Literally Lauren's Practice exam language analysis

[M_BONG]

Hey guys,

I wrote this language analysis yesterday and I already posted it on Lauren's thread but just wanted to post it here so more people can see it so I can hopefully get feedback from more people


Cheers!
Any feedback would be nice - not out here looking for a mar (though I wouldn't mind one) , but perhaps feedback on whether:
* I am summarising too much
* Analysing the language enough
* Analysing effects on reader
* Having the right contention

would be nice



Thanks for your help!

[Yacoubb]

Hey guys,

I wrote this language analysis yesterday and I already posted it on Lauren's thread but just wanted to post it here so more people can see it so I can hopefully get feedback from more people


Cheers!
Any feedback would be nice - not out here looking for a mar (though I wouldn't mind one) , but perhaps feedback on whether:
* I am summarising too much
* Analysing the language enough
* Analysing effects on reader
* Having the right contention

would be nice



Thanks for your help!

Though I have not read the actual article, your analysis seems to be good! Try and make your sentences more succinct for language analysis. Also, (and we all do this), try to avoid falling into the trap of either just stating something & not indicating its effect on the reader, or mentioning a linguistic technique & effect, without the provision of an example where it is used.

Introduction: I like to have tone and audience in one sentence, to make the intro as punchy as possible. Broader context , details of publication, etc, contentiom, tone, audience and a brief mentioning of accompanying comments or visuals, should be condensed into your introduction

Otherwise pretty good analysis with great use of phrases!