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Re: Revolutions Support Thread 2013
« Reply #45 on: April 10, 2013, 09:22:25 am »
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Don't mention a historian's school of thought, you don't even have to mention their overall view on things. Historians views' are not a big thing at all, just mention what they thought about the event in question, doc ect. and provide back up quote- I used them mainly as a means of structuring my essay.

Cort, I don't really know why you're thinking about essays this time in the year, unless you've already reached your second revolution..! Don't worry about them yet :-) Unless you're talking about the ten markers.
For the ten marker, just provide a short contextualiser outlining your points and then jump right in. If you are actually talking about essays, outline the question socially, economically and politically.

Here is a ten marker and an essay from last year to model structure, these were done towards the end of the year so should be pretty accurate..
 
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The Extent To Which Power Was Transferred to an Oppressed proletariat


Notwithstanding a series of social reforms which increased proletarian opportunities for social mobility, in general, power was not transferred to an oppressed proletariat within the new regime. Politically, the political autonomy of the proletariat was actually suppressed with power progressively centralised within a single party dictatorship which did not necessarily represent the interests of the proletariat. Economically, within War Communism, the proletariat did not exercise autonomy within industry. Socially, the urban working class remained the underclass of Russian society.

Politically, despite Lenin’s promise of a ‘democratic dictatorship of the proletariat’, that is, a state in which sovereign political power was vested within the urban working class and which represented the interests of the proletariat, in his Letters From Afar in March 1917, in reality, both the democratic and insurrectionary influence of the proletariat was suppressed with power centralised within a single party state. The dissolution of the Constituent Assembly on 18 January 1918 marked the subversion of firstly, the democratic means by which the proletariat could determine the government and additionally, demonstrated that political power had not been transferred to the proletariat as the proletariat had never desired a single party dictatorship, as evident in the Kronstadt Manifesto on 1 March 1921 which demanded an end to the single party state. Furthermore, though Lenin maintained that the urban workers received representation within the Soviets, in reality, the autonomy of the Soviets had been suppressed as early as 1917 with a decree on 17 November 1917 allowing Sovnarkom to decree legally binding decrees without soviet approval, rival political factions expelled such as the Right SRs and Mensheviks on 14 June 1918 and the fact that only 68 out of Sovnarkom’s 480 decrees in 1918 had been sanctioned by the Soviet Central Committee demonstrating that ‘All power to the Soviets’ never truly actualized. Nor did the proletariat necessarily exercise political power through insurrection with the 60 000 Red Army troops sent to the Kronstadt Naval Base on 7 March 1921 to suppress the sailors’ demands for political reforms such as the release of leftist political prisoners and re-elections to the Soviets demonstrating that even the ‘reddest of the red’ could not influence the government in the new society. Finally, the emergence of the Workers’ Opposition internal to the Bolshevik Party in March 1921 which sought to reassert representation of worker interests, and its subsequent suppression in the Decree on Party Unity in March 1921, demonstrated that the Bolshevik Party did not even necessarily represent the interests of the proletariat. Furthermore, the Decree On Party Unity, in its banning of rival political parties, institutionalized the single party state and therefore officially ended all means by which the proletariat could exercise political power with the decree itself a demonstration of the proletariat’s lack of political power as it conflicted absolutely with their opposition to a totalitarian regime.

Politically also, the expansion of state forces due to the Civil War between 1918-1920 meant that the proletariat were perpetually subordinated under oppressive state institutions. The extraordinary powers of the Cheka for example, created on 7 December 1917, such as the right to shoot citizens without trial granted within the Socialist Fatherland Is In Danger Decree on 21 February 1917 and the right to establish concentration camps in the Decree On Red Terror on 5 September 1917 allowed the Bolshevik Secret Police to legally impinge on the rights of the proletariat.

Economically, despite the Decree On Worker’s Control in October 1917 which allowed ‘Workers’ Commitees’ to control factories, War Communism between 1928-1921 effectively ended the ability of the proletariat to exercise economic autonomy. Policies such as the Decree on Nationalisation on 28 June 1918 and the Decree Banning All Private Trade on 21 November 1918 placed large enterprise under central government control whilst industrial conscription from May 1918 and the militarization of factories by 1920 ended the urban working class’ ability to control industry. Furthermore, the banning of trade unions by 1920 deprived the proletariat of the ability to negotiate for high wages with strikes in Petrograd and Moscow in February 1921 having resulted in martial law declared. The dire economic conditions in which the proletariat languished during War Communism, with wages in 1920 buying only 1/50 of what they brought in 1913, demonstrating that economic power had not been transferred to the proletariat. Though the New Economic Policy implemented in March 1921, in its reintroduction of capitalist principles such as public markets and the ending of militarized factories marked a return to economic stability with wages doubling between 1921 and 1924, the proletariat still did not necessarily exercise control over industry with the state controlling 85% of enterprise.

Socially, the proletariat remained the underclass of Russian society with wealth concentrated within the NEP and the high ranks of the Bolshevik Party, the apparatchiks. However, it should be noted that the Bolshevik reform of the education system with the Decree on Schools in November 1917 providing free and secular education, provided for increased opportunities for social mobility.

Yet, in general, power was not transferred to an oppressed proletariat. Politically, both the democratic and insurrection means by which the proletariat influenced the government was suppressed, the state did not necessarily represent the interests of the urban workers and the proletariat was subordinated under oppressive state institutions. Economically, the state remained in control of industry. Socially, the urban working class largely remained the underclass of Russian society.

(10 Marker)
The Parlements


The Parlements contributed to a revolutionary situation by eroding the legitimacy of the King’s absolutism, instigating the argument for and ultimately catalyzing political representation within the Estates General, catalyzing dissent against the monarchy from the urban workers and instigating Third Estate demands for political representation. Firstly, with the King’s having already been compromised by the Assembly of Notable’s refusal to accept Calonne’s taxation reforms by 25 May 1787, the Paris Parlement further eroded the King’s absolutism by first, refusing to pass Brienne’s fiscal reforms on 2 July 1787 and additionally, by rendering the King’s absolute power unconstitutional in the rejection of the Lit de Justices on 6 July 1787, 17 November 1787 and 8 May 1788, the Royal Session on 19 November 1787 and by placing the King under the rule of law within the decreeing of the Fundamental Laws of the Kingdom on 3 May 1788, whose description of ‘freedom of arbitrary arrest’ was an obvious condemnation of the King’s letter de cachet which had been used to exile three magistrates of the Parlement on 19 November 1787. Secondly, the Parlements furthered the argument instigated by the Notables for political representation for the nation by restating that only the nation, represented within an elected estates-general had the right to authorize taxation reform. This also inadvertently undermined the king’s absolutism once more, by suggesting that political legitimacy was rooted in popular sovereignty. Furthermore, not only did the Parlements mere argue for political representation, they ultimately catalyzed it as their refusal to pass Brienne’s taxation reforms on 2 July 1787 deprived the King of means of addressing the 112 million livre deficit that had existed since 1776 resulting which by August 1788 resulted in only 400 000 livres remaining in the French treasury which forced the King to convoke the Estates-General, and therefore, political representation on 8 August 1788. Fourth, the Parlements also catalyzed insurrection from the urban working class as their publication of remonstrances between 1787-1788 and their creation of a political issue which pertained to the entire third estate within the argument that only those who paid taxes had the right to authorize them, an obvious reference to the Third Estate who paid taxes such as the Gabelle, the Vingtieme and the Taille, created a state of political consciousness among the urban workers, allowing them to respond militantly towards political events as evident at the Day of Tiles. Finally, the Parlements ultimately fuelled the Third Estate’s demands for political representation due to their statement on 25 September 1788 that the Estates-General should be convoked as it had been in 1614 with distinctions between estates, which catalyzed demands in the Cahiers in January 1789 for voting by head.
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Re: Revolutions Support Thread 2013
« Reply #46 on: April 13, 2013, 12:28:02 am »
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I have it in two days and our teacher has not finished teaching us the outcome.

Haha, I know exactly what you mean. My teacher didn't finish America AOS1 in time for the SAC, so we ended up doing the SAC on like 3/4 of the AOS and then finishing everything from the Coercive Acts afterwards, which means we're delayed for AOS2...hmm

Btw, does anyone have any experience with the SSRC essay booklet for Russia? I've purchased it, but I'm not studying Russia yet and I don't really know what quality they are and consequently how useful they will be to use for essays..
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Re: Revolutions Support Thread 2013
« Reply #47 on: April 13, 2013, 11:58:46 am »
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Haha, I know exactly what you mean. My teacher didn't finish America AOS1 in time for the SAC, so we ended up doing the SAC on like 3/4 of the AOS and then finishing everything from the Coercive Acts afterwards, which means we're delayed for AOS2...hmm

Btw, does anyone have any experience with the SSRC essay booklet for Russia? I've purchased it, but I'm not studying Russia yet and I don't really know what quality they are and consequently how useful they will be to use for essays..


We haven't gotten to the October Revolution yet, which was supposed to be part of our SAC. I think we might have another SAC then.
I don't know about the booklet but it sounds pretty complicated having read the blurb.
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Re: Revolutions Support Thread 2013
« Reply #48 on: April 15, 2013, 05:05:29 pm »
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Just got my SAC result. So bad.
Does anyone have any tips to bounce back for the next assessment?
Also, would I still be able to get a 40+? :(
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Re: Revolutions Support Thread 2013
« Reply #49 on: April 15, 2013, 08:11:36 pm »
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Just got my SAC result. So bad.
Does anyone have any tips to bounce back for the next assessment?
Also, would I still be able to get a 40+? :(

Hey, don't feel too bad! This is your first SAC and there are three to go!
(1) The thing that matters at this stage is your ranking, not just your raw mark.
(2) The fact that your teacher is marking harshly is a good sign - you're being prepared well for the exam!
(3) Take your teacher's comments to heart. Is it a problem with the evidence you're using? Historiography? Chronology? Writing? Perhaps writing under timed conditions? Going over this will not only be helpful for writing your next SAC but will be crucial come exam time.
(4) Focus on the next area of study and apply the writing and exam techniques you've learnt.

Don't be afraid to ask your teacher exactly what went wrong and work on that!

Best of luck, keep working at it and if you do that it's definitely still possible for a 40+ :)
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Re: Revolutions Support Thread 2013
« Reply #50 on: April 15, 2013, 08:32:53 pm »
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Hey, don't feel too bad! This is your first SAC and there are three to go!
(1) The thing that matters at this stage is your ranking, not just your raw mark.
(2) The fact that your teacher is marking harshly is a good sign - you're being prepared well for the exam!
(3) Take your teacher's comments to heart. Is it a problem with the evidence you're using? Historiography? Chronology? Writing? Perhaps writing under timed conditions? Going over this will not only be helpful for writing your next SAC but will be crucial come exam time.
(4) Focus on the next area of study and apply the writing and exam techniques you've learnt.

Don't be afraid to ask your teacher exactly what went wrong and work on that!

Best of luck, keep working at it and if you do that it's definitely still possible for a 40+ :)

Thanks for your reply.  I appreciate it, I feel like I need a history buddy.

It's good to know that in my cohort most of us did poorly but then again we weren't at all well prepared and we went on a siege, well complained to the head of VCE about our teacher's incompetency bearing resemblance to that of Tsar Nicholas.
Yeah, the questions are good and I should have taken the initiative to practise but I guess I've been feeling less motivated because everything is just not falling into place -- a challenge I had not perceived.

I got full marks on some sections and got a few comments saying "Excellent" and "Good stats", which is a good sign, I guess. But I lost most 4 marks on some of the extended response because I didn't include respective historians and did not evaluate the document as was required. The evaluation of document I am not very well trained at so I'll have to redo that. I'm hoping to redo the sac again and post it here for feedback. In fact, I'll get to that right now.

Also, I'm just so angry, improvement is a beast of a challenge.
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Re: Revolutions Support Thread 2013
« Reply #51 on: April 15, 2013, 09:57:46 pm »
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As promised, here are one of the questions that I had trouble with.

"What destroyed tsardom was the length of the war. A short war, even if unsuccessful, might have been bearable, as Russia's defeat by Japan 12 years earlier had shown. But the cumulative effect of a long drawn-out struggle proved too destructive to be borne. Deaths and casualties by the million, soaring inflation a dislocated communications system, hunger and deprivation, all presided over by a serious of increasingly bewildered and ineffectual ministries under an incompetent Tsar...(caused) a loss of morale and a sense of hopelessness that totally undermined the once potent myth of the Tsar's God given authority. By 1917, the tsarist system had forfeited all claims to the loyalty of the Russian people." (p.74)

Lynch, Michael, Reaction and Revolutions: Russia 1810-1924, London: Hodder & Stoughton, 1992

Evaluate the usefulness of this extract in providing a reliable view of the reasons why Nicholas II was forced to abdicate. In your response refer to different views of the revolution. (10 marks)

I received 6 marks for it and this was my response.

This extract details Tsar Nicholas' inability to rule as a leader and Tsar. He had a strong will and believed himself to be the redeemer of the Russian people. The effects of the war such as the "deaths and casualties" and "roaring inflation" was due to his inefficiency to meet the needs of the Russian people. His choice to leave the country and fight at the front was seen by Russia as an act of betrayal and furthered the divide in Bloody Sunday in 1905.

This then left Alexandra to govern Russia but because she was German, the Russian people felt disconnected to her. It then also alienated with Alexandra's connection with Rasputin, a self proclaimed mystic.This influenced the Russian people to think that she was a German spy and was blamed to be one of the causes of Russia's defeat.

Figes compares this to the tsarist state: "Alexandra's sexual corruption became a kind of metaphor for the diseased condition of the tsarist state." Nicholas II was forced to abdicate because of his failure as a leader and his decision to replace Grand Duke Nikolai as Commander. This resulted in the Russian people blaming him and Alexandra for Russia's many defeats.


Teacher's comments: Highlight German, comment: not the only reason. General comment: What is a different view of the rev? Historian? Is it a reliable + to what extent?

Here is my reworked version:
I've identified the main points of my argument as:
- Tsar's inability and incompetency to rule as a leader
- Social and economic impact of the war
- His decision to go to the front and fight and Russia's many losses
- Leaving his wife to internal affairs, Rasputin's ministerial leapfrogging and dismissal of people

Weaknesses as a source - doesn't discuss Nicholas strength of will and his effect on uplifting the morales of the men when he fronted.

The extract criticises the Tsar's competency to rule as an autocratic figure and head of the Russian people. Many times he is condemned by his poor choices for having entered the war and the social and economic outcomes it produced for his people such as the "death and casualties" and "roaring inflation". Yet, it is his decision to replace the more experienced and trained Grand Duke Nikolai that was viewed as a sign of betrayal to his duty to the Russian people.

It is also the mere fact that war costs were 4.7 times the total government expenditure in the last peacetime year of 1913 which was borrowed from allied counties and allowed the government to print more money. However, this only resulted in inflation and the high rise of prices despite the increase of wage. To the Russian people, this spelt one of the reasons for their supporting of revolutionary ideas which led them to believe in Lenin's idea of "Peace, Bread and Land", a promise believed by the proletariat who were trapped in poor working conditions and low wages and for some, unemployment.

Another mistake committed by the Tsar was aligning the Tsarina with Tsarist duties despite her inexperience and failure to understand the extent of the oncoming revolution claiming that people shout and scream on the street  to create "excitement" and were "hooligans". Alexandra's German ancestry and her close relationship with the distrusted Russian mystic, Rasputin which spiralled rumours about her harbouring sexual feelings for him and her supposed allies with the Germans, therefore causing for the defeat of Russia. Figes summarises Alexandra's sexual corruption as a "metaphor for the diseased condition of the tsarist state", which became evident in her trust to Rasputin for his "ministerial leapfrogging" and issuing his friends positions of power in the Duma.

However, this extract does not discuss Nicholas' strength of will and his effect on uplifting morales of the men whom he fronted and the waning support of the proletariat who held the Tsar in such high regard. According to Fitzpatrick, the result of the Tsar's abdication was not a "result of military defeat...but the...collapse of public support in government", arguing that it is through the withdrawal of public support in the autocracy which led to the destruciton of the government and the Tsar's autocracy.


I just did it now and I know it's a little too long but I think it sounds better than before. Of course, criticisms for improvements are welcome. Thanks!
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Re: Revolutions Support Thread 2013
« Reply #52 on: April 15, 2013, 10:16:11 pm »
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As promised, here are one of the questions that I had trouble with.

"What destroyed tsardom was the length of the war. A short war, even if unsuccessful, might have been bearable, as Russia's defeat by Japan 12 years earlier had shown. But the cumulative effect of a long drawn-out struggle proved too destructive to be borne. Deaths and casualties by the million, soaring inflation a dislocated communications system, hunger and deprivation, all presided over by a serious of increasingly bewildered and ineffectual ministries under an incompetent Tsar...(caused) a loss of morale and a sense of hopelessness that totally undermined the once potent myth of the Tsar's God given authority. By 1917, the tsarist system had forfeited all claims to the loyalty of the Russian people." (p.74)

Lynch, Michael, Reaction and Revolutions: Russia 1810-1924, London: Hodder & Stoughton, 1992

Evaluate the usefulness of this extract in providing a reliable view of the reasons why Nicholas II was forced to abdicate. In your response refer to different views of the revolution. (10 marks)

I received 6 marks for it and this was my response.

This extract details Tsar Nicholas' inability to rule as a leader and Tsar. He had a strong will and believed himself to be the redeemer of the Russian people. The effects of the war such as the "deaths and casualties" and "roaring inflation" was due to his inefficiency to meet the needs of the Russian people. His choice to leave the country and fight at the front was seen by Russia as an act of betrayal and furthered the divide in Bloody Sunday in 1905.

This then left Alexandra to govern Russia but because she was German, the Russian people felt disconnected to her. It then also alienated with Alexandra's connection with Rasputin, a self proclaimed mystic.This influenced the Russian people to think that she was a German spy and was blamed to be one of the causes of Russia's defeat.

Figes compares this to the tsarist state: "Alexandra's sexual corruption became a kind of metaphor for the diseased condition of the tsarist state." Nicholas II was forced to abdicate because of his failure as a leader and his decision to replace Grand Duke Nikolai as Commander. This resulted in the Russian people blaming him and Alexandra for Russia's many defeats.


Teacher's comments: Highlight German, comment: not the only reason. General comment: What is a different view of the rev? Historian? Is it a reliable + to what extent?

Here is my reworked version:
I've identified the main points of my argument as:
- Tsar's inability and incompetency to rule as a leader
- Social and economic impact of the war
- His decision to go to the front and fight and Russia's many losses
- Leaving his wife to internal affairs, Rasputin's ministerial leapfrogging and dismissal of people

Weaknesses as a source - doesn't discuss Nicholas strength of will and his effect on uplifting the morales of the men when he fronted.

The extract criticises the Tsar's competency to rule as an autocratic figure and head of the Russian people. Many times he is condemned by his poor choices for having entered the war and the social and economic outcomes it produced for his people such as the "death and casualties" and "roaring inflation". Yet, it is his decision to replace the more experienced and trained Grand Duke Nikolai that was viewed as a sign of betrayal to his duty to the Russian people.

It is also the mere fact that war costs were 4.7 times the total government expenditure in the last peacetime year of 1913 which was borrowed from allied counties and allowed the government to print more money. However, this only resulted in inflation and the high rise of prices despite the increase of wage. To the Russian people, this spelt one of the reasons for their supporting of revolutionary ideas which led them to believe in Lenin's idea of "Peace, Bread and Land", a promise believed by the proletariat who were trapped in poor working conditions and low wages and for some, unemployment.

Another mistake committed by the Tsar was aligning the Tsarina with Tsarist duties despite her inexperience and failure to understand the extent of the oncoming revolution claiming that people shout and scream on the street  to create "excitement" and were "hooligans". Alexandra's German ancestry and her close relationship with the distrusted Russian mystic, Rasputin which spiralled rumours about her harbouring sexual feelings for him and her supposed allies with the Germans, therefore causing for the defeat of Russia. Figes summarises Alexandra's sexual corruption as a "metaphor for the diseased condition of the tsarist state", which became evident in her trust to Rasputin for his "ministerial leapfrogging" and issuing his friends positions of power in the Duma.

However, this extract does not discuss Nicholas' strength of will and his effect on uplifting morales of the men whom he fronted and the waning support of the proletariat who held the Tsar in such high regard. According to Fitzpatrick, the result of the Tsar's abdication was not a "result of military defeat...but the...collapse of public support in government", arguing that it is through the withdrawal of public support in the autocracy which led to the destruciton of the government and the Tsar's autocracy.


I just did it now and I know it's a little too long but I think it sounds better than before. Of course, criticisms for improvements are welcome. Thanks!

Hello jeanweasley,
I am legitimately too tired to read much but from what I can see, you could definitely benefit from chucking in some cold hard stats- you definitely have some lovely 'cause and effect' but it's very 'discussion'-esque rather than bam bam bam! Sorry, I am in the worst state, that probably didn't make sense. Try and make points succinct and effective, and this is best achieved with pithy explanation and backup quotes/ states (examiners find them super impressive!). i.e Rather than explaning all the stuff about sexual whatnot, I preferred to just say something about political incompetency and provide a stat of the number of prime ministers appointed and dismissed during her rule.
Does that make sense?
Here's a 'perfected' essay on vaguely the same topic I wrote near the end of last year- the points are effectively all you could write about the war :-)
Also, big heads up, I would actually kind of ignore your teacher and not emphasize German ancestry or Rasputin or any other that, every kid in the state falls back on it and it's a bit airy fairy and when you think about it, it certainly didn't bring down an entire Tsardom (advice form my revs teacher anyway but ignore it if you fancy).

ESSAY

The war, entered into by Russia on 1 August 1914, fuelled both the February Revolution of 1917 and the October Revolution of 1917.

In regards to the February Revolution, historians are united in the belief that the war was instrumental in effecting the tsar’s abdication on 2 March 1917 with Christopher Read’s belief that ‘It was Russia’s disastrous performance in WWI that brought about the final destruction of power,’ reflecting Steve Smith’s belief that ‘the autocracy collapsed because of First World War.’ Firstly, Orlando Figes emphasizes the war’s deterioration of the economy in instigating popular insurrection against the tsarist regime, stating ‘Large industrial strikes grew as workers came to realize that the only way to end their economic plight was to end the war and change the government.’ The War’s pressure on Russia’s transport system due to mobilization left 575 train stations incapable of running freight and in turn good shortages in which Petrograd received only 1/3 of its food supplies, inflation in which food prices quadrupled between 1914 and 1916 and therefore, 90 000 women striking on International Women’s Day on 23 February 1917 which by 25 February 1917 had grown to a crowd of 250 000, paralyzing the economy and placing pressure on the tsar for reform. In contrast, Steve Smith emphasized the political consequence of war, namely the ‘collapse of public confidence in the government’ as the Tsar’s decision to lead the Russian armies on the 22 August 1915 left the governance of Russian in the hands of the tsarina, whose political incompetence was evident in the 4 different prime ministers appointed during 1915. The war therefore, created disillusionment with the tsarist regime even from its former supports with 12 members of the duma, on 27 February 1917 constituting itself as the Provisional Committee, which on 28 February 1918 constituted itself as the Provisional Government in direct challenge to the legitimacy of the tsar. Similarly, among the aristocracy, the Council of Ministers resigned and the Stavka, in 28 February 1918, recommended abdication. Lastly, the war lead also to loss of support for the tsarist regime among the military as the Tsar’s decision to lead the Russian armies on 22 August 1915 left him personally accountable for the 6.5 million casualties by 1916, leading to mutinies such as the defection of 150 000 members of the Petrograd Garrison to the popular movement on 26 February 1917 and troops preventing the tsar from reaching Petrograd on 28 February 1917, which deprived the tsar of means of quelling the anarchy in Petrograd. Steve Smith states, ‘Deprived from the support of the army, the tsarist regime lasted less than 12 days.’ In its catalyzing of widespread revolt against the tsarist regime, the war was directly instrumental in effecting the Tsar’s abdication on 2 March 1917.
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Re: Revolutions Support Thread 2013
« Reply #53 on: April 16, 2013, 02:23:47 pm »
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Okay. I had trouble understanding the question. It was pretty much asking the events that led to Nicholas' abdication and the Feb Rev.

Here's another attempt. I'm reworking another answer for this right now but you can critique this for now.

Lynch reasons that it was the “long drawn out” war and the Tsar’s incompetency to rule that led to his abdication following the February Revolution in 1917. The war had 15,000,000 peasants conscripted, horses taken to the front and the trains were all directed towards the front which left no movement of resources. This resulted in the food and economic supplies slashed and by 1916, Moscow and Petrograd were receiving barely a third of fuel and food supplies.

Russia’s involvement in the war cost its people, primarily the proletariat deprived of food and fuel supplies. This “disastrous performance” as argued by Christopher Reed caused for the “final destruction of power” of Russia’s autocracy.  It is also the primitive nature of Russia’s military caused for their defeats with only 4.6 million rifles and soldiers instructed to wait for others to fall and take their guns. Training and outdated tactics as well as the Tsar’s decision to replace the Chief Commander and Russia’s defeat echoed Russia’s loss in the Russo-Japanese War in 1905. The Battle of Tannenburg in 28 August 1914, 170, 000 soldiers was killed and by 16 September of 1914 in the Battle of Masuarian Lakes, 60, 000 soldiers were killed.

Figes believes that Nicholas’ “willingness to rule” despite his inability and inexperience were one of the reasons for the destruction of his autocracy and the stemming for his abdication in March 1917. Nicholas was unable to respond to the crises at the time which included food and fuel shortages with Moscow only receiving 50% of daily flour and with Petrograd only 20%. By Dec 1916, 73 factories stopped operating which was the result of skilled workers being sent to the front and Russia’s labour force being depleted.


Teacher Feedback: Minimise references to war. First paragraph is excellent. You're on the right track.
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« Reply #54 on: April 16, 2013, 07:12:14 pm »
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Here's my latest attempt:

Lynch reasons that it was the “long drawn out” war and the Tsar’s incompetency to rule that led to his abdication following the February Revolution in 1917. The war had 15 million peasants conscripted, horses taken and trains directed to the front which left no movement of resources. This resulted in food and fuel shortages, provoking strikes and protests. By 1916, Moscow and Petrograd were receiving barely a third of fuel and food supplies and bakeries had to stop production or completely close down, which intensified in the winter months, causing famine in the cities. It was also the primitive tactics encouraged by the Minister of War by fighting the Germans in hand to hand combat and waiting until others were dead so that they could obtain their rifles that contributed to Russia's military defeats. The replacement of the Chief Commander and Russia's many losses echoed Russia's loss in the Russo-Japanese War in 1904.

This extract is partially useful but it does not talk about the withdrawal of public support of the Tsar and his autocracy. Due to the failed promises in October Manifesto and Russia's military defeats in the war, the public support for the Tsar waned and support transferred to revolutionary ideas that focused on defeating the autocracy and letting the people have power in their government. Smith views the February Revolution as a “result of the collapse of public support in the government” whilst Figes argues that it is the “rigid and unwieldy” structure of Tsarism that doomed Russia and ended the 300 rule of the Romanov dynasty.
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Re: Revolutions Support Thread 2013
« Reply #55 on: April 17, 2013, 10:36:45 am »
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Here's my reworking of another question. I got 2 out of 4 marks for the original answer. Feedback needed; here I tried to signpost and I included historian's quotes, most borrowed from the notes I perused here on ATARnotes.

2) Name and explain two situations of rising and unmet class expectations that were faced by the people of Russia by late 1905.
The Russo-Japanese War was believed to be a “short, victorious war” but inevitably, people were disappointed by their defeat as it was were promised that they would win and it would bring Russia good fortune. Another is October Manifesto which was Tsar Nicholas’ promise after the event of Bloody Sunday. His promises became refuted by his reinstating of his Fundamental Laws and this challenged his promise in sharing his powers between the Duma and himself. Not until 1906.
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What does this question mean?
It asks: What two situations/events happened by late 1905 which contributed to the flawed promises of the Tsar? What events contributed to the 1905 Revolution? Explain two events that have helped to create a revolutionary situation by 1905.
Things to talk about:
•   Russo-Japanese War and defeat of Russia – promised that they would win but they didn’t
•   Bloody Sunday – massacre of innocent people, reaction of Tsar
•   October Manifesto
•   General strikes,
•   sacking of five men from Putilov Steel Works,
•   mutiny at Potemkin ship,
•   Forming of Soviets in response of Bloody Sunday in 1905

My reworked answer:

First, the Russo- Japanese War stemmed foundation for the rising and unmet class expectations faced by the Russian people by late 1905. The tsar’s promise that the “might of holy Russia will crush” the “Japanese monkeys” proved to be fatal as Russia suffered defeats under Japan whom they believed they could easily defeat. In the words of Sheila Fitzpatrick, the Russo-Japanese war was a “series of disasters and humiliation on land at sea” which was due to Russia’s outdated warfare and incompetent Russian army despite its sheer size. Second, this divide between the Tsar and his people was furthered by the massacre at Bloody Sunday where those who were marching for better working conditions and an increase in wages were shot by the Cossacks who allege that they were disrupting peace. Following this, mutinies at the Potemkin ship occurred as well as general strikes demonstrating the clear divide between the Tsar and his people which helped to create a revolutionary situation by 1905 creating a “crippling effect on the Tsarist government” as historian Perfect says.
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Re: Revolutions Support Thread 2013
« Reply #56 on: May 02, 2013, 05:17:02 pm »
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Bump.

Also, how many quotes do we need to remember for the end of year? Should quotes be reserved only for the essays? Any advice as to how I should approach learning quotes?
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Re: Revolutions Support Thread 2013
« Reply #57 on: May 02, 2013, 05:49:28 pm »
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Hi Jean!
Too lazy to offer indepth advice but it's the same deal as before- lovely analysis an description but still a tad airy- seriously, seriously, bring it down with some hard stats and dates- this is what the examiners are looking for.
i.e “series of disasters and humiliation on land at sea” - what disasters? Give dates of a specific battle, one of the top of my head is the Battle of Mukden or something like that..offer casualty stats, in regards to economic consequences, cite falling bread prices- actual prices. I think I posted a response with most of these..Without these stats, you're forfeiting a significant portion of allocated marks.
Sorry to freak you out, but it's an easy fix! Just pop in some numbers or actual events, even if it sounds gaudy.

As for quotes- only use them in 10 markers and the 20 mark essay. No marks are given anywhere else. I never rote learned them, I learnt them by incorporating them into essays at every point possible and just picked them up that way..You will need to learn a good few..I had about six pages worth which is scary indeed but tis a year long conquest..! (also I really liked Revs and did too much for it, try to learn as many as you can though)

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Re: Revolutions Support Thread 2013
« Reply #58 on: May 02, 2013, 07:10:53 pm »
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Hi Jean!
Too lazy to offer indepth advice but it's the same deal as before- lovely analysis an description but still a tad airy- seriously, seriously, bring it down with some hard stats and dates- this is what the examiners are looking for.
i.e “series of disasters and humiliation on land at sea” - what disasters? Give dates of a specific battle, one of the top of my head is the Battle of Mukden or something like that..offer casualty stats, in regards to economic consequences, cite falling bread prices- actual prices. I think I posted a response with most of these..Without these stats, you're forfeiting a significant portion of allocated marks.
Sorry to freak you out, but it's an easy fix! Just pop in some numbers or actual events, even if it sounds gaudy.

As for quotes- only use them in 10 markers and the 20 mark essay. No marks are given anywhere else. I never rote learned them, I learnt them by incorporating them into essays at every point possible and just picked them up that way..You will need to learn a good few..I had about six pages worth which is scary indeed but tis a year long conquest..! (also I really liked Revs and did too much for it, try to learn as many as you can though)

Thanks for the feedback. I was advised that specific battles didn't need to be mentioned because  had to be specific. I know it's very generic. I'll look over your response again and see if I can rework my answer.
I'm still confused as to how much I need to include, really. Where do you get these facts, by the way. I'm using Malone's book. Is there any other resource out there?

I'm getting anxious about this subject. It's my lowest and I feel like class time is a big waste of time. I feel like it's when my teacher is away that I get the most done. Anyway, I'm not  here to be pathetic or to incite pity. Thanks for your help.
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Re: Revolutions Support Thread 2013
« Reply #59 on: May 02, 2013, 10:27:25 pm »
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Thanks for the feedback. I was advised that specific battles didn't need to be mentioned because  had to be specific. I know it's very generic. I'll look over your response again and see if I can rework my answer.
I'm still confused as to how much I need to include, really. Where do you get these facts, by the way. I'm using Malone's book. Is there any other resource out there?

I'm getting anxious about this subject. It's my lowest and I feel like class time is a big waste of time. I feel like it's when my teacher is away that I get the most done. Anyway, I'm not  here to be pathetic or to incite pity. Thanks for your help.

Hi Jean,
There are should be an abundance of revs resources- notably notes on this very site! Have a Checkpoints on hand because Malone alone isn't adequate m'fraid- we used a textbook called 'Revolution and reaction' or something thereof which is quite good. Check your school library...!
If you're having serious trouble/ if your teacher is inadequate, shoot me your email and I'll send you a bucket load of notes which I am too lazy to upload.
Don't tell too anxious, there's a lot to learn in revs and you'll realise by the end of the year what you need and don't need to know.
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