VCAA Assessors report 2011 - Exam essays.

[Hutchoo]

I was wondering what mark (out of 20) the "Atonement" essay would receive?
VCAA say the person who wrote that essay met the criteria at a high level, but I'm wondering, how 'high'?

It's student example number 3. Page 6.


Hopefully someone replies to this post!

[EvangelionZeta]

I've give it maybe a 16-17 or so.  The first half is quite good, but then the second half lacks focus and doesn't really seem to engage with anything meaningful in terms of textual interpretation.  That, and the writing style is quite vapid.

[Hutchoo]

I've give it maybe a 16-17 or so.  The first half is quite good, but then the second half lacks focus and doesn't really seem to engage with anything meaningful in terms of textual interpretation.  That, and the writing style is quite vapid.

I agree. I honestly didn't think it was 20/20 standard, but my teacher thinks otherwise.

[charmanderp]

That, and the writing style is quite vapid.

That seems to be the case with quite a few of the 'high-scoring responses' published in VCAA Assessment Reports, across all subjects. Any idea why?

[EvangelionZeta]

That, and the writing style is quite vapid.

That seems to be the case with quite a few of the 'high-scoring responses' published in VCAA Assessment Reports, across all subjects. Any idea why?

Anything that is too stylistically sophisticated is going to scare the average student away, basically.  Imagine how most kids in the state are going to feel if you show them an essay that talks about "ideological apotheoses" and "the zenith and triumph of the human condition" consistently, and then tell them that this is a model essay written by somebody their age.

[VivaTequila]

I've give it maybe a 16-17 or so.

I've give it maybe a 16-17 or so.

Well well, Vincent.

[thushan]

That, and the writing style is quite vapid.

That seems to be the case with quite a few of the 'high-scoring responses' published in VCAA Assessment Reports, across all subjects. Any idea why?

Anything that is too stylistically sophisticated is going to scare the average student away, basically.  Imagine how most kids in the state are going to feel if you show them an essay that talks about "ideological apotheoses" and "the zenith and triumph of the human condition" consistently, and then tell them that this is a model essay written by somebody their age.

In all seriousness, that's what scared me away from Lit. I was quite the stylistically vapid writer myself. My writing style was like "Topic sentence. Logical pathway. Examples and commentary. Link." No element of stylistic sophistication. But I guess in English Language they didn't really care about stylistics that much, so long as what was said was clear; they looked more at your arguments and the logic.

And when you're competing against the likes of brightsky, who, when he was Year 10, proceeded to shred one of my essays to pieces the week before my exam in giving me feedback, there's a reason I did not dare touch Lit.

[EvangelionZeta]

I've give it maybe a 16-17 or so.

I've give it maybe a 16-17 or so.

Well well, Vincent.

shhhh...I can write grammatically correct sentences!  Maybe. 

[EvangelionZeta]

I've give it maybe a 16-17 or so.

I've give it maybe a 16-17 or so.

Well well, Vincent.

Also without meaning to sound confrontational, remind me why you know who I am :p

[VivaTequila]

I've give it maybe a 16-17 or so.

I've give it maybe a 16-17 or so.

Well well, Vincent.

Also without meaning to sound confrontational, remind me why you know who I am :p

your shadow

[bluehorizon]

what do you think the other very high essays (hamlet and emma) would have got out of 20?

[bluehorizon]

anyone help me here? haha. anyway i thought the hamlet essay>emma response, perhaps one mark difference? any feedback?