Holy shit. Got tingles reading draft number two. Very manipulative - I love it. The start is very gripping however I'd be careful with opening with lines that are so contradictory to your contention. It certainly 'grabbed' you but I'm not sure it was fully utilised. Everyone will think you're against asylum seekers and doign a huge flip more obviously might be more effective. Currently, I can see people being confused. But wow, much improvement. I'm impressed.
TY alot....I'm glad I have improved some...
Orals would be probably be the easiest of English for me
COMPARATIVELY speaking (stressing this)...
'Cause I'm a person who needs time - lots of time so that better ideas can come to my head...
Kinda sad when I think about...I reckon I have already spent
AT LEAST 15 hours on this darn speech...but I guess its good just to go at the best I can