolation. Despite her appearing stubborn Lahiri implicitly reminds us of her desperation to maintain connected to her previous life. She perhaps Again, avoid the use of this word. “constructs tales as a way of mourning for the loss of her family”. Her lack of relationships in the apartment block, feed this ostracism she experiences. It is perhaps in moments such as these where we can focus upon what a relationship may bring. To Boori-ma a relationship would perhaps bring feelings of connectedness and remove levels of isolation. Mrs Sen finds herself in a similar state, her stubborn will to revolt against any inculcation of American culture meaning she has a relationship only with her husband. She “barricades herself” from the American culture, the “catastrophic mass” protecting her from assimilation. In both Boori-ma’s and Mrs Sen’s instances Good to see you're comparing the stories. , their loneliness is a product of their reluctance to compromise on their primary cultures, something that leaves them having an absence of relationships which is seen as a detriment to them. Lahiri through these two situations discusses what life may be without relationships.
Relationships, as Lahiri ultimately comments consume us all one way or the other. We are constantly interacting with those we surround our selves by The correct preposition to use here is 'with'. but Lahiri makes us aware that these interactions can bring with them both positive and negative aspects; they can cause the very emotional instability they promise to fix Confusing. . For many character in Lahiri’s stories, the pursuit of securing a relationships that fulfils a sense of belonging is what drives them, however unfortunately this path desire may remain unquenched and the goal of contentment, a utopian desire.
A good effort. Whilst reading this, I found that your biggest issue would have to be the clarity and coherence of your piece. I had to read quite a few sentences two or three times - this shouldn't have to happen, especially when essays are supposed to flow with ease. Some sentences were confusing in meaning. Your syntax also needs some work as well - some of your sentences weren't structured in the most effective way. You also seem to use the word 'perhaps' plenty of times. Avoid this, and other 'probable' words like this, because it undermines your authority and control as a writer. Be assured with everything you write! Also, your opening statement contradicts, to a degree, with the rest of your essay. Clear up your contention. And finally, it won't hurt to refer more to the words of the prompt!
Final score: 23/30.
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