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On the waterfront Introduction
« on: March 04, 2013, 09:19:41 pm »
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In the final scene of On the Waterfront Terry declares “I been rattin’ on myself all these years.” He is reclaiming his conscience and declaring his new sense of morality.  Discuss.

Set on New York's oppressive water-docks, Elia Kazan's "On the waterfront" Elia Kazan’s award winning film called “On the Waterfront” (1954) follows the story of Terry Malloy, an ex prize fighterprized boxer who is struggling to decide whether to follow his conscience or remain silent under the mob. He first begins to question the mob after his participation in Joey Doyle’s death. He becomes guilt ridden and his conscience is awakened.His moral views and conscience are pushed and influenced by Edie and Father Barry. Their views differ with his own however this eventually helps to shape his own conscience and moral views

 

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Set on New York's oppressive water-docks, Elia Kazan's "On the waterfront"  follows the story of Terry Malloy, an ex prize fighter who is struggling to decide whether to follow his conscience or remain silent under the mob. Kazan shows the transformation of Terry from being a submissive follower to a man with dignity and integrity. Terry begins to free himself from Johnny Friendly's clutches when his conscience questions the mobs corrupt ways.  Edie and Father Barry play a heavy role in encouraging him to think for himself and follow his conscience. Edie's new perspective encourages Terry to learn that he had been "ratting" on himself "all these years".  Also with the support of Father Barry,  he is able to muster up the courage to testify against the mob.


Please correct prac essay! And any suggestions on what to add it in because my introduction is quite short. Thanks :)
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Re: On the waterfront Introduction
« Reply #1 on: March 04, 2013, 10:21:40 pm »
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I find it very dot point like.
If you are dedicating one paragraph to just Terry's initial response to Joey's death, I don't think that is strong enough
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Re: On the waterfront Introduction
« Reply #2 on: March 04, 2013, 10:31:56 pm »
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The best advice I got for writing OTW responses was not to start with "Elia Kazan's award winning film..."

Almost everyone uses this. Try and differentiate yourself! :)
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Re: On the waterfront Introduction
« Reply #3 on: March 05, 2013, 12:33:05 am »
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Terry Malloy, an ex prized boxer



The correct term is 'prize fighter'
No 'd', no 'boxer'

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Re: On the waterfront Introduction
« Reply #4 on: March 05, 2013, 07:00:54 pm »
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Still dot point like, try to vary sentence length or shorten two of them and combine it
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Re: On the waterfront Introduction
« Reply #5 on: March 05, 2013, 10:29:37 pm »
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Still dot point like, try to vary sentence length or shorten two of them and combine it
thanks for helping, i guess it is too late to improve since my sac is tomorrow. But i will keep it in mind ^^

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« Reply #6 on: March 05, 2013, 10:30:47 pm »
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thanks for helping, i guess it is too late to improve since my sac is tomorrow. But i will keep it in mind ^^

Oh mine too! Good luck for your SAC  :)
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Re: On the waterfront Introduction
« Reply #7 on: March 07, 2013, 12:27:45 am »
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what text/film are you studying?

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Re: On the waterfront Introduction
« Reply #8 on: March 07, 2013, 12:10:47 pm »
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what text/film are you studying?

On the Waterfront!
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Re: On the waterfront Introduction
« Reply #9 on: March 07, 2013, 10:54:40 pm »
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On the Waterfront!
awks, i  thought i quoted it! I started mine but i know my essay sounds so choppy >.< What prompt are you doing?

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Re: On the waterfront Introduction
« Reply #10 on: March 08, 2013, 11:26:44 am »
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awks, i  thought i quoted it! I started mine but i know my essay sounds so choppy >.< What prompt are you doing?

Oh, well we've actually finished studying the film! We had our SAC on Wednesday and the prompt was something like "There are many forms of betrayal in the film On the Waterfront. Discuss". It wasn't too bad I guess  :) But yea if you want any feedback on your essays or anything, I'd be happy to help out to the best of my ability!
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Re: On the waterfront Introduction
« Reply #11 on: March 08, 2013, 08:34:47 pm »
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Oh, well we've actually finished studying the film! We had our SAC on Wednesday and the prompt was something like "There are many forms of betrayal in the film On the Waterfront. Discuss". It wasn't too bad I guess  :) But yea if you want any feedback on your essays or anything, I'd be happy to help out to the best of my ability!
we got a few prompts, I chose the one about what motivates terry to confront the waterfront corruption. Oh yes i do need to improve >.< my teacher never gives out practice essays... my marks are decent but too many smart people on here :P